[Insider] Toxic Attraction: Chapter 22 Alpha Draft
Added 2024-09-20 19:27:30 +0000 UTCHey folks, I feel like I have disappeared into
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Question for all: Sarah’s demeaning sex talk to Dan, her trash talking to and about Dan, to an outsider may seem disrespectful. While it’s all part of the sex play do you think it will lead to actual disrespect of her husband where it will affect the marriage?
Sigma
2024-10-05 17:25:43 +0000 UTCHe would lose a substantial sum of money from Peter. Something he is depending on to transform his shit financial situation. Plus Byron would think back to Sarah’s suspicious action of looking under his desk. He would put 2n2 together and realise Sarah was working with Dan to gather information in some way on the project. He would question Dan closely on exactly what Peter wanted from Him. It would put him on his guard and ruin any chance of either Jesse or Dan planting the spying device. Is that enough?
Royston smith
2024-09-27 06:03:10 +0000 UTCIn the update during the rimjob, would be hot if Lester makes Sarah tell Dan how it tastes 😋
Lelouch Lamperouch
2024-09-26 21:35:36 +0000 UTCYea I agree gotta be Richard.
Ghost Writer
2024-09-26 21:25:08 +0000 UTCI like the main focus being on Sarah/Dan/Lester but I agree that bringing in secondary/tertiary characters to fuck with them is a step in the right direction Expands the world building, and breaks up Sarah/Lester scenes. Ive seen comments of "this is too repetitive. Every chapter is just a vehicle for Lester to get Sarah in bed" Then other comments of "I didnt like this random guy becoming part of the story. I only want Sarah and Lester" Obviously you cant placate both audiences, but I really liked that Byron's scene was sandwiched between two Lester scenes. Thats probably the closest Don could get to placating both sides of the coin
tim
2024-09-26 20:59:59 +0000 UTCDan could just say he was approached by Peter as well and hes confessing cuz he knows Jesse is on it and fuck him. Dan offers it as an olive branch to Byron. Its not like Byron trusts Dan now so what does he have to lose?
tim
2024-09-26 20:50:10 +0000 UTCWow, you are thinking ahead Chinook.! I disagree with you on Byron/Jesse though. If we just had the Sarah/Lester scenario every week I for one would be bored. This story rocks because it has so many aspects to it. Don’t you want to find out what happens with Richard?
Royston smith
2024-09-26 20:39:21 +0000 UTCOverall I thought this chapter was good. Personally I’m just here for the Lester and Sarah parts so I think the Byron plot line is a waste of space on the page. Sarah already slept with him willingly and he wasn’t particularly good so he has been effectively neutered as far as a bull/threat goes. Loved that Sarah admission that Lester can fuck her where ever now in front of Dan. Because of this I’d like to see Dan get his life back on track some. Get some wins at work (but still having to live in Chicago so Sarah has to visit) so we can see that Lester doesn’t need to pay the rent any more to fuck Sarah. Also would like to see Lester at the hospital some more now too since she agreed to let him fuck we there too. Personally my thinking is have Lester find crap on the CEO of the hospital. Finally have Sarah promoted to CEO. She name Lester head of IT and Dan gets his side business successful enough he can move home. But Lester still fucks Sarah whenever he wants and continues to try and take her away from Dan.
Chinookfan72
2024-09-26 20:30:36 +0000 UTCI would also like to have some internal musing from Sarah on the size of Jesse’s cock. She is clearly remembering its “considerable” size from when they gyrated and ground on the dance floor in 15, during this passage: “Sarah swirled her wine glass. All the men waiting with baited breath to hear what she’d say next. She turned to Byron, “Did you know that Jessie is a really, really good dancer?” Byron shrugged, “Had no idea.” Sarah cast her gaze to Jessie again, “It’s true. Jessie, do you know what they say about men who dance really well?” Jessie looked like a dear in the headlight, “No…” “Hmmmm,” Sarah said gazing Jessie up and down, “Too bad.” I think she should come out and say what she is thinking here. She must wonder if Jesses cock can rival Lester’s. Wouldn’t it be interesting if it did?
