Two Hundred Dollars: Independence. Ch 03
Added 2023-02-24 14:33:52 +0000 UTCComments
I can't be sure. I want that storyline to have some kind of, well... development. It's a sort of lark, so as I think of weird things for Kent and the ladies to do, I'll throw them in a story.
Xavier Torch
2023-03-01 18:44:26 +0000 UTCNever the less, is the fun non-canon storyline getting it's next chapter?
david Sanda
2023-03-01 17:28:39 +0000 UTCFirst, thanks for writing! I am definitely not going to respond with potential spoilers in your first 3 paragraphs, but you might notice Kent never really *takes* anything. More of a giver, that guy. And yes, definitely, Laura's rush is one of the issues she should look into, as she made a *lot* of assumptions. I should re-iterate here, though, that the bit with Kent and Laura's mom is a kind of Extended Universe non-canon sort of thing that I'm having fun with. I don't think I intend to let those timelines run together. Sorry. Cheers, Xav.
Xavier Torch
2023-02-28 21:09:40 +0000 UTCVery good chapter. Wouldn't have been opposed to a slower build up, but sticking her toes in the deep end isn't bad either. I'd rather not see her jump full into the deep end though. A gradual wading into the deep end would be more satisfying. She's feeling very freed right now but skipping most/all foreplay seems a wasted opportunity. Too bad he's a quick shooter, I suspect that if she hadn't have worked up the moment in her head since leaving class, she wouldn't have been able to get off. If they continue as regulars, it could be very interesting watching Laura opening up about what turns her on, and even more interesting seeing how someone else might read into her past with Bailey/Kent. Who knows maybe they all end up playing together. Or perhaps she wants him to watch Kent with her to learn? I love that Laura ran to Kent/Bailey right afterwards. I think my ideal situation would be that I'd like to see her beg Bailey (edit: not that she has to beg) to let Kent take her again (so she can compare in her mind). Bailey taking control of the situation making Laura tell them all about her encounter before guiding the nights activities. Kent has always seemed pretty straightforward. Every chapter that moves forward without him telling Bailey about Laura's mom and his new work seems to undermine that character trait. I am anxious to see how that conversation goes. I'd like to see Bailey eventually running them. When she plays the dominant character with Laura it's always very hot. Another road map item with interest along those lines would be when/if Baily/Kent tell Laura about those services.
Jason
2023-02-28 19:28:55 +0000 UTC
