DonSilverStories - Toxic Attraction Chapter 16

Great chapter, love it, hoping for Sarah to start sleeping in Lester's room.

Reader79

2024-10-20 19:08:20 +0000 UTC

Well, it’s probably too late seeing how you have already written more chapters. But I find Dan to be a very unsympathetic character. He can’t even own. His shit would’ve beat him senseless by now, or started a fans only page and videoed everything she did with him that would be my source of income.

FU

2024-07-06 03:07:06 +0000 UTC

This one didn't work for me at all. I like DnD, but I ended up skimming over the whole game. It didn't feel like it advanced anything—more like a place holder chapter. I'm wondering if is getting drawn out too far—chapter 19 makes close to 300,000 words, which would be 4 or 5 typical erotica novels (or even more). Hopefully, the next chapters get back on track and more focused on developing the characters

Your Best Supporter

2024-07-03 20:12:48 +0000 UTC

Can anyone provide a score out of 10 on TA chapter 17 from the Insiders Draft Ch17

Gee

2024-04-24 23:13:47 +0000 UTC

I really like this story and I am hoping that Sarah continue to get into Lester, perhaps gets her own sexy D&D outfit to tease the other guys and play with him again; perhaps she even stars learning about the game so she can play. I hope Jessie doesn't get anywhere, he is my least favorite character. Dan also sometimes feels like too much of an idiot. I was glad to see him show a modicum of awareness at the end of the last chapter.

Traycir

2024-04-21 14:37:27 +0000 UTC

Wondering the same thing! Are the drafts very different?

Traycir

2024-04-21 14:34:34 +0000 UTC

I think Sarah does spend the night. But maybe Dan sees her looking at D&D stuff online and she tells him se wants to be ready if they play again. I also would like to see her go to another game with Lester, this time she picks a sexy D&D themed costume. I like that she is starting to sort of initiate some thngs on her own.

Traycir

2024-04-21 14:33:49 +0000 UTC

I think that's the answer, or it might not be his father's firm, perhaps an uncle or something similar.

Traycir

2024-04-21 14:29:45 +0000 UTC

I'm agree with a. 1089, the S. 's night spent in the Lester'bed will be a must.. But it would also be fun to see D. appear to the whole nerd group like a perverted spy (go Eugene!) of the "new couple".

Jap

2024-04-21 08:53:42 +0000 UTC

I see 17's draft is already out. Is there any way to know if it's worth to upgrade membership and read ? I am regular member right now

alexander1089

2024-04-19 22:57:40 +0000 UTC

Yes, could be. Perhaps as an extension of 16, that night. I also wonder if the 2 cocks scenario will raise its head.

Royston smith

2024-04-19 15:06:25 +0000 UTC

Have there been any updates from Don on when TA17 will be released to insiders? It’s been over a month since TA16 insiders edition was released already - I’m ready!

Robert Smith

2024-04-19 13:19:47 +0000 UTC

I think Sarah will finally spend the night with Lester

alexander1089

2024-04-19 12:33:24 +0000 UTC

So, any bets on which way the next instalment will go?

Royston smith

2024-04-18 19:17:58 +0000 UTC

Incredible

MississippiExhib

2024-04-15 17:24:55 +0000 UTC

I cannot wait for the next chapter lol

alexander1089

2024-04-12 14:08:41 +0000 UTC

Accidentaly hit return. I think she's ready. She wanted Lester to join her. Not Dan.

TuwatchU

2024-04-10 14:24:40 +0000 UTC

This ties back to Middleton, when Sarah and Lester were in the shower the next morning. He tells her he wanted to walk in on her the first time she was there. Her reply was, "Why didn't you." "You weren't ready."

TuwatchU

2024-04-10 14:22:54 +0000 UTC

But she sleeps in and Dan wakes up and realizes Sarah's in Lester's room. Then he hears the low moans of morning lovemaking.

TuwatchU

2024-04-10 14:05:12 +0000 UTC

I'm not sure what happens with the John scenario, but something will. One scenario I envision is during Lester's next visit when he fucks Sarah in her office and co-workers start to talk. "I wonder what's going on between Sarah and that Lester guy. Seems they're pretty friendly." "I'll admit it looks like something may be going on. But Sarah and a guy like Lester?" laughter, "Get real. Sarah would never go for a guy like that."

TuwatchU

2024-04-10 13:52:33 +0000 UTC

Family connections

Gee

2024-04-07 13:55:36 +0000 UTC

I think it's definitely family connections. I assume that the whole 'toxic email' thing that was so disastrous for Dan's company was hushed up.

Darrow

2024-04-07 03:00:53 +0000 UTC

"I imagined that the Detestable Liaisons character would be introduced in Toxic Attraction through Courtney and perhaps marc as well, either linking her closely to one of the nerds or other characters, or presenting her as an additional challenge to one of the protagonists of this story. Perhaps also consider adding a female "nerd" character.

Edel

2024-04-06 22:50:36 +0000 UTC

Lester can easily claim he had the procedure reversed. It can be done up to 10 years after the initial vasectomy.

Fuzzy Shark

2024-04-06 10:14:28 +0000 UTC

Hi Roy. S., it happens when D., after the game in the living room, "slid into his room", in the 4th paragraph. S. is imagining D. 'possible reactions to her show...

Jap

2024-04-06 08:26:03 +0000 UTC

I wonder if Sarah squirts? She seemed to come close to it in this chapter when she jumped off Lester after he twitched inside her when she was coming.

Royston smith

2024-04-06 07:16:46 +0000 UTC

Cant find this at all Jap.

Royston smith

2024-04-06 07:12:08 +0000 UTC

If Lester does get Sarah to wear a princess Leiea slave outfit in some scenario, will he play Jabba the Hut?

Royston smith

2024-04-06 07:10:31 +0000 UTC

I think its Jesse’s Father’s firm and he wanted Jesse to start at the bottom with Walts firm, a friend of the family, rather than his own as a learning experience. When he gets fired he has no option but to employ him in his own firm.

Royston smith

2024-04-06 07:07:25 +0000 UTC

Yes, i am wondering if its his Father’s firm and he has made Jesse a Director? Its the only way he could go from office junior to Director.

Royston smith

2024-04-06 07:03:29 +0000 UTC

Maybe Lester had something to do with it, helping Jesse get a top job knowing how Dan would feel about it?

Sigma

2024-04-06 02:23:22 +0000 UTC

Absolutely, whether subconscious or intentional Sarah was hoping Lester would join her in the shower for round 2. Sarah claimed she needed to check in with Dan but she wanted Lester to take the option away, she clearly loves when Lester bends the rules until they break.

kombucha Tom

2024-04-06 00:48:14 +0000 UTC

RD you're missing the basic point, the odds are higher that she will not get pregnant than she will. The risk is that she can get pregnant, and she doesn't know it. I think it would be hot for the discussion to come up in the heat of the moment where one or the other says something about knocking her up, and she says, "I wish you could!"

neegan

2024-04-05 23:39:06 +0000 UTC

Yes , his Father. But even if his Father got him a new job going from a junior employee at Walts firm to a Director at another seems a big jump.

Royston smith

2024-04-05 23:03:49 +0000 UTC

Didn't Jesse have some connections, like a family member, that helped him get his job working for Dan?

Sigma

2024-04-05 19:30:06 +0000 UTC

There was a subtle, but healthy dose in this chapter. Though, I'm definitely on board with much, much, more corruption to come!

YouTensil

2024-04-05 19:06:13 +0000 UTC

another subtle clue to her shift to Lester, Sarah did not lock the bathroom door .... "He debated heading into his room to wait for Sarah, but Lester might slide into the bathroom. But she probably had locked the door. "Dan tried the knob on the bathroom door. Turning it the entire way. She hadn’t even bothered to lock it. He remembered all the issues they had with locks in this apartment. Maybe she just doesn’t care anymore? That seemed like such a strange idea. "

LesterstheMAN

2024-04-05 15:23:24 +0000 UTC

Perhaps title inflation as not "the director" but "one of the" directors ? Like today everyone is an assistant manager. Jesse did seem to me too young and stupid to have an important position .

LesterstheMAN

2024-04-05 15:15:53 +0000 UTC

I love that because Lester and Sarah think Dan was at the peephole Lester can unintentionally take advantage. I mean Dan was at the peephole so obviously he heard Lester’s plan to go to Sarah at work and bang her on her desk. But then if Dan truely didn’t want that why wouldn’t he attempt to stop Lester, as far as Sarah can tell Dan clearly let this happen even though in reality Dan has no idea about the plan Lester has. I also enjoy how behind Dan is in other regards, ending the chapter saying he had to figure something out to prevent Sarah from assuming Lester was the main part of his fantasy, but Sarah is already at the point that her personal sexual fantasy’s are being furfilled and replaced by Lester. Sarah is already recognizing Lester as the one to give her pleasure, she doesn’t even look to Dan to reclaim her after assuming he already finished. She also didn’t even really ask what Dan wanted instead stating “Lester wants me to sleep in his bed” Dan is slowly being removed from Sarah’s part of the enjoyment, becoming just a bystander in her amazing sex life with Lester. Can’t wait to see how they take it to the next level!

kombucha Tom

2024-04-05 14:31:42 +0000 UTC

So riddle me this then. How does Jesse go from being fired to Director of another company within a week? Is there something we don’t know that is to be revealed? Or is it an unrealistic mistake/development?

Royston smith

2024-04-05 13:20:39 +0000 UTC

Extremely interested by #1, could be some kind of exclusive Lester has on Dan, and a new wedge in Dan/Sarah relationship, maybe by keeping it a secret ?

thib ear3

2024-04-04 21:44:01 +0000 UTC

Just came across something interesting from ch 15, when Lester was fuming at Dan making Lester leave the marital home the morning after the wedding night. It plays into the willingness of Sarah (in 16) to go along with Lester's plans, freeze out Dan, ignore their deal, flirt with other guys, get naked in front of others: "With women, they would inevitably develop some kind of emotional connection that Lester could leverage. With Dan, he wasn’t as sure." Sarah's clearly developed an emotional connection to Lester, from his smell, his mess, his sex-talk, his plans. As for Dan: "Whenever it seemed like he’d finally broken Dan down and had gotten him to submit to his whims, the idiot would suddenly grow a spine. Perhaps breaking a man down vs a woman was not as similar an undertaking as he’d considered." But in 16, Dan is sidelined first as Lester's roommate and not Sarah's husband, second when his character is killed and he's out of the game (as Sarah said, you're dead, you can't roll the dice for me), and third when Eugene supplants him at the peephole. Dan did not grow a spine in 16. Has Lester won?

Sigma

2024-04-04 20:38:29 +0000 UTC

I agree with Gabriella J comment that this chapter is an affirmation of the characters as they are at this time after 15 chapters. The entire chapter is filled with implicit and explicit references to Sarah's increasing physical and emotional attachment to Lester and a distancing from Dan. Many have pointed out examples, and I will add this too, from when Lester is telling her how he knew she enjoyed making love with him (from chapter 13). "Sarah’s body shuddered at the revelation. She didn’t want to admit to herself how much she enjoyed that night. Lester was right. Her body had responded to him. She hadn’t wanted to let him go, even though he hadn’t worn a condom. She had wanted his cum that night, but she wasn’t ready to admit it to herself, let alone Lester. She didn’t know what he was driving at now but needed to shift things before she admitted something she shouldn’t. " She's not ready to admit she has already accepted Lester in her life. And she wants Dan ( at least the weak, inadequate, condescending, sexually inferior, financial loser he now is or aways was )out of it.

LesterstheMAN

2024-04-04 18:06:20 +0000 UTC

Jap mentioned Sarah's thought towards Dan of "how long would he last?" while getting rammed by Lester. Given that the game started well after dinner (let's assume 7pm?) and probably went for about an 1 1/2 hours before D&L went to the bedroom, and Greg had to be home by midnight (let's assume the guys leave at 11:30) then that means Lester could keep it up for about 3 hours. That's certainly more than one-and-done-Dan. Two other lines with a lot of meaning: 1. "Dan turned to look at Sarah with a half disgusted look, dashing her daydreams." This was early when Lester's describing the game and ending with "during the game Sarah and I will spend some alone time in my room." Daydreaming about the sex she so loves and craves with Lester, only for those thoughts to be "dashed" by Dan. The word used is "dashed," not distracted, not alerted, not interrupted. But "dashed" as in destroyed. Perhaps furthering his dislike of and distancing of herself from Dan. 2. "He always seemed to have a plan, which Sarah appreciated." This occurs when Lester is texting Sarah with instructions she secretly keeps from Dan the afternoon they're walking around Chicago. Lester has plans and intentions. Dan has guesses and hopes. Lester is known for following through. Dan will give in every time. Lester will violate rules and norms as needed for himself. Dan feels security in supposed rules but permits them broken. Consequently, one more thing Sarah likes about Lester and dislikes about Dan.

Sigma

2024-04-04 14:11:35 +0000 UTC

Hi R. S., I suppose you are talking about "how long would he last?", right? Really It's a thought of S. When "D. Slid into his room" , 3 or 4 paragraphs after. Not exactly at he end of the chapter, sorry.

Jap

2024-04-04 11:19:07 +0000 UTC

I didn’t see where she thinks this - which paragraph is it in?

Robert Smith

2024-04-04 10:59:51 +0000 UTC

Sarah, I predict, will get two guys off at once in the next chapters. The seeds of this go back to chapter 1: “Sarah never liked Dan getting the upper hand or catching her off guard, so she shot back, “Well, I’m glad I can still get two guys off at once.” Two guys off at once? Had she, in the past...? “ In 15th chapter Lester asks her if she would like to handle two cocks at one time and she answers yes. In 16 she begins to realise what power she has over men and gets really in touch with her wild side, dropping the robe and revealing her naked body, as though mimicking the game scenario. So, definitely two cocks and perhaps a full striptease scenario either privately, or in a club setting, Lester of course controlling the method and execution, at some time soon. I hope!

Royston smith

2024-04-04 10:54:51 +0000 UTC

Sorry Darrow, actually the sentence was a S.'s thought but the substance doesn't change... It would be a fun!

Jap

2024-04-04 08:45:06 +0000 UTC

I 'd liked, Fuzzy Shark, a possible contrast between the D.'s difficulties at work and the S.' s promotion to CEO.