Royston smith
2024-09-26 20:26:37 +0000 UTCOk, so one thing seemed to be a bit difficult to believe in this story Don. Dan suppresses Jesse by threatening to tell Byron about Peter. Is this believable? Surely Jesse realises that if Dan did that he would also have to explain how he knew about Peter. Jesse may be timid and pliable but he isn’t stupid. He figured out what was going on with Lester and Sarah and exploited the situation. by pretending to be Dan. He used his knowledge of their relationship to wheedle his way in with Byron using Byron’s regard for Dan’s expertise with building projects. I would really like to read of Jesse getting his crack at Sarah, so I think he should push back at Dan by saying “if you dropped me in it with Byron isn’t Byron going to wonder about your relationship with Peter too”? You burn me and I will burn you buddy. Then he should push for time with Sarah with Byron.
Royston smith
2024-09-26 20:05:53 +0000 UTCI'm sorry to say this story has run it's course, so much so that this the first time I just couldn't be bothered to read it.
Tim
2024-09-26 11:52:41 +0000 UTCLove the depravity comment, although I personally think it would be more interesting if Jesse became a second cuck that never got to fuck Sarah and is always naively lusting over her, thinking that he might get a chance with her, only for that to never happen and given what happened in this chapter Lestter has incentive to put Jesse in his place. Imagine if Jesse also became a cuck, and one night Sarah doesn't let Dan watch but she lets Jesse.
ojapa O
2024-09-25 20:44:41 +0000 UTCWould like to see: - I personally don’t think Byron should cum inside Sarah yet. - I would have liked to see Sarah responding to Byron commenting on inviting Dan to watch. - When Sarah is looking at Dan through the window while Byron is fucking her it would be hot if you described how she was feeling at that moment (aroused, how messed up that was and how much she was enjoying the situation, degrading and humiliating Dan turns her on even when he is not there) - “Now that you are making Dan work for you I finally have the excuse to get what I want”. I would like to see Byron trying his hardest to not fire Dan so that Sarah can keep getting what she wants :). - I would like to see a few words of how aroused Dan felt while watching Sarah and Lester fuck in front of him in the sofa - I really want to see Jesse turning into a cuck (maybe a different type from Dan, that triggers other buttons in Sarah), especially after how he talked with Lester. Jesse does not give the vibes of someone that should get to fuck Sarah in my opinion. I think it would be more fun and interesting to see Sarah toying and playing with him psychologically feeling powerful over him while Jesse naively tries to win her over but never getting her. Lester putting him into his place like he did with Dan I would be an insane power play in my opinion. - I really want to see Dan requesting a Rimjob from Sarah, and see her tease, provoke and deny him - I want to read more peephole scenes with Dan, the one in chapter 10 was really amazing but it was at a different point of the story. I think this scenario is very unique and would love to see more Some specific corrections/suggestions: - “Fuck that look she gave me...” Should probably be between quotes - “I want you to look at Dan” and tell him —> “I want you to look at Dan in his eyes and tell him” - Pushing his entire length onto the married women —> Pushing his entire length onto the married woman
ojapa O
2024-09-25 20:39:25 +0000 UTCThings I enjoyed: I like that Sarah contemplates holding back at first, only to surrender completely to her lust at all three sex scenes (the first one she contemplates going back to Dan’s bedroom, the second one she contemplates finishing the blowjob earlier, and the last one she still checks on Dan before fully giving in to Lester). Meaning that there are more boundaries to be pushed and I love seeing how much of a slut she becomes once she is truly horny. I loved having Sarah fucking Lester while Dan is sleeping, the fact that she screams loudly and moans shamelessly while having sex with Lester not caring if Dan wakes up (because she knew that he likes watching her anyway) to her loud moans was very hot. Also imagining Dan catching Sarah the very next day and her being sort of being impish and sexily nonchalant about it since she knew Dan loves her acting like and is powerless to stop her. I always love these sexy witty dialogues coming from Sarah (props to DS to writing them so well), the banter between Sarah and Byron and her manipulating and seducing him back to his office. I was on the edge of my seat not really knowing whether she would actually fuck Byron, the fact that she fucked him for nothing, and that also she deliberately chose to not make him cum quickly with her mouth and ended up fucking him was great. When Lester started kissing her, Dan didn’t do anything, After Dan kicked out Lester during chapter 20, I thought things would slow down a little, however with all that happened in the last two chapters with Dan’s inaction and not even saying the safe word I don’t see why he should push back too much now (and I hope he doesn’t), I can see him being conflicted about it and lightly confronting Sarah but I hope to see them getting over that easily by Sarah teasing him and making him succumb to his desires like she did in the car with Dan on chapter 17 (which I prefer); or Sarah agreeing to tone it down but succumbing to her desires. - I enjoyed reading Sarah internally mentioning that Lester’s cock is her favorite, think it was a nice little detail. - Loved the fact that Sarah could make Byron cum quickly if she wanted but didn’t. - I would have liked to see some teasing dialogue from Sarah to Dan after she fucked Byron or right before she went to his office (brushing her hand against his cock and saying something filthy in his ear), Sarah could also lightly tease Jesse making him jealous since she knows he likes her as well. - I like that Sarah still checks on Dan when they come back to the apartment in the later part of the chapter, and sizes him up while Lester is kissing her, to see if he’s going to say Pineapple, she clearly still values Dan’s input and I like that - Reading Sarah tell Lester that she loves him in front of Dan was so wrong and hot.
