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Added 2017-10-17 15:13:13 +0000 UTCThis chapter missed out some of the details I wanted to include...but I got the main one in. (9,700 Words)
helloAndGoodbye
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Comments
I'm really sad that Toren doesn't look like he's going to have a redemption Arc, but I think Erin made the right, practical decision. I guess we'll see whether it will actually work or whether you have a surprise up your sleeve.
Nicholas Guyett
2017-10-17 18:16:17 +0000 UTCsmall errors: "How to Erin to Liscor safely, and what " -get/take/guide? "Was her really that sleep-deprived" - he? "about. How did you get there?” - 'here'? "I imbued him with the capability for rational in the fashion of Golems" -- rationale? Love the writing! Can't wait for the next chapter. :)
Ashrothe
2017-10-17 18:01:18 +0000 UTCI love your story and the world u created was driving when it came out 2day had to make my self stop reading it smh
AKi1red
2017-10-17 16:24:36 +0000 UTCYou kidder! It's not goodbye; it's only the beginning!
Dustin S.
2017-10-17 15:41:28 +0000 UTCYou're not first. I'M FIRST!
pirateaba
2017-10-17 15:26:29 +0000 UTCFirst! (Do we still do this??)
Nick Ramsey
2017-10-17 15:20:00 +0000 UTC