Jap

2024-04-04 08:15:44 +0000 UTC

It's at the end of the chapter but it's said in a playful way, but it would interesting if she teased D. about his drop in performance....

Jap

2024-04-04 08:08:09 +0000 UTC

If Sara gets the ceo job then Dan can be the stay at home dad while she plays with Lester at the office all day long and can go visit him in Chicago for consults at his apartment, strictly for business of course.

Fuzzy Shark

2024-04-04 01:38:07 +0000 UTC

I missed "How long would he last" there's a certain unconscious dismissal right there, that she doesn't even realize. Sarah asking Lester for a date would be a fascinating turnaround. One interesting thing here is Sarah went full on exhibitionist. She openly flirted with a bunch of strangers to the point of stroking Ned's thigh and making him come, and discussing taking Eugene to the bedroom. She was pretty close to half naked at the table, and went topless with her back to them, and went completely nude for a moment in the hall before going into the bathroom. The girl is feeling her oats.

Darrow

2024-04-03 23:57:48 +0000 UTC

It seems that S. finally begins to become more assertive! I loved this chapter because it marked other steps forward. As I thought, the safe word can be a double-edged sword. On this occasion Don used the ruse of exchanging voyeurs at the peephole so as not to use it but with it or without it S.'ll be freer. Interesting that S. wants L. exclusively, this will have a very high price...Even the idea that D. is mistaken for a perverted spy is fantastic even if I don't if Eugene noticed the family photo or the detached tone that S. reserved for D. in the living room, so different from the one through the peephole. The condom is now a thing of the past while the "Daddy" would be even more fun if S. asked for "mom" from her husband...The public "engagement" is a new turning point because it relegates D. to the role of the third wheel in front of other people for the first time. The topic of S.'s beauty squirming in L.'s garbage was also hot. The next steps I hope involve S. "spending the night" with D. in the other room (maybe with the peephole closed..) or her asking L. on a date. I don't know which is L.'s requests to S.; showing off the famous black silk robe or to saying goodbye to D. in the shower. Delightful both! The phrase " you don't need to wait here" is in fact the most powerful of the chapter. But also:" How long would he last?" it gave me a certain thrill... This could be another weapon for L.: D's loss of control. S.'s possible promotion to CEO could also serve the purpose if D. encounters serious problems at work (Jesse?).I imagine D. forced to work part time at McDonalds while his wife is CEO of an important hospital, perhaps John asking S. for a competent man for IT security...Even the scene in the elevator between S. & John made me to think; very intimate and delicate...but Don is a master at leaving all doors open. In fact, he still never hasn't mentioned about S.'s "errands" of the day after that he had mentioned to me a few chapter back or even when he writes about S. secretly reading L.s texts but specifying that she "..just wanted D. focus on their morning..". This a writer too.. Hopefully some of the promises (but new ones would be welcome too) are kept, thanks again for your beautiful job Don.

Jap

2024-04-03 21:57:19 +0000 UTC

On there, I'm Dare.... something. I tend to go for deep dives and long comments.

Darrow

2024-04-03 18:47:58 +0000 UTC

I don’t see Sarah having a particular fascination with Jesse. I can see Lester forcing the issue, simply to humiliate Dan. But not Sarah just giving Jesse pictures.

Jekyll

2024-04-03 18:39:57 +0000 UTC

I had similar thoughts about Jesse and Sarah. Somehow Jesse gets Sarah's number and they text each other. Sarah teases him about the photos. Jesse is pissed that Dan deleted all the photos. Sarah sends him some new explicit shots and it goes from there. Like other commenters not sure the dynamic with Lester.

TuwatchU

2024-04-03 14:33:44 +0000 UTC

I would also be very interested to read your continuation

Watch out

2024-04-03 11:57:41 +0000 UTC

Think I found the right comment! If not, look me up on literotica. I have some stories on there as well. Jekyll1439

Jekyll

2024-04-03 10:12:45 +0000 UTC

I don't think that Idea works in the context of this storyline though. Lester is a big, important character to the plot line, just switching him out, even temporarily, would make this a whole new story. If the author wants to write that as a spin off story after this story finishes then that's fine, but it wouldn't fit in to this story arc at all.

Gabriella J

2024-04-03 08:29:38 +0000 UTC

If you go to Literotica, I actually wrote some fairly elaborate comments on Neighbor Chronicles. As to my distaff continuations of Amber's story, happy to share it, but not sure how to get it to you. Maybe contact me through Literotica.

Darrow

2024-04-03 05:28:30 +0000 UTC

Was that Jack mounting Amber against the kitchen island? Bill was liking it a lot! I think Dan’s only option is to embrace a dominant male taking Sarah a couple of times per month, if he wants his marriage and family to stay intact. Even then it’s questionable that the marriage will survive.

Gee

2024-04-03 02:46:14 +0000 UTC

Sometime in the future. I dunno. I've just been noticing, that in a sense, it's been all about Dan. Dan's fetish, Sarah caters to it to excite him. Things happen because Dan wants it. Dan keeps wanting to be the center of attention, and Sarah keeps trying to cater to him. I think maybe one of the reasons that Lester's been so successful with Sarah is that he's focused on her and pleasing her. Dan's made their sexual relationship all about pleasing him, and Sarah has catered to it, willingly, and even enthusiastically. But really, its Dan. Sooner or later, that's got to be tiresome to her.

Darrow

2024-04-03 02:22:17 +0000 UTC

#3: Whoa. I love it, but not sure where it fits into the story yet. Maybe in a few more chapters when Dan happens to get in her and Lester's way? So that it isn't Lester sidelining Dan, but now its Sarah?

Sigma

2024-04-03 02:12:28 +0000 UTC

Would love to read that! And your overall thoughts on that series.

Jekyll

2024-04-03 01:27:48 +0000 UTC

I wrote a bit of a distaff continuation of Amber's story, it was fun.

Darrow

2024-04-03 01:11:45 +0000 UTC

I doubt Don Silver is taking requests or suggestions, but thinking out loud, I have three: 1) I'd really love to see Lester taking Sarah's anal virginity and making her love it. 2) I have this idea of Sarah, in Chicago away from Dan, seeing an advertisement for a fetish ball, and dragging or convincing Lester to go to it with her, where she wears a collar and leash for Lester and goes around half naked - role playing a slave girl, and being totally into it and having fun, not realizing how close it is to their real relationship. 3) The idea I want to see most, double barrels on Dan by Sarah, where she just lets him know how tired she is of his growing sexual inadequacy - not being able to get it up, coming too fast, his needy pathetic possessive voyeurism; and particularly of the ineffectual, whiny, passive aggressive bitch he's turning into, and the endless extravagant exhausting efforts she makes to put up with his bullshit and make him happy. She's constantly tiptoeing around him, trying to cater to him, fulfilling his fantasies and getting him horny. But seriously, when was the last time he tried to excite her, or indulge or talk up a fantasy of hers. Even when he buys lingerie for her, it's all about him. He's completely selfish, and she's always catering to him. And now she's in something that she's actually enjoying... And she's growing tired of him...

Darrow

2024-04-03 01:07:03 +0000 UTC

Based on how the story was going, I can only imagine the levels of submission Amber went through over that last little bit. Last we saw, she was crawling under a table and sucking Jack off. I love the idea of Bill being sexually stimulated by their videos and at the same time, emotionally destroyed. Realizing he’s lost his wife to Jack.

Jekyll

2024-04-03 00:45:08 +0000 UTC

I like that. I thought it might have been Jack doing something with Amber offscreen. From the descriptions of Bill's expression, whether he found the home movies sexually exciting, I think he also found them emotionally traumatic.

Darrow

2024-04-03 00:34:52 +0000 UTC

RD, was just trying to do some risk assessment. Am I correct that there have only been 4 raw days so far? You are correct that the chance keep increasing with every roll of the dice. I can attest that if both parties are fertile and do it enough you'll be a winner. Second child was conceived within the first month we tried. A little history my wife is from an Asian country and birth control pill were not popular 30+ years ago. She claims she never was vary careful with BC and hates condoms. She had plenty of sex and was a bit of a hotwife before marriage. But she is very lucky a pachinko! Guess she was just lucky.

RCH

2024-04-03 00:19:10 +0000 UTC

I feel like the thump Dan heard when talking to Bill, was Amber’s head under the desk. Likely she was in on the conference call without ever being seen.

Jekyll

2024-04-02 22:04:16 +0000 UTC

Dan’s short sightedness has been a big factor. He had jesse taken care of, but that wasn’t enough. He had to get him out of there and it ruined what bit of a career he had. Between ch 14 and 15, I went back and read the series. Dan definitely comes off worse when you focus on his actions. Feels like a crumbling man in a way.

Jekyll

2024-04-02 22:01:42 +0000 UTC

That’s right!! So lester will have to own up to that, or just claim they must have messed up!

Jekyll

2024-04-02 21:56:49 +0000 UTC

I hope next chapter is not a filler and starts a paradigm shift for both dan and sarah

alexander1089

2024-04-02 18:14:21 +0000 UTC

Yeah, the entire pregnancy thing and Lester's intention to have unprotected sex can't just be for the thrill. Lester's certainly got to know the implications and complications to his relationship with Sarah if he gets her pregnant. Will he still be able to own her? Take her from Dan? If he gets her pregnant would he really want fatherhood and its responsibilities? He's always talking about getting Dan out of the picture. I don't think having Dan completely cucked to the point of taking care of an illegitimate kid while Sarah and Lester do what they want is really getting Dan out of the way. I'm guessing that the author is putting the unprotected sex in the story on behalf of the readers, to up the ante, increase the perceived risk, make the readers hearts thump a little more. But I don't think it will lead to pregnancy. Of course, we're all speculating - and only because the author writes so well!

Sigma

2024-04-02 17:48:21 +0000 UTC

Completely agree on who the protagonists are, Gabriella. Dan and his fetish were the inciting force and now represent the obstacle/roadblock, but Lester and Sarah are the main characters.

Chris

2024-04-02 17:40:55 +0000 UTC

Kudos LesterstheMAN! You rock. I just want to compliment you on close reading.

Darrow

2024-04-02 16:57:15 +0000 UTC

My BTB is "Burn the Bitch" a vengeful cheated husband. Is there a darker meaning to BTB? I'm thinking of stories where the jilted man is not excited by a cheating wife and kicks her to the curb penny less.

RCH

2024-04-02 16:10:31 +0000 UTC

I totally agree that the complete absence of concern for a pregnancy is a missing piece of the story. I think even an inner dialogue from Sarah would add a lot. Lester has to be wondering as well… he’s pointed out many times how she is unprotected, fertile, and vulnerable. I think he knows what he is doing and is definitely trying to make sure he seeds her every time. He doesn’t even think about cumming in her mouth, on her face, etc.. anymore.

Robert Smith

2024-04-02 15:39:31 +0000 UTC

Definitely the 'movie night' - Amber had a lot of video to show Bill. Not sure what the 'thump' in the background was.

Darrow

2024-04-02 14:43:02 +0000 UTC

I love the series and don't want to be nitpicky but agree that there are several timeline issues. I don't think clinics offering vasectomies are open on Sundays.

TuwatchU

2024-04-02 14:29:15 +0000 UTC

Good point on the one and done. When Sarah finds cum beneath the peephole, and assumes it's Dan's, she thinks he's already had his relief for the night. This gives her the excuse to sleep with Lester. She tells Dan if he needs for relief, he can watch through the peephole.

TuwatchU

2024-04-02 14:23:45 +0000 UTC

No he did say. About midway through chapter 5,when he is talking to S&D after Lizzie left. Here is a copy of it What's the deal with you two?" Sarah asked as she put on her shoes. "She seemed a little upset when she left." Lester turned around with his shoulders still hunched over. "We used to be a thing. On again, off again, sort of thing. I think this is the end, though. When she found out I got that operation done, she said that was it. She really wanted to have kids, and even though she knew I didn't, she always thought I'd come around one day. It's over now, I guess."

LesterstheMAN

2024-04-02 14:06:40 +0000 UTC

Very good analysis. You make some good points. Since it's a given, Lester is going to fuck Sarah on her desk, will she be willing or will Lester need to dominate again. I'm also speculating what happens in Middleton. Will Sarah's mother catch Lester at home with Sarah, possibly right after sex?

TuwatchU

2024-04-02 13:58:45 +0000 UTC

I'm really not trying to set up a fan calendar to track Sarah's periods and potentially fertile dates. I am aware that most doctors won't have any sort of conversation about fertility until you've been actively trying for six months without successful pregnancy - and very often, they won't begin treatment until a year with no pregnancy. Again, I've lived this stuff and was the lead developer on a fertility app. I understand pregnancy, rates, risks, etc. I also personally know of three people who got pregnant on their first "whoops", including one woman who was 42 years old at the time. And I know of other people via friends/family - and have read many, MANY accounts online regarding this subject. As they say, all it takes is one time. So my point remain valid. I'm not complaining that Sarah hasn't gotten pregnant. I am saying that a continued pattern of unprotected sex where she allows Lester to inseminate her again and again is very risky, and it breaks immersion for her to be unconcerned and for it to never be a worry in the story.

RD

2024-04-02 13:57:49 +0000 UTC

Thanks for the comment and explanation. I've read a couple of chapters of Neighbor. I thought Bill and Amber sounded familiar, but didn't make the connection. I guess that explains the thump in the background and 'movie night.' Clever reference.