ojapa O
2024-09-25 20:39:12 +0000 UTCThis was one of my personal favorite chapters. Reading three back-to-back steamy sex scene in a single chapter was super hot and it also showcased the new phase that we have entered in the story. it’s so great to see many chapters of build up finally paying off, and I hope that we stay in this current phase of the story for a while, I would personally enjoy reading many different scenarios in it. Like with any book I don’t think every chapter needs to be plot-heavy and similarly not every chapter needs to be action-heavy. I feel like the previous chapter was much more plot packed and setting things up, so I don’t see a problem with this chapter being more action packed and more of a feast for the senses. Also like with any series watching or reading a chapter a week feels very different from seeing the whole story as a cohesive piece. If you read all chapters at once the pacing is very different and it might even feel too fast at times (for example how some people are commenting on how fast Sarah had sex with Byron and let him cum inside her) One thing that I didn’t see a lot in the chapter and would like to see more is Sarah teasing Dan, and also knowing how she gets off to teasing him and degrading him. I also would have liked to read on Dan’s toxic emotions in the chapter in the last scene. On a high level, I personally think the story should stay around Sarah enjoying and getting addicted to being a slut and also the feeling of power she has over other men (since chapter 1 she always enjoyed pushing Dan’s buttons, and now she is enjoying pushing other men’s button) including enjoying teasing Dan and driving him crazy, making Lester and other men lust for her, and seeing her constantly compete with Lester for “who’s in charge” in their taboo relationship.
ojapa O
2024-09-25 20:39:03 +0000 UTCI think the only thing I wish happened in this chapter is Dan and Sarah talking about what happened after the first scene with Lester and the one with Byron. Would have liked to see them talk about that.
Ghost Writer
2024-09-25 18:43:49 +0000 UTCI would also like the depravity and ownership of Lester to continue. I like your ideas above, I would also like to see Sarah and Dan get punished further for fucking Byron and other things by watching Sarah give BJ's/Rim jobs, really low life stuff to a character like Cash and other homeless dirty obese friends, or even better... bring back the nerds from D&D and make Sarah service them all in different degrading fashions as Lester commands and Dan watches and solo masturbates again.
whiterhino
2024-09-25 16:10:43 +0000 UTCI’ve changed my whole way of thinking now. I want the depravity to continue, Lester has already won so I’m in the Lester camp now. He will continue to deny Dan access to Sarah until “ I want you to be on your knees and beg me to let you fuck your wife “ which Dan will do. “ only if you beg me to put a baby in her and tell her to come off birth control.” Which Dan will do. “ you invite Jesse to your house, you will strip your wife for Jesse and tell her that she is his for the night in your bed while you sit in the chair and encourage him while you film it for me.” Which Dan will do. I want Lester to own Dans whole family.
