9.26 F
Added 2022-11-29 23:10:57 +0000 UTCWhen I am off a writing break, do I feel more energized? No...but I do write more, and better on average. Let's see about this chapter. (30,300 Words)
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Comments
It's interesting to consider, as an absolute fan of Pirateaba and TWI, what they will value more in terms of feedback. Do they want to know any and all instances where the writing dropped you out of the story, regardless of how good the rest of the chapter was? Is that the most valuable information you can provide to help them improve in whatever ways they feel is important? So...I try to give what is asked. I've already and do continually go on about how much I love love love this story and even the long chapters. When Pirate says, tell me what you thought, is that really what they want? Or do they just want the love? I have both in large quantities and will provide either or both on demand when asked. That said, and regardless of any instances where I got dropped out of the story for a minute or two - this is the *best* story I have ever read and I read about a book a week every week every year for years and years and years. All of that to say - I'm trying to respond to what Pirate specifically asks. No offense meant ever, and I do not feel that I'm qualified to judge this writing in any way other than to know if and when something gave me trouble *for a moment* and where that happened.
Fitty Sebum
2022-12-04 14:20:07 +0000 UTCDont listen to these maggots who say this chapter was weak they are just worms with attention spam of gold fish LONG "LIVE" ETERNAL KHELT
Lohis
2022-12-04 12:07:33 +0000 UTCWhy is Gravesong under Science Fiction?
Henry Feahn
2022-12-04 05:06:19 +0000 UTCLove how the repecussions of the gods’ destruction of the souls are filtering in bit by bit, and also how Fetohep is working with Erin to indirectly prepare the world for the coming battle. Folks need to slow down and appreciate the grand scale picture being assembled here. Keep up the good work!
Adam Israel
2022-12-03 23:53:55 +0000 UTCI see a lot of complaints in these comments, but I was enraptured while reading this. It was written somewhat different to previous chapters, but the build up to the revelation was perfect.
afruitlesshippo
2022-12-02 03:56:24 +0000 UTCSome one from the new wave of humans that arrived from earth should end up in kelt properly probably engineer, mechanic, or something of like found wandering the edge of kelt something like that or ms soloist tells someone about. The place and goes
Nick Enriquez
2022-12-02 02:44:33 +0000 UTCFelt kind hard to read not gona lie
shabib bin shabib
2022-12-01 07:09:38 +0000 UTCGoW:R had a great story
JumpingPotatoSack
2022-12-01 02:03:44 +0000 UTCSome parts just felt weak, if they're not moving me I don't see them moving literal rulers. Playing with the kid stinks of politicians kissing babies on the campaign trail. Like the king of Ailendamus is going to suddenly drop downtown and play a ukulele. Like I should hope he has better things to do.
sharkattack
2022-11-30 23:21:22 +0000 UTCThe beginning of the chapter was very different. I'm going to read it again because it was so early in the morning when I read it the first time.
Fitty Sebum
2022-11-30 18:54:07 +0000 UTCSigh
Seb
2022-11-30 14:28:18 +0000 UTCI hope Emperor Laken hears from Fetohep of Khelt too. His little empire also has no starving children...
Jonathan
2022-11-30 13:15:15 +0000 UTCThe end was confusing, I don't get how showing the merchant ledgers or playing the banjo is meant to be some amazing thing. Felt like it was cut midway, like when he was starting to drop some knowledge on the art of ruling or he was about to really get into naming and shaming some places.
sharkattack
2022-11-30 12:02:54 +0000 UTCOof, Fetohep's heart wasn't the only thing broken by the fanmail ...
Ka Man Chan
2022-11-30 11:10:49 +0000 UTCI love Fetohep but this chapter could have been more concise.
chump1999
2022-11-30 10:42:23 +0000 UTCGreat chapter, I enjoyed the bitter sweetness of it all.
Nwokeji123
2022-11-30 07:31:21 +0000 UTC