TuwatchU

2024-04-02 13:49:28 +0000 UTC

Jekyll, That's really insightful. I think Dan is presented as a protagonist, and we just assume that he's a good guy, albeit a good guy with a fetish that makes him vulnerable and almost a tragic hapless figure. We see him through his own eyes, and through Sarah's eyes. And Sarah loves and is committed to him. But now, through your and other comments, I find myself re-thinking that. We can all grant that Dan has a bit of a jealousy/cuck fetish, and an insecurity or perhaps an urge to degrade or encourage submission, a voyeur impulse. Everyone has weird sex stuff going on in their heads, so I don't necessarily fault Dan for his impulses. But is Dan actually a nice guy, or even a good guy. Or maybe he's a Jock/Jerk, formed his views of the world in high school, and is, deep down a privileged, entitled asshole, mocking everyone he thinks is beneath him, with an exaggerated sense of himself and what he's entitled to, but in many ways, sloppy, lazy and not really exercising good judgment. I find myself going back to the Jesse incident and what it says about Dan - here is an alleged professional who never bothers to activate security on his phone? WTF? I think we all stood up and cheered later, when Dan found what Jesse had done, Jesse tried his blackmail shtick, and Dan literally nuked him from orbit. That was a great swerve, establishing Dan as someone who stood up for himself, acted, and was forceful. Except, as it turns out almost immediately, it backfires on the entire company, which definitely points to poor judgment on his part. In sending an email under Jesse's identity, Dan did exactly what Jesse did to him and Sarah, so he lost any moral high ground. It was also reckless and ill considered, he'd have been fired on the spot if caught. And while he was out to get Jesse, he clearly didn't care about or consider any other effects or implications of his fake email - he already knew the Lincoln Group was a difficult and volatile client. So the alternate interpretation of Dan standing up for himself, is that he's actually a kind of lazy, sloppy, entitled asshole with an unearned sense of security and extremely poor judgment, who just half asses his way around and overreacts. Maybe this is who Dan really is? I might have to go back and re-read the whole thing with this perspective in mind to see how it fits. Maybe Sarah really is much better off without him.

Darrow

2024-04-02 13:31:05 +0000 UTC

I had to look up BTB. Jesus H. Christ! Made me reach for the brain bleach. Not my thing.

Darrow

2024-04-02 13:21:28 +0000 UTC

What worked about the Neighbor Chronicles was the dark energy, and the volatile unpredictability. No character was ever quite sure where they stood, or stayed in one place. No matter what they decided or thought, things slipped out of their control. Amber initially went to tease Jack, ended blowing him, and it goes on from there. The best scenes were when characters lost control of their situations, they would choose to go in or initiate or accept, but then things would just run away on them. Jack was fun as a source of chaos, relentlessly pushing boundaries and scheming. A 'castrated' Jack is pointless - simply a stunt-dick. Amber constantly plans, teases, initiates, draws boundaries and even refuses, but all the while as she does so, everything shifts under her feet and her desires and choices evolve as the scene does, so she ends up doing much more, and particularly, wanting much more. There's a subtle appearance of coercion, but the reality is Amber is willing and consenting in each moment, an enthusiastic partner. It's just that what she consents to changes from moment to moment in relation to her desires and interaction. An Amber in complete control of herself is a lot less interesting.

Darrow

2024-04-02 13:19:57 +0000 UTC

The thing with Dan just adding a 'new bull' to replace Lester is an interesting tactic for Dan. I think early on, it might have worked, particularly when Dan and Sarah found Lester pushy and Dan could have decided to just pick or find someone else to be their play object. I think that at this point, Lester's got his hooks too deep into Sarah, he's too firmly established as her lover. If Dan tries to begin something with someone else, well, Lester's already there, he'll outlast and overpower any kind of short term or mild fling. If Dan says "Okay, you're going to be fucking this other guy instead" she'll perceive it as insecurity and desperation, not dominance. And of course, you're right. Dan's established a pattern, simply somehow replacing Lester and bringing in a new man, Dan's at risk of sidelining himself all over again. He might try a man who won't sideline him, but then a man like that probably wouldn't turn Sarah on.

Darrow

2024-04-02 13:08:50 +0000 UTC

That was quite insightful, thank you.

Darrow

2024-04-02 12:59:19 +0000 UTC

I kind of agree that the cost per chapter is a bit steep. I've only been a member for a couple of months so I've been enjoying the early read so far, but I may dip in and out longer term, as the back catalogue is available when you join, so if I dip in every 3 months or so eventually I should get to do a catch-up read of 3 or so chapters whilst only paying for 1 new release, which feels like a more reasonable cost. You can set it so you only pay a maximum of once per month, but that is probably why the chapters are conveniently posted a month apart. This may have been a free chapter if it were posted on 31st March rather than the 1st April for example. Literotica is so far behind on this series now too. I thought this was supposed to be 60 or 90 days early release rather than 7 or 8 months. I'd prefer a set monthly fee that is smaller, then I'm not directly paying for chapters I like less or the story series I'm less keen on, and I know what and when is coming out of my bank $15+ is more than a book, so it's steep for a single chapter. And with over 650 paid members on here apparently, each paying $15+ per chapter is a lot of money to be made (maybe $10k per chapter). Fair play to Don Silver for getting it, but it is a lot for the readers to pay and feels like we're being taken advantage of a little.. $5 a month to support an anateur writer whose work I enjoy would be a price I'd happily pay regularly long term. And we could get 1-2 postings a month for that, which would be a fair exchange and mean that we'll be more accepting of transition chapters or new stories that may not be good.

Gabriella J

2024-04-02 11:27:37 +0000 UTC

Den, I agree with this a lot! Especially with the fact Dan called Sarah about the clinic, just to make fun of Lester. Seems like it will be a bit of poetic justice, when he knocks Sarah up. Dan’s behaviour at the D&D game is very telling of his personality. He doesn’t give any of those guys a second thought, just presumes everything about them, based on his group of friends and what they were like in highschool. Dan’s “competence” definitely has been the driving force behind Lester getting what he wants. He’s arrogant about how a guy like Lester could ever get a girl like Sarah. Seems to that with his attitude and views, his fantasy makes sense. Especially when you consider that he likely felt lesser than Sarah, especially with his work issues. That altered their dynamic and his way of getting the upper hand back, was to put her in a submissive, role with a man he considered less.

Jekyll

2024-04-02 10:58:02 +0000 UTC

Agreed! Jack isn’t the same type of character anymore, which was the big appeal. Amber just goes back and forth in her thoughts and actions. Her constantly saying it’s all for the husband. Then walking out on Jack after jerking him off, was predictable and blah.

Jekyll

2024-04-02 10:20:16 +0000 UTC

Just got myself caught up on that “new” series and while well written, very lacking compared to the original.

Jekyll

2024-04-02 10:17:48 +0000 UTC

I'll make a picky point on the editing and timeline continuity though... In the zoom meeting with Bill, it was specifically said that it was Monday. And Dan's thoughts were about getting through the week until Sarah arrived on Friday. Jump to Sarah's arrival on Friday and that Zoom meeting with Bill happened "earlier today", being Friday, not Monday. I was surprised that wasn't picked up in the edit as it stood out dramatically to me when reading.

Gabriella J

2024-04-02 09:30:00 +0000 UTC

I can see why some people think of this as a "filler" chapter. But for me, it's more of an "affirmation" chapter, just reaffirming the position of the characters, Lester in particular, which has to be done for future bigger developments. The D&D element is niche so will often make some people zone out, as will any niche interest part of any story. For me, I know a lot of people think of this story being about Sarah and Dan's sexual awakening through the wife sharing fantasy and Lester being a secondary character. But I've always thought of Lester being the main character of the series, along with Sarah, and Dan is more the secondary character. I'd think the back story was that Lester, due to being a loner with a lack of likeability and was probably bullied and isolated because of it, developed a complex about needing to be seen as an Alpha and to have control of all situations. And to make this happen he has learned how to be a mental manipulator. And this is truly what this story is about for me, Lester slowly manipulating Sarah (and Dan) to get what he wants. Putting suggestions out there and then reinforcing them until that suggestion becomes the norm. From involving him in their sex life to begin with,to date nights, to being his "girlfriend" and acting the part, to not using condoms, and now trying to get Sarah alone without Dan around. And this chapter worked for me for that, as it reaffirmed those characteristics of Lester's alpha complex and the continued mental manipulation, with Sarah playing the girlfriend role, getting her alone in his room, keeping the suggestion going to wear her down of getting her alone in Middleton and taking her in her office at the hospital. So if you look at this as Lester's story rather than Dan and Sarah's story, this chapter did progress the story in that way. My opinion of course, everyone can enjoy the story from different angles and different perspectives and that is what is great about the medium of storytelling.

Gabriella J

2024-04-02 09:24:19 +0000 UTC

Good chapter with hot sex session and lot of hints of the presumptive falling of Dan Lester and Sarah become so close and attracted to each other that I can’t see Sarah spending the whole night without joining Lester at a moment It could definitely emphasize Lester irreversible dominance over the couple and Sarah’s total corruption Already impatient to read the next chapter

King40

2024-04-02 05:43:37 +0000 UTC

RD, most of what you said is true. Help me here but How many days has SL had raw sex? One at the house then 3-5 days later with Dan looking on. Then the one time in the parking garage. Now after the D&D game night. I count 4, did I miss a day? Most Dr. tell couple to not worry until 6 month or so have pasted before worrying about fertility problems. The egg has a 24hr or less window to be fertilized so the sperm need to be present. 4-5 days before ovulation would be Sarah's fertilization window and one day after. To be safe you have to add a few days before and 1 day after. Sarah is 35 I think so she is starting to decline in fertility. 30-50 percent of fertilized eggs end in a successful pregnancy. As Neega pointed out we don't know what her cycles are and what the exact timeline has been with her raw sex with Lester. Now it doesn't make a big difference how may times they do it in a day as much as how many different days they have raw sex. A full weekend together would increase the odds as would sex 2-4 days over a week even more so. Sarah period finishes 3/30/24 Lester rolls into town 4/1/24 the day after They have sex on her desk day 1 she's safe. They can fuck like rabbits but come Friday danger. Friday 4/5/24 Lester is heading back to Chicago Sarah has the parents watch the kids. Sarah and Lester make love that night. Then again Saturday late morning. Sarah will have enough little Lesters when her egg drops Wednesday 4/9/24. She could get pregnant 30-50% chance. Really the risk starts Friday. All this is variable that's why the rhythm method has risks because it's a cycle that is effected by many factors. There is new studies that seem to show chemicals in semen can trigger ovulation early.

RCH

2024-04-02 05:12:18 +0000 UTC

Corruption! More corruption!

RCH

2024-04-02 04:14:01 +0000 UTC

She made a heat of the moment decision the first time. I don't think that it's realistic for her to just say "oh well, that decision is made, it will never cross my mind again". Especially given how she reacted last chapter when the homeless dude was talking about how Lester was going to knock her up. She's shown a thrill at the idea of being unprotected - that sort of kink doesn't just evaporate because you thought about it once. With all due respect, you have zero idea as to my level of understanding when it comes to pregnancy. I have personally lived the life of "holy shit, I've managed to knock my wife up even though she was on birth control" and also the "let's track cycles and dates for a year plus, go on fertility treatments, etc, etc". And, as a programmer, I've actually been the lead developer on a fertility tracker tool. So I'm probably more educated in terms of pregnancy risk than 99% of the general population. Sure, we don't get exact dates of sex and are never told the particulars of Sarah's cycle. But by and large, women who have multiple children tend to get pregnant pretty reliably, and if she has unprotected sex many times with an apparently fertile man, the odds of her getting pregnant tend to get higher and higher with time. Sure, they may have been having sex every time on the couple of days right before/right after her period or long enough after her ovulation that the egg is no longer viable. But given the haphazard schedule of their sex, odds are they are going to get bitten sooner rather than later.

RD

2024-04-02 04:03:12 +0000 UTC

I second that emotion, primarily because I'm a darkly dysfunctional person who happens to make good decisions but fully enjoys watching the schadenfreude experience of other privileged people making really bad choices.

Sigma

2024-04-02 03:31:44 +0000 UTC

FWIW, in porn, you can NOT involve kids. So you are quite astute, there isn't anything to do with the kids, and never, ever will be.

neegan

2024-04-02 03:25:12 +0000 UTC

I'm sure he chuckles frequently

neegan

2024-04-02 03:20:57 +0000 UTC

Not sure if you missed it, but the first time she takes Lester raw, she does have those thoughts you suggested. And her conclusion was, would she stop him now, even if he wasn't fixed? Or are you saying that Don should make her rethink these same thoughts everytime she has sex with Lester, instead of being done with those concerns? As far as pregnancy goes, it's not as easy as you think to get pregnant. We don't know when her ovulation cycle is, but you will notice there are often times, weeks between meeting up. The first time she had bare sex with him, I believe she did think that it wasn't the worst time.

neegan

2024-04-02 03:19:23 +0000 UTC

I find the branching off rather mundane. It has castrated Jack and made Amber the in-charge leader now. That's not what drove this series.

neegan

2024-04-02 03:12:20 +0000 UTC

Let's not miss the fact that in her mind, Dan's one and done in the stamina department typically, and she knows her Chicago Boyfriend gets up for her over and over... as she already thought before discussing with Dan.

neegan

2024-04-02 03:08:03 +0000 UTC

Jekyll, you are correct. Lester never claims to be snipped, never suggests it, never even hints at it. He just asks Dan to bring him to a clinic where the procedure is done. Lester spends a few hours in a waiting room on his phone. Dan, bored, looks up the clinic on his phone, finds that they do vasectomies, and jumps to the conclusion, and phones Sarah up to tell her. They believe he is snipped, or a Vasectomy recipient, but neither of them every asks him, neither of them ever seek any kind of confirmation, neither of them ever discuss it or say it out loud in his presence. I assume that the Clinic has other services and procedures, and he can simply say he was going for something else, or wanted to be checked out, or was even going to check up on a friend of his because they might need a ride. There's literally a hundred non-vasectomy explanations for Lester going to the place. None of which occurs to them. Instead, it's just Dan jumping to conclusions (as he was meant to) and exercising bad judgment. When it comes down to it - Dan is just not that bright. For instance, he leaves his phone unlocked and unguarded around Jesse, when he absolutely has no trust or faith in Jesse. Dan demonstrates other competence or control issues. I think another poster may have it right - Dan's lay-off may not have been 'just a lay off.' And his difficulties getting a new position may not be 100% Lester. Dan's frat boy attitude at the D&D game reflects badly on him - remembering his old Jock buddies in high school, the subtle hints that he used to bully or even beat up nerds. His barely concealed contempt for Lester's guests. Maybe deep down, he is an asshole deserving how he ends up. When you look at the sequence, he himself worked fairly hard to put Sarah in this position, and put Lester in charge of her.

Darrow

2024-04-02 01:53:39 +0000 UTC

Honestly, I just want hot, dark, emotionally charged sex scenes, featuring dysfunctional people making bad decisions with furious intensity.

Darrow

2024-04-02 01:40:11 +0000 UTC

Amen! Sigma, I have to agree with your perspective 99.9%. All the character development, description of places all of it make for a better story. I befuddled by some of Don's setups with Lester but been told to wait and see there is purpose in the end. I've liked most everything so far. It's an engaging story.