Mel
2024-09-24 23:03:29 +0000 UTCIn this Alpha Draft these are my thoughts on what I think could be improved, followed by what I liked: What I'd Like Seeing Improved: - At the drinks with Byron, the flirting at the table was much too short. It became physical at the table much too quickly. There was no real lead up, no tension build-up. It was like Sarah jumped right into feeling up Byron and suggesting leaving together. - It was way too easy for Byron just to take her across the street without any questions or even a minor pushback from Dan or Jesse. I would think Byron would appreciate a little bit of competition in no only fending off Dan's concerns especially since he knows Dan doesn't/didn't want his wife to come up to TLG. Plus it would give Byron another opportunity to demean and cuck Dan in front of his wife, a good power play. - What were Sarah's thoughts as she left the table or when walking across the street? What was her concern, focus, anxiety, stress, emotions? She must have had some trepidation of leaving her husband behind, knowing she was leaving with a predator. - On the elevator ride up Byron "draped" his arm across her shoulders and ogled her cleavage. She couldn't have just ignored that, so we need to read of her thoughts/plans/feelings at that time as the elevator rose and rose and rose in the building. - When they entered the offices there was no description of the office setup, the power and influence the offices projected, Byron didn't give a tour but went straight to his office. Byron could have led her along the hallways describing each of the offices (which might have been helpful in the future for Sarah or Dan to find the servers). She would have also noticed cameras at that time which would have put her on alert. And during this office tour Byron could have been more handsy, more sexual innuendo in his conversation, ("here is our exciting server room, buzzing and humming with our digital efforts, haha" "here is our inner sanctum conference room where we plot our insertion into the sweet spot of our competitors, bending their will to fulfill our needs" "here is our executive spa where we shower and rinse off the sheen of our sweat after fucking up the competition, making cucks out of those who defy us" - In his office why did she ask for water and immediately say "while I get more comfortable" which certainly implied immediate sex? There was no thought or reasoning in her mind that we could read and understand. - Sarah got to the blow job much to quickly. As before, there was no teasing, tension, build-up to the act. I would have thought she'd have second thoughts or at least lead him along a little bit. At least during the blow-job her thoughts began to be described. I just wish as a reader we got tense and worked up at the process leading to the blow job. This was the supposed to be the blackmail portion of the story, but I didn't get the sense there was any blackmail to Sarah. - Sarah was way to quick to shed her pants. Again, another opportunity to make Byron work for it. She could have done a striptease, or command Byron to eat her out first and make him work for it. What I Liked: - My goodness, Lester will lose all control with his statement about "burn them all to the ground" Wow! Could this also mean emotionally he might now make some mistakes in his revenge? - Other than with Byron, all the other sex scenes were superb. - Sarah in two different sex sessions saying "I love you!" - Dan taking control over Jesse. Great segment there. Just wonder since Jesse can be so easily manipulated, what Lester will have him do. Jesse is a wild card to be used in this story. - "All the shit he's caused" was said by Byron while getting his blow job. What is this he's referring to about Dan? I just thought it was an interesting statement to make. Overall the plot line is getting really good. Amazing how Don can still include Lester in all of this but advance the plot now through Byron. I just think the blackmail portion of this isn't as titillating as it could have been.
Sigma
2024-09-24 16:36:28 +0000 UTCSo you're spending 35$/mo for a porn story to skip all the porn parts? Yea, we're the idiots lol Now show me how easy it is to unsub again
tim
2024-09-23 23:29:36 +0000 UTCAgain. Feel free to stay off my post. Shut your trap and stay on the posts where you and everyone else is jerking off to this. Also you idiot. It's not hard to resub and skim the chps. It's not like there is that much story to it.
achilles
2024-09-23 22:28:29 +0000 UTCHey Tim, few words for you. Ok buddy. Shut your trap. I dont go on peoples post posting negative shit. You stay off mine .
achilles
2024-09-23 22:27:31 +0000 UTCLester says Sarah is going to fuck someone she hates…I think the only candidate is Richard. Stay tuned
J Lewis
2024-09-23 19:09:25 +0000 UTCYou guys realize this is patreon right? Where people can post things and other people can pay for it because they like it. If he is catering to a specific clientele, thats fine. They are giving him money and getting entertainment that they enjoy. If anyone is being exploited here its you guys because you keep paying month after month at the highest tier for something you claim to hate. Its kind of pathetic. And no one believes that you are just so happening to drop in on occasion. You're reading every chapter. We can tell lol. Just cancel your subs already. Nobody cares lol
tim
2024-09-23 18:20:02 +0000 UTCIf 35$ is so inconsequential to you why does it matter how many chapters Don writes? You're basically just throwing pennies at him I guess lol
tim
2024-09-23 18:09:02 +0000 UTCChances are when Dan wakes up in that chair Sarah is either in Lester’s room or they are together in the shower…pretty sure Dan and Sarah will not wake up and have pancakes in the kitchen going over the previous night’s events.
J Lewis
2024-09-23 17:50:44 +0000 UTCYes, I thought it was pure gold too Z. I already posted to that effect. Loved her too confident belief she could plant the device and then has to go through with fucking Byron for no gain in the end. However, she did seem to enjoy it!