RCH

2024-04-02 00:08:48 +0000 UTC

I could be wrong, but did Lester ever actually claim he was snipped? Sarah thinks he’s snipped because of Dan telling her where he brought Lester.

Jekyll

2024-04-01 23:35:42 +0000 UTC

Isn't it amazing how different readers see the story differently? "Filler chapter" "Too long" "There's nothing here, more of the same" "Maybe I should just move on" "Nothing new really" "It hasn't moved forward" "Not worth paying for" What if this happened to be in book form, all 16 chapters. Or perhaps no chapters, just straight prose? Would the story still seem to drag on? Or would the reader be too engrossed at the story, turning page after page to see the continual character development, the bread crumbs, the hot stuff, and wonder how the next page and situation will turn out? Would it seem to be more of the same? Or would the story arcs and potential arcs capture one's attention, wondering what's going to happen in later pages? Could it be the delay and the time-gap between chapters from creative thoughts, writing, rewriting, and editing which frustrates some readers where they may lose interest? Could it be that some want some quick-stroke stories rather than the full development of the story? Maybe these are the readers who watch the 3 minute porn video to get off rather than buy the 2 hour full video. Whatever the case, everyone's entitled to their opinion. Sometimes I wonder what Don Silver thinks, who has the entire story laid out already, when he reads our speculations along with other's criticisms.

Sigma

2024-04-01 23:09:26 +0000 UTC

I would like to point to the last paragraph. I think Dan "adding in a new bull" inadvertently or not to try and make the fantasy more about Sarah and Dan is an exciting prospect. As Dan tries to wrestle control back. Someone like Archer during a work dinner would be hot. Initially, teasing by Sarah to help get Dan a job or project but losing control and getting dominated and Dan sidelined by the Bull once Sarah realizes he has a big cock.

b g

2024-04-01 22:44:29 +0000 UTC

Read the Envoyeur version. Hasn't really grabbed me. I think the Neighbor Chronicles is basically dead. But that's cool. Things die all the time. There's nothing to say it has to finish up in a conclusion or satisfying conclusion. A lot of Literotica stuff can go for a while, run out of steam, the writer quits or moves on.

Darrow

2024-04-01 22:13:47 +0000 UTC

Gee, I can see DS staying together raising Lester child but I don't see Lester being welcomed after the lying about the snip job. There is and interesting legal angle Lester could try to forces his parental rights. Many states would see Lester the father and having parental rights. He'd have to be convicted of rape to void his parental claim.

RCH

2024-04-01 21:06:39 +0000 UTC

Some how I don't think this is a BTB story. Dan is the progenitor of the path they are currently on. Sarah has gotten caught up in it so Dan can't fault her too much. Things are the way they are because it becomes important later on.

RCH

2024-04-01 20:57:37 +0000 UTC

Neighbor Chronicles, Envoyeur has branched from the original. I like it so far and find that it's a better presentation.

RCH

2024-04-01 20:21:38 +0000 UTC

I enjoyed that series a lot and am hoping for a conclusion or continuation at some point soon.

Jekyll

2024-04-01 19:10:35 +0000 UTC

Bill and Amber are characters from another series by another writer called 'Neighbor Chronicles.' In it, Bill has a hidden cuckold fetish that Amber discovers. Supportive to Bill, she begins to play with a neighbor Jack, who is sexually overwhelming. As always, the couple tries to put limits, and Jack tries to evade them. Amber eventually cools it with Jack. But Bill is still excited. Discovering that Bill's fetish is unabated, and with their anniversary coming up in a few weeks Amber conceives a plan - to have various kinds of sex with Jack and record it all as a gift to for Bill for their anniversary. Jack, of course, takes full advantage, relentlessly breaking Amber's sexual barriers. It has quite a lot of dark energy.

Darrow

2024-04-01 17:43:11 +0000 UTC

Don, I'm going to give you my honest feedback - like I always try to do. This felt like a huge filler chapter. Lots of words, but a complete sideline to the main story. I've re-read it, and my opinion hasn't changed much. A lot of "can we get to the point, please?" for me. The good - as always, the actual sex itself is really well written and very hot to read. I do love how Sarah is starting to respond to Lester - her getting wet and wanting sex on the off chance that Lester was wanting to switch things up. Also, I love how she no longer has any issue taking him bare. That said, we know that Sarah is fertile - she has two kids. How many times can she let Lester inseminate her before it becomes an issue? The peephole stuff was a little weird, but also hot. Kind of an interesting twist where Dan lets the D&D nerd basically cuck him on top of Lester cucking him. I've played D&D for 35 years, so as far as that goes, you wrote that part pretty well. But Don, I'm not here to read about people playing D&D. :) The bad - again, this just felt like such a filler chapter. You'd been picking up momentum in the story of late, and now, it's off into the weeds again. I don't want to read about corporate intrigue. I don't want to read about D&D sessions. I don't want to have tens of thousands of words with only a fraction of those devoted to the cuckold plot. Jessie? Who cares? He filled his role a long time ago. I thought it was pointless to bring him back for the club, he REALLY does not need to be a recurring character. He's just distracting. It doesn't make sense for him to have this big crush and be trying to force his way into Sarah's life; Jessie knows the she's married AND that she's fucking Lester. For him to act like a lovesick puppy is silly, if you ask me (and you didn't). While I love that Sarah does take Lester bare, I think that this does need to be addressed in her dialogue - or at least her mental monologue. Oh, this is wrong, oh, this breaks the rules, oh, it feels so good, the idea of the risk is hot even though she "knows" Lester is safe. But what if he wasn't? Etc, etc. I've said before, I really think that you need to be wrapping this story up. Dan losing control, Dan craving the debauchery, Lester manipulating everything, Sarah being hooked on the big cock. This should be the focus, for my money. Lester actively trying to impregnate Sarah, her and Dan both making bad choices... I would love to see them really address the pregnancy risk beyond the whole "rules" concept. In general, I just want to see the main plot resolve. Finish this story, move on to the next one!

RD

2024-04-01 16:15:19 +0000 UTC

Accidently hit 'return.' As noted by others, the shower scene was very telling. In previous chapters, Sarah would have invited Dan to join and reclaim her. Now he's dismissed. I'm thinking she spends the night with Lester. When L says he wants to get S alone, she reminds him it was part of the deal. He just responds they'll break it. S does not object. Nice touch with Jesse getting a job D applied for. I think if/when S finds out it was Eugene who watched, she will not be upset but will tease D about another man watching her fuck. Lot of good breadcrumbs. What type of home movies do Bill and Amber like? What happens with the interim CEO? Already looking forward to the next chapter.

TuwatchU

2024-04-01 14:34:21 +0000 UTC

Great chapter and good comments. Dan is a less sympathetic character with each chapter. Instead of joining in the D&D and trying to learn the game, he acts disinterested and somehow beneath him. He exhibited the same behavior when he was asked to mentor Jesse. I'm starting to think there may have been more to his layoff than a simple downsizing.

TuwatchU

2024-04-01 14:22:20 +0000 UTC

Regarding Dan's performance issues, as I've said, we're seeing signs. I think we'll see more and more, with Dan consistently losing self worth, and Sarah becoming more and more tired of them. Dan consistently blows too soon, leaving Sarah unsatisfied. She smiles, tells him its okay, and thinks of Lester. Dan can't perform at all, mentions he's tired. Sarah tells him its okay, thinks of Lester. Dan, after two many drinks, falls asleep with her. Sarah is wide awake. Dan is insensate, smelling of booze. She's unsatisfied, thinking of Lester, he's in the next room,.. so she goes to him. Hell, for all we know, Sarah may be about to do that this night. Think about it. Dan's already had a few beer, he's probably going to be a dud. Sarah thinks he got off on her performance, but really, he got emasculated and displaced by Eugene and he's lying about it. That's on top of the nights humiliation elsewhere. Maybe he'll be able to perform sexually. Or maybe he won't. Likely, he won't. Or if he does, its going to be really fast. He's already a little drunk, he doesn't hold his liquor. He'll probably pass out fast - leaving Sarah unsatisfied, bored and wide awake next to a snoring husband. It would be so tempting to sneak into Lester's room, in his great big bed with its luxurious sheets (as opposed to the uncomfortable overstarched sheets she's on with Dan - Lester thought of that), snuggle up to his comforting bulk and drift off, knowing that they might wake up in the middle of the night and have some genuinely private time. She can even rationalize that she'll sneak back into bed with Dan in the morning before he wakes, and he won't even know.

Darrow

2024-04-01 14:07:26 +0000 UTC

Thanks. I actually do write a few stories here and there. I think where I go with the Swinger thing, is not the casual 70s key exchange, but something harder where Dan dominates and directs her sexually, and uses that to demystify Lester's cock. Sarah seems to want to be dominated and controlled sexually. For all her teasing, it excites her to be told what to do. So either Dan regains that, or Lester keeps extending his control. I think Dan's window of time or opportunity to assert himself and take control is closing.

Darrow

2024-04-01 13:59:49 +0000 UTC

Yes. This is the basis of my argument that he can't just reassert himself. It won't go back to the way it was before, because for the rest of their married life, he'll be compared to Lester and his cock and found second rate - and she's not going to accept that. That's why I suggested the 'whore wife' scenario, where he takes domination again by controlling and directing this new sexuality, and where Lester's cock isn't special, because there are a lot of cocks, and Dan is controlling every one of them. Or to put it another way, Sarah responds to domination, he's literally got to take real control and enslave her AND deliver satisfaction. Right now, his domination amounted to permission, and she needs it less and less, and she gets the domination and satisfaction she needs from Lester. Honestly though, I don't think Dan can manage it. He's clearly on a descent, and at this point, he's recognizing it. Every attempt to assert himself has been temporarily successful but has either been futile or blown up in his face. He acknowledges it, and even when he does have a success, as with Bill, it seems hollow to him. He's not just losing, but aware of it, and feeding it. He literally humiliates himself in a D&D game and visibly checks out. And then, incredibly, he allows Eugene to evict him from his peephole and room. Dan has a lot further to fall, more humiliations in store. But... I find it hard to see him credibly recovering.

Darrow

2024-04-01 13:57:52 +0000 UTC

Yeah I'm starting to get that sense as well. Even at the end when Dan says "Doesn't matter, though,, I still want you in bed with me tonight. Just to be close to you. You're not going anywhere" Don has her respond with a simple "Okay," and then he writes "Sarah smiled." Sarah smiled? What kind of smile was it? Was it still a post-orgasmic smile? A smile to just acknowledge hearing him? A smile of looking forward to lying next to her husband? Or, was it one of those 'ok' smiles one's wife gives you to just give you an answer, to get you to go away? Because, as was mentioned, the next line is "you don't have to wait here." Maybe she said that because she did leave the bathroom door unlocked. Why? Maybe she was hoping someone else would come in and shower with her? Even Dan is getting that feeling, because next he meditates on how L&S are "getting along," how "committed" she was to the role play so that "it was hard knowing what was real and what was pretend." He won't admit it to himself, yet, but he's seeing her emotionally leave him right before his eyes. Cat's out of the bag. Horse is out of the barn. Train has left the station.

Sigma

2024-04-01 12:50:41 +0000 UTC

Dan may already be irrelevant. I keep coming back to the shower scene.... * You don't have to be here.... * 'Bad boy' then she turns around and ignores him...

Darrow

2024-04-01 04:38:02 +0000 UTC

"A eunuch masturbating at a peephole" ! ! ! Perhaps you should write some stories? You write some great lines dude, and I really appreciate your insight. Just my thought: I can't see Lester risking Sarah with any other man, at least willingly. He won't even sell her videos. I believe he wants this to be a permanent thing. And even if Dan tried to get a swinger group or orgy going, it would drive Sarah further away since she can always claim she's doing all this for him, not so he could be with other women. And if Dan was with other women, it would further drive Sarah's mind away from Dan and into the arms of Lester and help her further rationalize a life without Dan. Yeah, there are possibilities of Sarah screwing other men but not because of Dan. There's plenty of non-consensual opportunities with the interim CEO, Swan Systems, Byron, Lincoln Group, even Jesse, and now even a new alpha, Eugene. That's plenty of potential story lines without introducing swingers or an orgy.

Sigma

2024-04-01 03:04:23 +0000 UTC

While some readers dislike the nerd show, it had a purpose. First, it was a competition between alphas and Lester had to use Sarah to finally one-up Eugene. Second, Lester planned to further sideline Dan by referring to Sarah as his "girlfriend," freezing out any influence Dan could have as husband. If Dan revealed himself as the husband it would blow up Lester and Sarah's scheme, so, Dan is now further removed from the relationship in a public setting. Third, it was just another way to get Sarah alone without Dan involved. Its hard to see any recovery for Dan. He's too subject to his fetish, he just has to give in to it. As Den Valdron wrote, "Dan's painting himself into the role of a bystander." (great line Den!). And in-spite of any 'plan' for a safeword, each time a rule is broken, a line is crossed, the safeword un-uttered, it only further widen's Sarah's freedom. We all know Dan will always give in. Sarah knows it too. Eventually Sarah will be so independent that Dan will be irrelevant. Yes, she may humor him and tell him what he wants. She'll essentially role-play as the loyal wife to Dan, after all, she needs to keep up appearances for the time being to her relatives and employer - until . . . What happens when a husband becomes irrelevant? The wife does all the planning according to only her desires, with no influence or input from the husband. With Sarah now enjoying some dates with Lester, from walking around town to dinners and conversation, love-making, having mutual fun teasing the nerds, becoming comfortable with Lester's smell and his mess, one could see an independent Sarah rationalizing a life with Lester and her girls - inspite of Lester's appearance and mess. Looks don't always appeal to women. Lester's a bad-boy, sexually amazing, financially setup, professionally competent, and independent--not dependent on an employer. She might even look as Lester as trading up from Dan.

Sigma

2024-04-01 02:54:19 +0000 UTC

While I agree with a lot of this assessment, I think Dan could wrestle back control just from Lester, without sharing Sarah around. The last real moment we saw that spark between Sarah and Dan, was when he barged into the bathroom and kicked lester out of the house. Sarah loved that, like he was reclaiming her. She keeps giving Dan that opportunity, but he keeps squandering it. After booting lester, he reverted and told sarah how he’s not sure he can control his own fantasies. Putting Sarah back in charge. Moments like lester telling the couple, that during their game, sarah would be spending some alone time in his bedroom. Dan wanted to say something, but sarah quickly diverted that with a sly comment. Dan could win back control, I think, with moments like these. Had he told sarah and lester that they weren’t going to be alone during the d&d game, she would have caved and been towards dan. Dan needs to show he’s in control, Sarah responds to it. But like the last shower scene where he was left in the cold, he keeps sinking more into his own submission.

Jekyll

2024-04-01 00:47:35 +0000 UTC

Lester likes to check what size equipment his apprentices for Sarah are sporting. I believe Jesse is bigger than Dan but not as big as Lester.

Gee

2024-03-31 23:57:58 +0000 UTC

Agreed I see 2 paths Lester becoming the distant uncle with regular fuck benefits of Sarah. With Dan and Sarah raising Lester’s child. Or The fantasy threesome blows up in their faces and all go in seperate directions. Lester and Sarah will be fine. Dan not so.

Gee

2024-03-31 23:49:54 +0000 UTC

Yes I remember you wrote that , agree 100% love to read that.

LesterstheMAN

2024-03-31 22:11:38 +0000 UTC

True, I guess I am looking for a bit more emphasis or maybe have it occur/referenced to more consistently. As is it only seems to occur occasionally.

LesterstheMAN

2024-03-31 21:47:44 +0000 UTC

I think Dan's only way forward is full swinging, where he makes a point of sharing Sarah with other men, even groups of men, and where he sleeps with other women. Couple swap, selecting singles, perhaps different kinds of play. To dominate as Sarah seems want, he needs to take control of her sexuality while feeding her appetites and challenging her. Right now, Lester is both dominating her and feeding her appetites, and Dan is painting himself into the role of a bystander. Sarah's tried to include him by giving him her 'leash' - the final decision over what happens, but mainly that gets expressed by letting her off the leash or letting Lester take control. As long as the sexual relationship is between Sarah and Lester, Dan is slowly going to get frozen out and become irrelevant. It's happening already. Worse, Dan seems to not only accept his growing irrelevance, but he actively abets it - witness Eugene. Sarah's appetite and inclinations have grown, she's always been the bolder one, and she's the one that consistently made advances on Lester, each time Dan gave permission. She's not going to go back in the sexual box. She's not going to trade great sex, or adventures, or fulfillment for a man she loves but who she's coming to dismiss as inadequate and ineffective. Dan has to break Lester's hold on her sexuality, and the only way to do that is to start running other men between her legs, she likes to be dominated, he has to control that by selecting her lovers and situations. He needs to take her to an orgy. Right now, Lester is starting to occupy that territory, showing her off sexually, having her engage in play with other men. If Lester seizes that ground first, then that's tough on Dan, all he's doing And he needs to participate in an orgy, in couple swaps, have women. Right now, he's being turned into a eunuch masturbating at a peephole. He needs to assert himself as a sexual being, particularly a powerful independent sexual being. Right now, Sarah is engaging sexually with Lester and other men, and Dan is engaging with ... nobody. So Sarah gets to fuck without any consequence, and she subliminally disrespects Dan. He has to assert himself sexually, demonstrate to her that he's desirable and powerful for other women, in other situations. Sarah needs to start noticing him. If not, he's done for. He might as well stick his balls in an envelope and mail them to Hoboken.

Darrow

2024-03-31 21:02:11 +0000 UTC

I largely agree. Although, Dan did hint at trying to replicate a similar situation with someone else. Which could be a very intriguing prospect. What would Sarah think of that? Would it make her feel cheap, and drive her towards Lester? Would she even feel it was cheating on him? Would it be an utter disaster? Probs, yes. The other path is something closer to going cold turkey. Which has it's own issues, especially if Lester is spending time at the hospital. Fun possibilities!

YouTensil

2024-03-31 19:06:02 +0000 UTC

I think that the problem with any great plan of Dan's, is that he's going to try and get things back the way they were. Chicken back into the egg, wine back into the raisin. Sarah's evolved, and even if she tries to go back... I don't think she'd be happy, or would stay.

Darrow

2024-03-31 18:12:19 +0000 UTC

Dan is already having performance issues. He came much too fast in lovemaking, blowing as they were just getting started and leaving Sarah unsatisfied. Other times, he's prematurely ejaculated, or she's found him half-drunk asleep. It's there, it's starting and it's definitely developing.

Darrow

2024-03-31 18:10:20 +0000 UTC

I read through the alpha version and really enjoyed it. This version has even more to savour. Playful and fun, but with a bite to it. We are really seeing a new Sarah emerging. One that needs Lester. The way she responds to his presence and her desire for Lester grows. Loved the 'daddy' moment we've been waiting for! It seems the pace is too slow for some, but honestly, I'm really enjoying it. For me things are progressing all the time and I'm loving the attention these changes get. I'm very much looking forward to Dan's great plan to save Sarah from Lester's evil clutches! Guaranteed to work!

YouTensil

2024-03-31 17:54:14 +0000 UTC

The perfect sentence there! People end up with the worst possible person! Like a bad drug trip, Sarah is latching on to the worst person she could.

Jekyll

2024-03-31 17:18:56 +0000 UTC

One other possibility for an ending! Lester is found out and Sarah puts a stop to it. But I don’t think her and dan will ever be the same, especially with his fantasies now devolving faster and faster. So I wonder if a third party we have seen, will step up in the hand. Giving Sarah that controlling, sexual dominate she needs in the bedroom. Someone with long term prospects that merges the dan aspects and lester into one.

Jekyll

2024-03-31 17:03:33 +0000 UTC

I would like to see Sarah carrying Lester s baby and leaving Dan,though I prefer the Lester redeemed angle. However one thing that is undeniable, is people ,for whatever reasons, do sometimes bind with the worst possible person for them. So any outcome is possible in a story called toxic attraction.

LesterstheMAN

2024-03-31 16:58:33 +0000 UTC

Also one way Lester can get alone time with Sarah, take her to a very expensive restaurant that Dan can't afford. Lester will have a good laugh when Dan can't pay his check and has to ask Lester for help, further lowering himself in front of Sarah. Or maybe Lester just watches Dan squirm while explaining to the restaurant he can't pay as Sarah looks away embarrassed for him. A few expensive dates that Lester we know can afford and Dan's out of the picture. Sarah will be contentto go along since she wants to be more alone with Lester too. Dan can't do luxury and he's too condescending to be any good at competing with Lester at things like D&D. One other thing in my ramblings, I would also like Dan to start having performance problems with Sarah due to stress over money, Lester out fucking him etc. maybe have Sarah just come out and say point blank to Dan or in his hearing that Lester is a REAL man, successful,confident, and bigger and better in bed than Dan ever was or will be.

LesterstheMAN

2024-03-31 16:46:07 +0000 UTC

One thing that won't happen, sadly, is any kind of redemptive character arc for Lester. It would have been intriguing. The idea of Lester forming a real human relationship with Sarah, and actually growing as a person, Sarah gets pregnant with his child. She and Dan stay together, and agree to raise it as their own. Lester continuing to evolve, preserving his bond with Sarah and developing with Dan and his offspring, until he evolves into the role of a much beloved uncle to the kids, visiting frequently, with bedroom visits, and developing an actual whole life. I think I'm kind of a sucker for redemption. Dark energy is exciting. But sometimes spiraling inevitably into ruin is tiresome. But the reality is that while the suggestion of a redemptive path intrigued Don Silver on Discord, that's not where the story has or is going. Lester has been relentless in his sociopathy, and the occasional bits where he seems to warm up to becoming a decent person are either transitory or deliberately staged. It's Sarah and Dan that have gone through personal changes, with Dan declining steadily, and Sarah expanding and exploring. I don't see her ending up with Lester, but I could see her leaving Dan behind.

Darrow

2024-03-31 16:29:59 +0000 UTC

LesterstheMAN Yikes, some potent ideas there. I love the idea of Sarah getting fucked at her desk by Lester, and getting caught, preferably by John (Drew would also be good, but is now out of the picture). Some fascinating directions that could go. * The hot scenario - to save her/their asses, Sarah, on her own, or with Lester's prompting, or as part of a threesome scenario seduces John, enlisting him and consolidating her path to CEO and slut. * The disaster scenario - it all comes tumbling down. John sees a clear conflict of interest situation in Lester's involvement with Sarah, he backtracks, figures out that Lester's the one that uploaded bad rabbit and the whole thing is a sleazy extortion gambit, Lester and possibly Sarah are up on charges, even if Sarah evades jail her life and career are ruined. Dan still has plausible deniability, so she sacrifices herself, takes the fall, so that Dan can be saved and take care of the kids. Dan lives happily ever after, Lester goes to jail, and Sarah unable to ever again find work in her field and now notorious is reduced to giving blow jobs at a third rate massage parlour. Or variations thereof. Ironic denouement, Dan gets a new woman in his life, and ends up repeating the cycle.

Darrow

2024-03-31 16:23:15 +0000 UTC

And among many comments and actions by Sarah showing her gravitating towards Lester, recall the shower scene in chapter 14 where Sarah couldn't remember the last time she and Dan did that, yet here she's in the shower, Dan is in the bathroom with her and....she practically dismisses him, but he chooses to remain just sitting there watching her shower alone. Also like the scene where Lester asks DS to play D&D ,and Sarah feels sympathy towards Lester about the way people treat him badly. This and the other comments or thoughts showing Sarah becoming attached to Lester emotionally, make the sex scenes even better. Finally when Lester inevitably fucks Sarah on her desk is she caught ? Does this ruin her chance of becoming CEO or lose the position if already hired, forcing her to depend more on Letters financial aid, or just subject her to the blackmail of a forced threesome? Hope not though, just like the SLD dynamic best. Finally, the "making love" scene in chapter 13 was excellent, would like something similar to happen now and again, with the sweet talk too, to emphasize the increasing connection of SL.

LesterstheMAN

2024-03-31 16:13:42 +0000 UTC

I was a little disappointed in this chapter. D&D? More nerds? I’m hoping Lester can continue to corrupt Sarah into becoming his cum slut whore, fucking him as much as he wants and anyone else he wants her to fuck. She needs to know and accept she’s already licking a stranger’s cum off the wall. Time to become the full time slut Lester needs

Aj

2024-03-31 15:43:24 +0000 UTC

Same here. IF that ever happened, Lester would be the all-time, undisputed king of his D & D crowd! lol.

Tom

2024-03-31 15:36:55 +0000 UTC

As to Lester wanting to impregnate Sarah. I wonder if his aim has changed somewhat in the last two chapters. When he was going hard to fuck her unprotected and slam a baby into her, he felt that Dan was broken already. Perhaps the baby was the icing on the cake of showing Dan how much Lester owns Sarah’s body now. But! Dan grew a back bone and threw lester out of the house. Taking Lester’s moment of victory and crushing it. I think that moment affected lester a lot. Having Dan tossed from the club was the start. Now his plans are to turn Sarah into a slut right before Dan’s eyes, to utterly break him finally. Then he’ll be back on the baby hunt. Thoughts?

Jekyll

2024-03-31 14:34:13 +0000 UTC

I suspect that Sarah comes out of this intact. Dan? Not so much.

Darrow

2024-03-31 14:03:44 +0000 UTC

Hi Gee, Interesting position in terms of following through on option three. I dunno though. A weakened and corrupted Sarah simply being seduced and used by John feels almost like retreading - it just repeats the same thing as happened to her with Lester, except perhaps without the dark energy of Lester's malevolence, or Dan's fetish. So a faded copy. You could do that angle. The trick would be finding something more to do with it. Maybe John becomes the escape hatch, their affair is voluntary and healthy, and allows Sarah to move past both Dan and Lester into a new, non-toxic relationship, kids and all. It's hard to see it going darker - I like the idea of John proceeding with conquest, sharing the details with his circle. But it feels like too big a swerve, even a departure from the narrative into a new mostly unrelated plot thread. I think in terms of story coherence, we'd want Lester in the picture as in options one and two. Regarding Lester's motivation, I think you're right. One thing you're particularly correct about - he does share or sell the narrative and visuals of his conquests online with a select clientele. Although I doubt that's the main source of his income - it's more self validation. But that does explain the interactions with Kronus. Lester is indeed toxic, and it's difficult for toxic people to change. I see a lot of his motivations here confused and aimless. Impregnate Sarah... but share her? A climactic gangbang? Well, unless she's already knocked up, it would be hard to guarantee his fatherhood - and I don't think Lester would tolerate that. But I'm not sure he'd allow a gangbang on a woman that he impregnated. I think his agendas may be cross purposes. Of course, he may not have particular road maps, just a direction. Doing or destroying a couple is new untried ground for him, and he's loving it. But it's mainly only happening because they're receptive to it. The thing that keeps occurring to me is that Sarah is so willing and pliable because, whether he realizes it or not, she's in her comfort zone. There's always been this hidden Sarah of volcanic appetites.

Darrow

2024-03-31 13:53:08 +0000 UTC

Excellent chapter, I was actually hoping Lester would have rolled below Eugene's score, and seen Sarah take him into Lester's room. Have Dan and Lester jostling between them to watch through the peephole and finally Lester saying "fuck this!" and going into his room and And slamming his cock into Sarah while she's bent over sucking Eugene.... But it's awesome this way too lol.

neegan

2024-03-31 13:40:31 +0000 UTC

Excellent observations Mr Jeckyl. Truly wise words.

Royston smith

2024-03-31 12:27:06 +0000 UTC

I agree Jekyl , Jesse will be back , but on Lester’s terms. I can’t see him successfully blackmailing Lester. Good luck with that one., Jesse! One thing that puzzles me about this chapter though is Jesse is now a Director with another firm. How did that happen? Just been fired and then gets a Directors post? Doesn’t ring true to me. It begs the question how tf did that happen?

Royston smith

2024-03-31 12:12:47 +0000 UTC

While I find Lester an interesting character to read about, he is the villain of this story. While I agree he may be changing to want something from Sarah, it’s not in any way positive. Lester is evil, through and through. From what we know of his past, he’s drugged, raped, filmed, shared and blackmailed numerous women to this point. These aren’t weaknesses and lester is long past any form of redemption. I do get the feeling he wants more from this new type of conquest with Sarah. But more as trophy to keep around, to continue to boost his own ego and give him something to do between conquests.