Royston smith
2024-09-23 17:46:39 +0000 UTCI don't think Jessie is next. Lester i think takes Sarah back to an encounter like the one with cash. Misc homeless person. Or he let's the new hospital chief get a crack at her. Maybe for a contract increase with the hospital.
JC Ramis
2024-09-23 17:38:47 +0000 UTCContrary to others, I loved the Byron scene - this is something fresh and new for this series. Lester scenes are all the same since the very beginning, so there’s no excitement in them for me personally. Plus, I would prefer if Don focused on finishing short stories rather than pumping out uninspired chapters of TA, but I’ve been going on about it like a broken record for months.
Z
2024-09-23 16:24:43 +0000 UTCWho is Clive?
Royston smith
2024-09-23 08:20:08 +0000 UTCAvid? Is that you?
Jake
2024-09-23 04:11:50 +0000 UTCPretty sure that is going to happen next chapter and Dan is going to have to listen to them all night. It's the obvious direction of the story
achilles
2024-09-22 21:31:35 +0000 UTCI think it would be pretty hot if at the end Lester would carry Sarah back to his room. Just to cement how much he "owns" her.
Xehanort
2024-09-22 21:09:41 +0000 UTCYes Dodge, a good point. I noticed that. The only reason Dan didn’t pursue it then was he was in thrall to the scene in front of him. Lester previously swore he didn’t know who Jesse was but Dan will ask Jesse if he knows Lester and it may all come out.
Royston smith
2024-09-22 20:23:18 +0000 UTCYES...SO TRUE....I could have seen the last sex scene if Dan wasn't there..maybe setup to where he left for work and she was heading back home and was ambushed by Lester..but now..waste of time and money..
Mike Kogel
2024-09-22 18:17:33 +0000 UTCHaven’t seen it mentioned yet, so I will go ahead and bring it up. How long before Dan realizes that Lester asking about Jesse was a big revelation? No way for Lester to know he was on the trip and that he was promised some alone time with Sara. So far, Jesse has told Dan everything and when confronted, probably will again. How will Dan use this new info and will he start to learn just how much Lester is involved in the lives. Enjoyed the chapter overall and am looking forward to the final version. One observation, would have loved to see Sara display some emotion when she says “I love you”. Maybe some tears or wrapping herself around Lester as she whispers it in his ear…
Dodge1109
2024-09-22 16:04:59 +0000 UTCOh, one other point. Tell Roxy the models she uses are way too thin and young. Sarah is much curvier , and more voluptuous than they are and she isa milf not a teenager.
Royston smith
2024-09-22 14:32:35 +0000 UTCThis is what I would call a bumper edition in more ways than one. 3 sex scenes, plus Lester’s final triumph over Dan and Sarah’s full corruption and subjugation to Lester. Loved the bit where she told Dan to take his cock out “Yeah,” Sarah said eying it, “Stroke it for me. Stroke that pathetic cock while Lester fucks the shit out of me.” In that phrase is encapsulated Lester’s final victory. The irony is Lester has triumphed over Dan but finds he has a competitor for Sarah’s pussy he didn’t know about, Byron.The Byron scene was pure gold. Sarah has to submit to Byron as she has backed herself into a corner by asking for a tour of his office. Then she finds there is no computer to plug Peter’s device into! So, it looks like they will have to go back to Minnesota again! Another irony. So, an exceptional chapter with only one slight blemish. I cannot see Sarah would fall in love with Lester. She says she loves him at the end of the the first sex scene and it appears to be spontaneous. I know others have canvassed for it so happy to leave it in if I am in the minority, but my vote would be to take it out. Other than that Don, it’s well nigh perfect. I doff my cap to you.
Royston smith
2024-09-22 14:14:06 +0000 UTCI guess I liked it more than some....Wow, I love the toned, fit, blonde mother of two has now given two dirty losers rimjobs in their hairy dirty holes, thats hot to lower herself way below her once high standards. I would like to hear more pregnancy talk, thats a turn on. I also like Lester talked about sharing her and she said she would do it, hopefully she gets real nasty with other losers before it concludes, maybe even Cash and his homeless friends, keep it up DS, nice work.
whiterhino
2024-09-22 14:04:16 +0000 UTCSarah could have gotten out of taking Byron’s load unprotected in a few ways I can think of if she wanted to. She could’ve said she had her period and finished him with the BJ. She could have insisted on just the BJ or on a condom. She could’ve pulled away when he pushed in unprotected. Definitely think it’s hot that she fucked him but don’t like him nutting inside. Wouldn’t be surprised if now she turns up pregnant in 23 and we have to wonder who the father is. Also think that her experience with Byron pushed her deeper into Lester’s arms when yet another man isn’t as good as Lester and she thinks to herself that she misses him.