Jekyll

2024-03-31 11:29:11 +0000 UTC

Hi SD, It advanced the story as we saw Sarah’s development. She obviously loved showing herself off to the nerds. In past similar situations she needed Laster’s prompting to do it. Secondly, she is also embracing the sexual heights Lester can take her to, even taking the initiative with him.

Royston smith

2024-03-31 11:12:57 +0000 UTC

Yes I agree sierra D, Very good point, well made.

Royston smith

2024-03-31 11:02:49 +0000 UTC

Fiestamasta, Great comment on way the story should go. Sarah is seriously getting into the Lester vibe and will agree to be fucked at work, share his be d at night etc. However, I think she is also getting off big time on showing herself off to other men, so the 2 cocks scenario isn’t far away.

Royston smith

2024-03-31 10:59:39 +0000 UTC

Hi Gee, Agree with all of this except the pregnancy part. If she was going to get pregnant than why has it not cropped up in the story yet? Seems to me that one of those couple of stops on the way to work after he fucked her in the marital home was to get the morning after pill.

Royston smith

2024-03-31 10:48:07 +0000 UTC

Hi Den, your thoughts on this are interesting and detailed. However, would Lester relinquish control in that way to a Man like John? doubt it. He would want to be in control. So, Jesse yes, but not John.

Royston smith

2024-03-31 10:41:33 +0000 UTC

Hi Gee, I agree the arm squeeze was odd unless it had a sexual connotation. But I would see it as Don giving himself storyline options rather than a definite direction the story will take. Remember the scene where her old boss Drew saw her in her underwear? So far that hasn’t been followed up and I doubt if it will be. RegardsJesse, I agree that Lester may use that route to break down Sarah further. She is obviously into the 2 cocks scenario and Jesse seems the type of weak personality Lester prefers , so he can control things tightly.

Royston smith

2024-03-31 10:20:47 +0000 UTC

What about a situation where Lester is starting to feel the need for something more than a play thing? Lester isnt inherently evil, he's a guy who has a raft of weaknesses and insecurities in a position where he is at least able to get a taste of "the high life" due to finding a mechanism to exploit. Why cant Lester start to feel something, start to change? Sarah's actions (and reactions) would give any guy a little bit of hope. Why cant Lester, as the proverbial ugly duckling, have some hope and finally "win"?

SierraDelta

2024-03-31 09:10:20 +0000 UTC

As for the diary and video content on Dan and especially Sarah, they won’t go looking for any of it until he makes them aware of it. By using it for blackmail against them.

Gee

2024-03-31 08:36:06 +0000 UTC

Hello again Den, My thoughts on Lester Are that he is torn between studying, planning, manipulating, seducing, drugging, filming, impregnating, beautiful victims & then selling the diarised story, video content online for money from his eager clientele. Dan and Sarah are a new dynamic for Lester. Lester’s ultimate joy is learning how to break the beautiful marriage bond of the couple through sexual corruption of the couples innocent fantasies. I believe the habits that Lester is addicted to is the sexual corruption of his victims. I believe Lester has Sarah addicted to the variety of sex scenarios introduced so far. Sarah is addicted to the unknown of what Lester may introduce next. Just the smell, leering attention, deliberate touch from Lester has Sarah’s nipples hard as marbles, her breast flushing pink and her pussy juicing up instantly. Sarah will capitulate to Lester’s future goals. He pushes her slowly past her boundaries with cunning planning. Ultimately Sarah will probably be ravaged by a group of the highest bidders amongst Lester’s clients. All while Lester films all the action from multiple angles and sells the content online. Lester is a predator!!! His spots won’t change now. Sarah getting pregnant by him will be the icing on the cake!!!

Gee

2024-03-31 08:31:56 +0000 UTC

Hi Den, I’d run with the 3rd option. My reasoning is that Sarah’s values have been compromised. Her desire to be looked upon lustfully is still in its infancy. She tries to take the reins occasionally but loves it when those reins are yanked from her and she is taken hard and deep. With John, I believe this will start as a pet project on his own. John will have 1, maybe 3 colleagues he will confide his sexual progress with in regard Sarah. With Sarah trying to stabilise the families finances, I believe she will keep it to herself. She won’t want Dan to get upset and cause a confrontation with John, which would compromise Sarah’s selection. John is a smart businessman and has done this many times before. Men of power and lust can’t help themselves. John may share a reluctant Sarah with these colleagues. Sarah may succumb on a number of sexual levels. With Lester getting her use to different cocks, Sarah’s reasoning might be what’s the harm in another 1 or 3 cocks. She may try initially to discreetly justify her actions for securing her families well-being. The sacrifice of herself for the betterment of loved ones.

Gee

2024-03-31 08:08:43 +0000 UTC

I think it's not believable but more than anything it's not feasible for Sarah to change Dan for Lester and stay with him. Lester is not a normal guy, not even someone powerful, rich or handsome. A relationship is not just sex, Lester may fuck Sarah very well but what after sex? Sarah has a social life, a job, DAUGHTERS and other things. Lester can't change his physical appearance so he can only change in other aspects. I don't see guys like that changing his life for some woman, not even for Sarah. The two only understand each other perfectly in bed. Suppose Lester takes Sarah and they spend the whole day fucking at his house. Even he would get bored of it and Sarah would start thinking, she would easily get depressed, her physical state would change and everything could get worse. Unless they magically brainwash her into not being a thinking person. It is a gloomy scenario. An ending where Lester "wins" is if Sarah (and Dan) can incorporate him into their lives but Lester also has to give in to it. Sarah could spend a few hours with him maybe two or three times a week. The downside is that everyone would have to live nearby. I think that would calm everyone down. Because if the meetings will be once or twice a month or even take longer because they live far away, Lester could become dangerous and that whole adventure would end badly.

Arthas19

2024-03-31 04:51:57 +0000 UTC

Dude. You're spot on with your analysis. I also believe option 1 is the most genuine and rational choice.

Volkfly

2024-03-31 04:47:22 +0000 UTC

I think she very well knows what John is doing. And all her "training" with Lester has taught her that men want her and she can control the outcome. I think she'll let him seduce her and then turn the power around.

Chris K

2024-03-31 03:18:43 +0000 UTC

Loved the subtle inclusion of Bill and Amber into this story. I hope someone finishes that story soon. Another great chapter Don, you’re the man!

Pete

2024-03-31 02:23:32 +0000 UTC

Good answer Gee, One thing you mentioned struck me "...need to get back at the men and women that teased & taunted him as a fat nerd growing up." Some of Sarah's inner monologue was thinking about how people looked at Lester, teasing, taunting, seeing a fat nerd. She actually experienced something like empathy or even protective feelings towards Lester in that moment, resenting people who looked down on him. Aha, here we go: "Besides, it bugged her that these guys were giving him a hard time. Just like when that homeless man called him fat, or that stranger subtly insulted him. Even the way that people looked at them when they were out together."

Darrow

2024-03-30 22:26:57 +0000 UTC

It could be that Sarah is becoming so independent of Dan with Lester, all the while being a very capable and competent woman, that she sees a brighter future with Lester than with Dan. Certainly Lester's scheming could help her with the office promotion. And I too see more there with the interim CEO in a future story. And with Sarah's willingness to be seen in public with Lester, willingness to be independent of having to get Dan's approval, and fully aware of how her beauty, body, and attitude can influence men, she could certainly begin to use her body to get what she wants outside of her relationship with Dan and Lester. Lester has a real good thing going with Sarah, he even realizes how good he has it - best ever! So why would he get tired of it and toss her aside? Doesn't resonate with me. I think the plan is to get rid of any of Dan's influence, perhaps even get her to eventually leave Dan. The big issue is the kids. Well, Sarah's already become used to Lester's smell and his mess. And she's the one taking care of the kids in Middleton all week, so is it that big of a deal to keep doing that with messy Lester and without Dan?

Sigma

2024-03-30 22:26:19 +0000 UTC

Very astute, and very interesting. The John situation raises some fascinating notions. Sarah is or was very straightlaced, very ethical, as is Dan. They don't cut corners, or do anything untoward of sleazy. Normal Sarah would certainly not respond to a low level sexual harassment, would not use sex or sexuality as part of her job search. I don't think she'd even think about it, or accept it even now. But we're past normal Sarah. So three scenarios: 1) She's sharing and chatting with Lester, and his advice or idea is to unethically seduce the guy and wholesale manipulate him. And this new Sarah thinks "Holy cow, why the hell not? Why not use sex as a tool to manipulate and take what I want?" I like this because it moves Sarah from victim to agent, and it embraces her transformation. The manipulative sex kitten has always been in her, but she weaponizes and moves it up a level. And I think it would be the most genuine corruption. 2) Lester hears about it from her, and uses it as an opportunity to break her down further, throwing her at John, either alone or with him, having her service him, and even pretending its for her own good and her promotion. This is not as satisfying, but it is kind of hot and in character, and continues to establish Lester as a controller and manipulator, steadily corrupting her. 3) John follows through on seduction of Sarah, and her morals and sexual barriers have been so compromised by Lester and his antics, that she folds and gives in... possibly without Lester or Dan's knowledge. I think she'd be smart enough, if it happens, to leverage herself for CEO. And there's story advantages here in terms of demonstrating both her pervasive corruption, and actually using it as a wedge against Dan and/or Lester if she has to deceive one or both of them. Anyway, thank you Gee. That was very insightful and thoughtful of you.

Darrow

2024-03-30 22:21:07 +0000 UTC

I really enjoyed this chapter! Sarah flirting and then almost dominating Lester was great! I would personally like this story to eventually end up with Dan redeeming himself, fixing his life, and bringing Sarah back to an exclusive relationship, but not for a while. I definitely want many more chapters of Lester fucking Sarah.

Travis Ellisor

2024-03-30 22:17:44 +0000 UTC

Hi Den I think it may be a combination of all the above. Lester is driven by a need to get back at the men and women that teased & taunted him as a fat nerd growing up. One would assume he’s never had a healthy intimate relationship with a woman. Which would explain his sexual gratification in manipulating, controlling and exploiting women. When it comes to Dan, Lester can’t help but want to compete and beat Dan. To steal Sarah out from under Dan would go some way to balancing the hurt perpetrated on Lester by the better looking jocks from Lester’s youth. I believe Lester is torn between impregnating Sarah and or having her taken by many men, while creating written, photographic and video content about his conquest of her. While also showing a defeated husband as his wife is taken from innocence to willing degraded cum slut.

Gee

2024-03-30 21:51:19 +0000 UTC

The interaction between Sarah and John was odd, especially his taking of her arm, could very well be something an indecent proposal. I wonder if in that instance would Sarah ask Dan for permission? Or Lester? Or both? Agreed! Sarah is becoming very vulnerable to this growing situation. If she’s properly amped up, and lester brings in Jesse, could she say no? Would she even want to?

Jekyll

2024-03-30 21:31:57 +0000 UTC

Might I add fellow readers Remember right at the start, the interaction of John, the interim CEO from the board and Sarah. John a head taller, Sarah racing to keep up, Sarah subtly asking about her prospects of becoming the next CEO John complimenting Sarah’s above and beyond dedication and secretly dropping a hint about her prospects. John reaching out and taking Sarah’s arm, gently squeezing her bicep, staring awkwardly at each other for seconds, before a sudden separation. Sounds to me John may try to leverage Sarah, using the role of CEO as an indecent proposal for seducing her sexually. Sarah’s marriage bond is in a much weakened state since Lester began breaking Sarah in as his big cock addicted cum slut. Sarah loves the attention, the power to seduce through being exposed & watched by others as her naked body is fucked. If John plays his cards right, he might gain some advantage over Sarah while she is confused and vulnerable about the dynamic of Dan and Lester. As for Jesse, I see Lester using Jesse in a similar scenario as the nightclub scene. Maybe a little more private, so that Lester can break Sarah in with the 2 cocks scenario. By getting Sarah use to more cocks, Lester can desensitise Sarah’s emotional commitment to Dan by using her arousal, lust and fantasies against her. Sarah is becoming completely vulnerable moving forward! What are you thought Readers

Gee

2024-03-30 20:00:13 +0000 UTC

I enjoy the manipulative control/sexuality dynamic on and with her, Lester toward other receivers.

WILLYBOY

2024-03-30 18:47:01 +0000 UTC

I keep wondering what Lester's end game is in this, or if he even has a coherent one. At one point, it was impregnating Sarah - a bouncing baby Lester taking up residence in her womb or her life. But I find myself wondering if he's moving from that. He definitely wants to slowly but completely crush Dan, teach him to accept 'his place' as absolute cuck and more or less ruin him. It's not personal, it just seems to be a game he's playing. Dan is in the way of Sarah his real target. But that said, what does he want from her? I don't think he wants her permanently, he doesn't want to be a husband or active father. He likes his life just the way it is. He seems to just want Sarah for a toy, to manipulate physically and emotionally, until he's bored. He may have this sense that once he's bored, once there are no more worlds of Sarah to conquer, once she's decided that she loves him, that he's crossed very boundary, done everything he can think of with or to her, then he'll just drop her or them, leave them behind and move on, his ego maxed out. And Lester seems consistently sociopathic enough for this. It's consistent with his other 'conquests' and I have the sense that he's got trophies - if not physical ones (he likely does have physical trophies) then definitely a hard drive full of notes and photos of each victim, likely massively encrypted. Wait. Would it be encrypted? Lester in his own territory - he can be sloppy and arrogant. He might not bother encrypting his trophy files if they're on his private hard drive. It would be interesting if Dan or Sarah went boking through his hard drive sometime and found them. I don't know why Sarah would, but Dan is realizing he needs to fight back to have any chance. If Lester's personal history is exposed, things get very explosive very fast in all kinds of ways. But that's all kind of a side angle. Coming back to Lester, I'm starting to wonder if he doesn't have any clear plans or goals beyond a vague 'make Sarah mine' without any grasp of what the consequences or implications of that would be for him or anyone. To be fair to Lester, he doesn't really care about other people, and so doesn't care about consquences to them, so long as they don't impact him. But maybe he's missing things. For one thing, this is probably the greatest sexual odyssey of his life, the most genuinely consensual, the most romantic, and the most involved. Is this changing or affecting him in any way at all? The other thing is that if he thinks he'll just break his toys and walk away without consequence, how likely is that. Sarah doesn't strike me as a woman abandoned easily. What if he gets what he wants, and Sarah just doesn't leave. She's already declared ownership - he's her property. What happens if Lester says "We're done," Sarah responds "We're not," and cracks the whip? We talk about Sarah's fall from grace, but in many ways, Sarah is getting steadily stronger and more adventurous. This latest episode represents a turning point. Sure, he still sexually dominates her, but that's what she wants. She initiates, she rides him, she declares ownership, she fucks with what she thinks is Dan. Lester has never once done anything she wasn't completely up for, he's been in her comfort zone all this time. Maybe the woman that Sarah's becoming is more than he expects. Just some thoughts.

Darrow

2024-03-30 18:44:53 +0000 UTC

Man i hope the focus keeps on just the three of them. That's what made the wedding dress chapter so great. I really dont like the public sharing aspect NGL.

Juan

2024-03-30 17:00:49 +0000 UTC

Hate to see ya go! Been fun cuck!

Jekyll

2024-03-30 15:07:04 +0000 UTC

Sex scene is hot as always. Rest of it I just skimmed kinda boring. Think I'm gonna drop this. Not worth paying for and already waiting. Read it for free when it comes out on literotica. Peace pervs nice hanging out with ya 😌

realcuck

2024-03-30 14:56:17 +0000 UTC

Loved the chapter Don. I think it was masterfully written and advances the fraying threads of the triangle at a slow burn. It’s my hope that this story continues with a focus on the relationships between the triangle. How they are slowly keeping things from each other. My favorite aspect of this story is the slow fall of Sarah, how this was initially Dans fantasy but it’s slowly becoming a Lester and Sarah thing. Where Sarah is becoming more infatuated with Lester. As opposed to how it started. Dan and Sarah exploring. I hope future chapters and events focus on this evolution. It’s my hope that Sarah is not written as some “unrealistic” out of control vixen that’s just going to bed everyone. There is plenty of that out there. But instead she is a mother, a breadwinner, a beautiful woman that is caught around Lester’s “finger” and is slowly losing herself to him. There is plenty of quick rocks erotica out there. But very few good authors and stories that maintain such a focus on the blurring of the relationship lines, the angst, the woman developing feelings for the lover/bull, the lover/bull having an agenda. Love it! I hope this story continues in the theme of tragedy. And that Lester eventually “wins”, not that he gets Sarah in the end as I don’t think that’s realistic, given her strong relationship with Dan, their family and real life. But I’m sure if this is the direction you take (I really hope you do!) that you will come up with something exquisite and excruciating. I’m just one reader. But I really hope the story does not imo devolve into crazy sex scenes just for the sake of fantasy sex to include other characters. Scenes should serve a purpose beyond being “hot”, such as this chapter. -Sarah feels so comfortable with Lester now and becoming an active participant in his world -being introduced to people as Lester’s girlfriend first -how easily, wet and anxious she gets when about to be intimate with Lester -the flex/move he made when she was on top that caused an orgasm she had trouble recovering from (this scene was so hot) as it kinda showed how Lester has more to offer and she is getting lost in his ability - the subtle beginnings of keeping things from each other (Dan and Sarah) regarding Eugene - the foreshadowing of now Lester is fulfilling Sarah’s fantasies (getting it at work) this is no longer about Dan. He is losing control

Fiestamasta

2024-03-30 14:39:43 +0000 UTC

I can definitely see this version of Sarah as well. Her desire to tease and receive gratification from it, is becoming very apparent. Playing with jesse would be right up her alley. We saw her embracing her sexual side a lot in this chapter, so controlling and dictating things with Jesse, would appeal to this new side of hers. I would say to that, the thrill of teasing the gamers made her extra turned on. But more so because she got to tease Lester. It really is her only time of control over him and playing that up in front of his friends, led to her intense claiming of him in the bedroom.

Jekyll

2024-03-30 14:29:31 +0000 UTC

I don’t mean as in this story, Lester being cucked like Dan. I just mean a story about that would be doable. I can see lester using ned for sure, I’ve talked about this before. He fits well, easily controlled and worships lester. Eugene offers some interesting ideas. Plus he seems like a wild card and someone on Lester’s level. Something we haven’t seen yet.

Jekyll

2024-03-30 14:21:38 +0000 UTC

Actually, that's kind of an interesting idea. Jesse's got a complicated, but barely there relationship with Sarah. She got to know him as Dan's incompetent, unreliable, slightly creepy colleague. Then there was his little stunt in texts. And his sub-par dirty dancing. I could see some version of Sarah, with no real respect for him, entertaining herself during boring lonely periods, screwing with him by texts, getting him to send dick pics and sext her. Sarah does enjoy teasing and sexual manipulation. She does it regularly to Dan, and did it to Lester and the gamers.

Darrow

2024-03-30 14:00:16 +0000 UTC

I doubt it. Lester isn't Dan, he isn't into cucking, and he hates Eugene. I'd almost see Lester using Ned. Lester has no respect at all for Ned, but I could almost see him using someone completely subordinate and non-threatening.

Darrow

2024-03-30 13:53:33 +0000 UTC

Only gotta wait a year or so for the ball to get rolling on that...

Chris K

2024-03-30 13:50:43 +0000 UTC

#1 could definitely be a story and there would be a lot who got interested in it. Having the wife be the strong one and take control of the men, will tic a lot of fantasy’s for lots of people As to #2, I see eugene being yhe first to get into this threesome with sarah and lester. As well as maybe a group session where sarah has to play her character. Clothes get burned off? She has to undress at the table, and so on!

Jekyll

2024-03-30 13:11:15 +0000 UTC

Jesse will definitely be back and I think, he may be getting set up as a major foil to lester’s plans. He knows lester set all this up, so if he may try his blackmail scheme again, only on lester now.

Jekyll

2024-03-30 13:07:46 +0000 UTC

More and more, I think the story is moving laterally. What gripped me was the dynamic between the 3 main characters, which is not evolving anymore... I'll give one more episode but if this doesn't get back on track, I am out. An erotic story about a D&D evening ? Totally doesn't cut it for me...

thib ear3

2024-03-30 13:05:26 +0000 UTC

Enjoyed this chapter! It moved Sarah and Lester's relationship forward, while showing Dan still struggling between embracing his own fantasy's and his distaste for the loss of control. Clearly this chapter is to set up the upcoming ones, lots of plot points dropped in what will become something more. Seeing Sarah embrace and move more into her sexual side was great. But while the sex scene was really good as always, it was the little things in this chapter I really enjoyed. "Hey, Lester," Sarah smiled.... Immediately being happy to see Lester and then in the next little bit, she reaches out for him. Really shows how far their relationship has come. I also enjoy the distinction that's really coming full circle. Sarah has been using these trips to Chicago to escape and find stress relief. Now her body is reacting to it for just that, getting excited by Lester's presence, her body preparing itself at the strong scent of Lester, which is now associated with pleasure and not the disgust of early chapters. The attempt to take control from Lester was also very hot. By shoving him back and demanding his cock is only hers, showed how there is intimate feelings from her. Even if she did her best to hide them from Lester, her actions spoke loudly. This was a glimpse of the old Sarah for a moment, the one who dictates and control's the sexual relationship with her husband. We saw that Sarah when playing the game, the one loves to tease and get attention, only amped up to ten. But what made it super hot, was watching how Lester instantly took control back from Sarah and showed us and Sarah, the new her. The one who submits and looses herself to giving control to Lester. There is a vast difference between Sarah's everyday and married persona, and the persona that is now becoming addicted this game with Lester.

Jekyll

2024-03-30 12:48:25 +0000 UTC

I don't find Dan written unrealistically, though I admit that he relents too quickly at times. In the earlier chapters he was in control, he was confident, didn't see Lester as a threat at all and was enjoying the early stages of his fantasy. But truthfully, he was already struggling and I feel like people miss that. Far from home, away from family, his career is in shambles, struggling financially, likely battling forms of depression. But in having Sarah play with Lester he found his drug of happiness. Now at the start it was amazing, he got to tease Lester and feel better than him. I think we can all acknowledge that Sarah and Dan's entrance into this bargain initially was due to their own arrogance at being superior to Lester. But as I stated above, Dan wasn't all there and the cracks were showing. Lester's manipulations aside, Dan is the prime example of someone with buyers remorse. In reality, this fictional character would hardly be the first man to enter into a relationship such as this and find out it wasn't everything he thought it could be. This goes back to their arrogance, Dan never saw Lester as a threat. Now he can see how much more Sarah enjoys the sex with Lester and from this chapter, he now sees how intimate they have become. Now we know that this is through Lester's shenanigans, but from Dan's view, he's loosing his wife to someone who he never felt as a threat. In the real world there are countless stories of this happening in relationships such as these. Couples playing around and having it blow up in their face. Now this is not everyone who plays around, but lots have suffered break ups and meltdowns in trust with their experimenting. So why doesn't Dan just pull the plug on this whole thing? to use a phrase, he's chasing the dragon. Struggling to find that high he had when this game started, he gets tastes of it and he is now realizing that his own fantasy's are shifting and warping. Seeing him try and fail to regain control is accurate to me, he doesn't have the upper hand anymore and doesn't know how to make those steps forward. So one step forward, two steps back. Now as to the kids, they exist and we as readers know that. But are you suggesting that parents don't seperate and divorce? Nothing so far has indicated that Sarah would just abandon her daughters and run away with Lester. But like her husband, she's chasing a vice that is going to effect all of them. Sorry for the long winded reply lol

Jekyll

2024-03-30 12:35:24 +0000 UTC

Thanks for the chapter Don. If I may have my say I was hoping you would delve deeper into Jesse and Sara's relationship, secretly (via text?). I waited a month imagining this situation. It's a pity

Octopus8888

2024-03-30 11:13:46 +0000 UTC

Anyone got any bets on how many chapters this takes to wrap up? At this stage, I'm putting down about 35-38. First observation was that it was technically quite good. Theres a cohesive element to a lot of the descriptions and activities. I think it does add some extra things into play, which is also good. To an extent, I like how there are multiple layers being built. But there are so many loose threads in this series to date, I wonder if we'll ever see those threads pulled and watch how they unravel. Perhaps what isnt, is that this chapter felt a little lost. Each element, on its own, stands up pretty well but cumulatively I'm still not sure how this would effectively advance the story line. This isnt intended as criticism either, I'm simply trying to understand what this chapter is providing, other than world building. World building is good, but I kinda want more than that. A couple of other completely left field random thoughts: 1) Comedy option - the ending is that Sarah is a sex crazed sociopath and both Lester and Dan are her pawns. 2) The foreshadowing of a potential threesome for Lester and Sarah; is the obvious choice one of Jesse or Eugene? I feel like this would make a lot of fans happy. Left field option would be someone from the hospital to create professional and intellectual tension for Sarah, to keep her in line for Lester. 3) Dan gets actual honest to goodness therapy and that magically makes his character somewhat interesting - win or lose, I really want to see some exploration around his state of mind, I think thats a compelling story on its own. I might have an alternate agenda though, I'm still trying to learn how to write and I really like a lot of the stylistic decisions that DonSilver makes. I'm not intending to write this style of content though, I want to do more in the vein of short stories exploring deep philosophical questions through characters facing extreme stress or crises. I wonder if left field idea #1 could work as a story?

SierraDelta

2024-03-30 10:49:35 +0000 UTC

A minor observation. Sarah both does and doesn't have a bra when she sits down at the game. Initially, she doesn't have a bra. But a few paragraphs later, she's wearing a light lacey bra that allows her nipples to protrude. Later on, when she takes her top off with her back to the boys, she's wearing a bra, but then a second later, all she's wearing is hot pants with her back to to the boys. Then a moment later, she's wearing a bra because she's facing them as she's going to the bedroom. For what it's worth, I think it works better if she's not wearing a bra at all through the game, and that her back is to them when she takes her T-shirt off on the way to Lester's bedroom and they see her bare back and the hot pants. There's another later sequence where Lester and Sara are in the bedroom, and Sara is on top of Lester, involving pulling off his sweatpants where the tenses get really confused.

Darrow

2024-03-30 06:04:32 +0000 UTC

Not familiar with D+D ,so I was a little lost. The final sex scene was great. Noticed Sara doesn't even hesitate fucking Lester almost seeming anxious to fuck him. It's good you added to the ending. Made it better. I am still liking the story and waiting for more.

John Lewis

2024-03-30 03:53:33 +0000 UTC

Hasn't been anything m

Elfy

2024-03-30 03:16:00 +0000 UTC

Nothing new I rate it 6 out 10 waiting for a new T.C

Fargo

2024-03-30 02:54:25 +0000 UTC

Loved the chapter as usual Don. Sarah not wearing her wedding ring was absolutely necessary,can't have a girlfriend wearing a wedding ring in that circumstance. Sarah teasing the other guys was perfectly done. The dialogue with the sex was off the charts hot. Sarah made some serious commitments, like the sex in her office, and wanting to be alone with Lester. She is so close to wanting to commit all of her devotion to Lester. Whatever Dan's next move is,I hope it totally fails. Very excited for the next chapter now.

Kyle Howard

2024-03-30 02:14:32 +0000 UTC

I'm with elfie, it hasn't moved forward and it's something that could have been written in 2 days and not have to wait 30. I'm done with this story after vesting a year of my life very disappointing this was the worst one yet. You keep saying how the next chapter is what I've been waiting to write, well you've played that card too often! Literally I am so disappointed I can't even put it into words. Well I'm not playing your game anymore just to keep us paying your way.

Luster

2024-03-30 01:45:26 +0000 UTC

I think this tragedy is quickly developing..... Dan is now keeping secret he did not watch the show and let Eugene take his place, Sara telling Lester he can pretty much have her whenever he wants, and did Eugene see the photo and knows something is up? Will he let Lester know he watched and not Dan? Will Lester and Eugene tag team Sara after Lester has completed knocking Sara up because his conquest would be fully complete? I don't think Dan and Sara have a snowballs chance at this point. I was rooting for them but accept they are past the point of no return. I am anxiously awaiting the next chapter of Neighborhood encounters instead!