Robert Smith
2024-09-21 12:08:14 +0000 UTCGiven how fast this moved, I wonder if it's a dream sequence...?
SierraDelta
2024-09-21 11:52:49 +0000 UTCYeah. I don't know why Don just doesn't give a statement saying hey, this is what Ive got planned. It's going to be x number of chs. This way people will know when the ending might occur and those of us not interested in bull shit like this ch can leave, let the cucks have their beat session for the duration of the story and we come back to read the ending. I think this would make everyone happy. Do I want to read anymore of this nonsense, fuck no. I dont read it as it is. I skim looking for extended dialogue where there isnt sex for a story and i got about 10% story this ch. One dude in particular on discord will say I can just hear it, why are u wasting 35 dollars to read it then. Buddy and you know who you are. If 35 dollars is that much money to you, why are u spending it on smut? I just want to read the conclusion to see how it "magically" all ties in. I keep hoping there will be linear direction to the story to a possible conclusion i mean after 22 chs one would think that's plausible but it's just going round and round in circles.
achilles
2024-09-21 10:30:23 +0000 UTCYeah because its being totally driven by the cuck crowd on his discord and here and for the purpose of monetary gain. Clearly from the last scene it's going to where she is now in love with Lester and Dan will be jerking off to it. They are in it together? Hardly. And don't pull the card she is just saying it during sex because it gets her, Lester, Bryon off. Remember the smirk Dan mentions a couple time in the story, yeah. The problem with this story is Don thinks the slate will just magically be wiped clean if everything comes out showing Lester is a bad guy and Dan/Sarah will realize they been had. No way. At some point Sarahs actions are going to have to be judged and she is going to have to be held accountable and the simple Lester got us good aint going to do it. Just give a chapter number that will be the ending, 30, 35 whatever. People like me will disappear and this particular crowd can enjoy their story.
achilles
2024-09-21 10:19:07 +0000 UTCPandering to a certain crowd. I will 100 percent agree with you. The difference between the last two chs are substantial. If you read the last chapter you might think things are starting to develop to a specific end point but nope. Too much bitching from the cuck crowd and low and behold ch 22. I mean what is this now 14-15 chapters of Sarah being a whore and now it's got to the point where she is calling Dan's dick pathetic. lol. Redeemable. Pull your head out your ass its not possible if the plot goes this route and he is so set on her being a redeemable character its nauseating. I mean look at this chapter. What story is there? There isn't one. Tiny bits here and there but its 90% Sarah fucking and humiliating Dan. Finish the Dam story Don or give us a chapter number where the ending will occur. This way people like me, Tim and others can leave and come back to what we want. A story and a ending
achilles
2024-09-21 10:13:02 +0000 UTCGood point. A big error!
Royston smith
2024-09-21 06:07:19 +0000 UTCI like the idea of her doing something like this just to illustrate the uniqueness of the relationship with Lester. Maybe she ponders something like a a sense of betrayal to Lester and a desire for Byron to do something lesser than what she does with Lester ..
Bob James
2024-09-21 04:52:09 +0000 UTCIt took me a while but I have to say that compared to the last chapter, I really like the development again. The connection between Sarah and Lester in particular is on a new level. The "I love you" scene is just great. I'm really excited to see how Sarah will fall even further for Lester and eventually get pregnant by him? I just didn't like the Byron scene so much, how willing Sarah is to let a third person come inside her unprotected. It would have been more believable if he pulled out at the last moment because Sarah shouted that she wasn't using birth control. All in all, a great chapter.
JPaxx
2024-09-21 04:47:55 +0000 UTCStory is over...thought there might be a chance after Byron fuck scene with both Dan and Sarah seeing if Lester could agree to help..ending fuck scene made clear where this story is going...it's been a nice ride
Mike Kogel
2024-09-21 03:52:26 +0000 UTCEnjoyed it immensely. I like Sarah's evolution. I could read about Sarah and Lester fucking for an entire chapter. Maybe next time Lester could go for seconds right after finishing.
John Lewis
2024-09-21 03:44:43 +0000 UTCEnjoyed the Sarah Lester initial scene where she willingly goes to his room to scratch the itch, but the Byron scene seemed to lack the build up, and was disappointed during the last Lester Sarah Dan scene where Lester states he will fuck Sarah wherever he wants and whenever he wants without any push back from Dan? Really! At this stage I expected Dan to run with the initial back and forth between Sarah and Lester but stand up to Lester with a firm " if you step foot in my house again , you will need to be carried out to the ambulance. Everything else is fair game but not my house! " Sarah would have gotten off on the two of them fighting over her and Lester would not have complete control again....a little disappointed
Fuzzy Shark
2024-09-21 02:15:19 +0000 UTCI rejoined after months, to see where this story was going. I laughed so hard. I dont even have to read the intervening months to know that "Don" is still framing his monthly submissions based entirely around a single utterance or scene with Sarah. It's beyond obvious to anyone with a braincell that "Don" is placating to a select clientele who are all in. They don't care whether or not the story makes sense, is realistic, or could ever possibly be published by anyone other than "Don." They are entirely happy to suspend disbelief. As someone who legitimately cares about plot, character development, and verisimilitude, this story left me ages ago. It's why I quit months ago, and why I had to join again. I had to see if this was exploitation, or a well conceived plot that I simply could not envision. There is nothing to envision here except for preposterous scenarios with characters that feed the imagination of self professed incels, men with low self esteem, men with body image issues, and men who are naturally submissive. This is a predatory story, meant to exploit your characteristics. If it was just a story, it would have been plotted far differently and wouldn't have lasted for 2 years with new plots constantly introduced. Imagine my surprise that nothing has changed except for the wife being more of a whore, her family doesn't matter, Dan doesn't matter, Dan is still a nonentity in the story with zero agency, and Sarah now says she loves Lester. It's only taken 2 years. And she is not on birth control and still not pregnant. Gee, that doesn't stand out. The same reasons why I called "Don" out as a hack months ago are the same now. He isn't a serious writer. He is just out to make money. He once wrote fake financial advice books that went no where. Now he is exploiting weak ass men and, y'all fall for it. He could care less what anyone posts here. He's making a mint on your fetish. That he might delete this comment would possibly suggest otherwise, but I'm guessing he won't because he doesn't care. He's pandering. Even if he does? It won't change my opinion. Hell, he probably got off when Clive fucked his wife. (I wrote that specifically to see how long it takes)
TimothyS
2024-09-21 00:55:10 +0000 UTCThis was an uninspired chapter.
Titus
2024-09-21 00:49:10 +0000 UTCIs it Lester Mathews or is it Lester Marshall???
Sigma
2024-09-21 00:24:52 +0000 UTCAssuming Dan and Sarah aren’t going to retreat…I don’t see many chapters left in this tale…but hey I liked Chapter 22
J Lewis
2024-09-20 23:36:11 +0000 UTCThe whole control plot seems to be changing, I love the dialogue of Lester coaching Sarah with Dan while he fucks her, but after she fucks a few more people and suffers some degrading moments I think the story has to start coming to a conclusion.
Mel
2024-09-20 21:52:55 +0000 UTCYawn. Well, few things to surmise here. Looks like Dan is going to be sidelined unless Lester allows Sarah to fuck her husband. Looks like Sarah will not only be fucking Byron but now Jesse as ordered by Lester. We are not anywhere close to any form of resolution in this story at all. It just goes round and round and round the cuck humiliation circle. I get it Don's got to pay the bills. But don't fucking cop no stance on your discord about this cumdump being redeemable. Unless your just a complete delusional fool with a traumatic brain injury there is no way anyone reading this with their pants not at their ankles will think so. In fact its beginning hard to even argue that she is even a likeable character. Oh and Dan the hero of the story. Please. He is the biggest pussy I have ever seen/read/heard of. Jesus. lol.
achilles
2024-09-20 21:18:52 +0000 UTCThis hits hard.
Bob James
2024-09-20 20:59:50 +0000 UTCIn with the first like. Love it 🥳🥳🤣😄
Pater Noster
2024-09-20 19:38:38 +0000 UTC