Fuzzy Shark

2024-03-30 01:30:00 +0000 UTC

Maybe I should just move on. The sex scenes are hot but there has been nothing new really. I have previous submissions in my email. I mean really, how are any of the last several chapters different. She already had some dude watch her months ago. So some dude came on her. That he was homeless matters? How has any of this moved forward? Meh.

Elfy

2024-03-30 00:45:26 +0000 UTC

She already is. At some point there is no return to redemption. If this is a tragedy, then that's fine with me. You can't have a tragedy without a strong protagonist. Dan is not written as a protagonist. He has no agency. I am waiting for any development that resembles the initial chapters and all we get is more of the same in different situations.

Elfy

2024-03-30 00:43:13 +0000 UTC

And the kids? They exist. See this is my major problem. This story doesn't make sense because it ignores previous chapters. Its hard for Dan to have any agency when he isn't written realistically. The sex scenes are hot but otherwise, there is nothing here. It doesn't make sense.

Elfy

2024-03-30 00:40:23 +0000 UTC

Gtfo out with that shit.

Elfy

2024-03-30 00:38:38 +0000 UTC

I could not agree more, and I find that I am watching a total disaster unfold but I can't take my eyes off of it as it occurs and can't wait to see the next chapter...does that make me a "Dan"? Ewwwww

Fuzzy Shark

2024-03-30 00:20:29 +0000 UTC

Because Dan's boring and an idiot. Happy to see him get what he deserves. Sarah's more interesting with Lester anyway.

Chris

2024-03-29 23:41:57 +0000 UTC

Well, first up, that was a fun cameo by Bill and Amber of the Neighbor Chronicles. It seems that despite the Anniversary, Amber remains insatiable and Jacked. Sarah's evolution continues. It's gotten to the point where Lester isn't so much seducing her as unleashing her. She played the D&D game authentically, not so much as D&D but as Sarah ascendant, mercilessly teasing the boys, including Eugene. Lester may have pitched ideas, but it was total Sarah, and she was absolutely loving it. Interesting that she teased Lester with Eugene, the way she'd teased Dan with Lester, you get the impression that this is a familiar game with her. I'm 99% certain that dropping the robe and being naked in the hallway was Sarah's idea, not Lester's. And definitely, hard ownership - "That’s my cock. You understand? I’ll do what I want with it. You don’t touch it. Got it? Lester slowly nodded as Sarah eased herself off his hips, “That includes other women. No more Lizzie. No one else.” I don't think Lester's ever been in a situation where a woman has claimed his cock as her private property, or appreciates the implications of her taking possession. Which makes me think - not only did she stake a claim on him in private when they were alone, she publicly and visibly staked a claim on him in front of the D&D group. He brought her in to say "I have a girlfriend and she's mine." But Sarah turned it around and basically said "This guy belongs to me, the rest of you are fun, but Lester's mine." I'm not sure Lester appreciates or understands the implications of it. But then, I'm also not sure Sarah has followed it out honestly to herself. Other bits - Lester's room is trashed, but Sarah likes it that way, it reflects his personality, which she also likes. Also, she likes the way it smells, because she likes his smell. Unleashing is the right word, I think. Sarah is very close to the point where she's going to be outrunning Lester, literally coming onto him, being more aggressive, being kinky or extroverted in ways that surprise him. He's going to have to start running to catch up with her. Notice she called him "Daddy" on her own, after refusing his request? Also, notice there wasn't even a mention of a condom. And she was the one mounting him. She just didn't give a shit, she didn't care that Dan was watching her mount Lester without a condom. She's just over that, period, and Dan doesn't get a vote. And in contrast, her subliminal dismissal of Dan, "“You don’t need to wait here, Dan,” Followed by.... “Bad boy,” Sarah grinned and winked at him. Then she turned and continued to rinse off. She still loves Dan, but the signs of disconnect are everywhere. As for Dan, sigh, the humiliation tango just doesn't let up. He picks a terrible character and then gets himself killed on the opening move of a D&D game? And then he lets Eugene dominate him at his own peephole. He doesn't just share it with Eugene, he literally lets Eugene evict him. What's wrong with him? I could see sharing it, but he simply folds. Dan's clearly on a hard downward slide, he knows it, but he can't seem to do anything about it, but to continue to lean into it. He keeps getting weaker, now to the point that even Eugene is running him off.

Darrow

2024-03-29 21:13:31 +0000 UTC

Ah well, we're all nerds you see. Dan is and was an entitled jock.

Darrow

2024-03-29 21:12:10 +0000 UTC

I don't want Lester to win in the end. That's absurd. But I do want Sarah to start getting lost in lust and making bad decisions, without the knowledge or reassurance always from Dan. It just makes the story more interesting. All the sex is great, but if it doesn't feel like there is anything to lose then it's just mundane and boring.

Chris K

2024-03-29 20:34:19 +0000 UTC

But it's not just Dan. She has kids, parents and all that. She's going to leave her family for Lester? That's what I meant with its crazy to expect her to give up everything for Lester because he isn't taking the kids. People want Lester to win and I really want to understand what you think that means.

Elfy

2024-03-29 20:30:45 +0000 UTC

Great chapter, but is it ever going to get to a point where Sarah needs Lester so much that she doesn't involve Dan in everything? It's great to hear the things she says and feels for him, and then it always feels all for not when she goes right back to the loving wife. It just feels like with the intensity of the sex growing, Sarah's character hasn't evolved since the beginning. She should be to the point where she just spends the night with Lester. Full date night, deal with it Dan.

Chris K

2024-03-29 20:11:09 +0000 UTC

I don't get why people want Lester to win. It's just bizarre.

Elfy

2024-03-29 19:51:38 +0000 UTC

Hot as always. Looking forward to Lester and Sarah alone in her office and the night she decides to sleep in his bedroom instead of with Dan. She's 90% of the way there, it seems, so I just hope Dan doesn't get in the way like he seems to plan to.

Chris

2024-03-29 19:28:26 +0000 UTC

The NC reference was fun to read

ojapa O

2024-03-29 19:27:25 +0000 UTC

Toxic Attraction Chapter 16

Comments

Great chapter, love it, hoping for Sarah to start sleeping in Lester's room.

Can anyone provide a score out of 10 on TA chapter 17 from the Insiders Draft Ch17

Wondering the same thing! Are the drafts very different?

I think that's the answer, or it might not be his father's firm, perhaps an uncle or something similar.

I'm agree with a. 1089, the S. 's night spent in the Lester'bed will be a must.. But it would also be fun to see D. appear to the whole nerd group like a perverted spy (go Eugene!) of the "new couple".

I see 17's draft is already out. Is there any way to know if it's worth to upgrade membership and read ? I am regular member right now

Yes, could be. Perhaps as an extension of 16, that night. I also wonder if the 2 cocks scenario will raise its head.

Have there been any updates from Don on when TA17 will be released to insiders? It’s been over a month since TA16 insiders edition was released already - I’m ready!

I think Sarah will finally spend the night with Lester

So, any bets on which way the next instalment will go?

Incredible

I cannot wait for the next chapter lol

Accidentaly hit return. I think she's ready. She wanted Lester to join her. Not Dan.

This ties back to Middleton, when Sarah and Lester were in the shower the next morning. He tells her he wanted to walk in on her the first time she was there. Her reply was, "Why didn't you." "You weren't ready."

But she sleeps in and Dan wakes up and realizes Sarah's in Lester's room. Then he hears the low moans of morning lovemaking.

Family connections

I think it's definitely family connections. I assume that the whole 'toxic email' thing that was so disastrous for Dan's company was hushed up.

Lester can easily claim he had the procedure reversed. It can be done up to 10 years after the initial vasectomy.

Hi Roy. S., it happens when D., after the game in the living room, "slid into his room", in the 4th paragraph. S. is imagining D. 'possible reactions to her show...

I wonder if Sarah squirts? She seemed to come close to it in this chapter when she jumped off Lester after he twitched inside her when she was coming.

Cant find this at all Jap.

If Lester does get Sarah to wear a princess Leiea slave outfit in some scenario, will he play Jabba the Hut?

I think its Jesse’s Father’s firm and he wanted Jesse to start at the bottom with Walts firm, a friend of the family, rather than his own as a learning experience. When he gets fired he has no option but to employ him in his own firm.

Yes, i am wondering if its his Father’s firm and he has made Jesse a Director? Its the only way he could go from office junior to Director.

Maybe Lester had something to do with it, helping Jesse get a top job knowing how Dan would feel about it?

Absolutely, whether subconscious or intentional Sarah was hoping Lester would join her in the shower for round 2. Sarah claimed she needed to check in with Dan but she wanted Lester to take the option away, she clearly loves when Lester bends the rules until they break.

Yes , his Father. But even if his Father got him a new job going from a junior employee at Walts firm to a Director at another seems a big jump.

Didn't Jesse have some connections, like a family member, that helped him get his job working for Dan?

There was a subtle, but healthy dose in this chapter. Though, I'm definitely on board with much, much, more corruption to come!

Perhaps title inflation as not "the director" but "one of the" directors ? Like today everyone is an assistant manager. Jesse did seem to me too young and stupid to have an important position .

So riddle me this then. How does Jesse go from being fired to Director of another company within a week? Is there something we don’t know that is to be revealed? Or is it an unrealistic mistake/development?

Extremely interested by #1, could be some kind of exclusive Lester has on Dan, and a new wedge in Dan/Sarah relationship, maybe by keeping it a secret ?

Hi R. S., I suppose you are talking about "how long would he last?", right? Really It's a thought of S. When "D. Slid into his room" , 3 or 4 paragraphs after. Not exactly at he end of the chapter, sorry.

I didn’t see where she thinks this - which paragraph is it in?

Sorry Darrow, actually the sentence was a S.'s thought but the substance doesn't change... It would be a fun!

I 'd liked, Fuzzy Shark, a possible contrast between the D.'s difficulties at work and the S.' s promotion to CEO.

It's at the end of the chapter but it's said in a playful way, but it would interesting if she teased D. about his drop in performance....

If Sara gets the ceo job then Dan can be the stay at home dad while she plays with Lester at the office all day long and can go visit him in Chicago for consults at his apartment, strictly for business of course.

On there, I'm Dare.... something. I tend to go for deep dives and long comments.

I don’t see Sarah having a particular fascination with Jesse. I can see Lester forcing the issue, simply to humiliate Dan. But not Sarah just giving Jesse pictures.

I would also be very interested to read your continuation

Think I found the right comment! If not, look me up on literotica. I have some stories on there as well. Jekyll1439

If you go to Literotica, I actually wrote some fairly elaborate comments on Neighbor Chronicles. As to my distaff continuations of Amber's story, happy to share it, but not sure how to get it to you. Maybe contact me through Literotica.

Was that Jack mounting Amber against the kitchen island? Bill was liking it a lot! I think Dan’s only option is to embrace a dominant male taking Sarah a couple of times per month, if he wants his marriage and family to stay intact. Even then it’s questionable that the marriage will survive.

#3: Whoa. I love it, but not sure where it fits into the story yet. Maybe in a few more chapters when Dan happens to get in her and Lester's way? So that it isn't Lester sidelining Dan, but now its Sarah?

Would love to read that! And your overall thoughts on that series.

I wrote a bit of a distaff continuation of Amber's story, it was fun.

I like that. I thought it might have been Jack doing something with Amber offscreen. From the descriptions of Bill's expression, whether he found the home movies sexually exciting, I think he also found them emotionally traumatic.

I feel like the thump Dan heard when talking to Bill, was Amber’s head under the desk. Likely she was in on the conference call without ever being seen.

That’s right!! So lester will have to own up to that, or just claim they must have messed up!

I hope next chapter is not a filler and starts a paradigm shift for both dan and sarah

Completely agree on who the protagonists are, Gabriella. Dan and his fetish were the inciting force and now represent the obstacle/roadblock, but Lester and Sarah are the main characters.

Kudos LesterstheMAN! You rock. I just want to compliment you on close reading.

My BTB is "Burn the Bitch" a vengeful cheated husband. Is there a darker meaning to BTB? I'm thinking of stories where the jilted man is not excited by a cheating wife and kicks her to the curb penny less.

Definitely the 'movie night' - Amber had a lot of video to show Bill. Not sure what the 'thump' in the background was.

I love the series and don't want to be nitpicky but agree that there are several timeline issues. I don't think clinics offering vasectomies are open on Sundays.

Good point on the one and done. When Sarah finds cum beneath the peephole, and assumes it's Dan's, she thinks he's already had his relief for the night. This gives her the excuse to sleep with Lester. She tells Dan if he needs for relief, he can watch through the peephole.

Very good analysis. You make some good points. Since it's a given, Lester is going to fuck Sarah on her desk, will she be willing or will Lester need to dominate again. I'm also speculating what happens in Middleton. Will Sarah's mother catch Lester at home with Sarah, possibly right after sex?

Thanks for the comment and explanation. I've read a couple of chapters of Neighbor. I thought Bill and Amber sounded familiar, but didn't make the connection. I guess that explains the thump in the background and 'movie night.' Clever reference.

I had to look up BTB. Jesus H. Christ! Made me reach for the brain bleach. Not my thing.

That was quite insightful, thank you.

Agreed! Jack isn’t the same type of character anymore, which was the big appeal. Amber just goes back and forth in her thoughts and actions. Her constantly saying it’s all for the husband. Then walking out on Jack after jerking him off, was predictable and blah.

Just got myself caught up on that “new” series and while well written, very lacking compared to the original.

Corruption! More corruption!

I second that emotion, primarily because I'm a darkly dysfunctional person who happens to make good decisions but fully enjoys watching the schadenfreude experience of other privileged people making really bad choices.

FWIW, in porn, you can NOT involve kids. So you are quite astute, there isn't anything to do with the kids, and never, ever will be.

I'm sure he chuckles frequently

I find the branching off rather mundane. It has castrated Jack and made Amber the in-charge leader now. That's not what drove this series.

Let's not miss the fact that in her mind, Dan's one and done in the stamina department typically, and she knows her Chicago Boyfriend gets up for her over and over... as she already thought before discussing with Dan.

Honestly, I just want hot, dark, emotionally charged sex scenes, featuring dysfunctional people making bad decisions with furious intensity.

I could be wrong, but did Lester ever actually claim he was snipped? Sarah thinks he’s snipped because of Dan telling her where he brought Lester.

Some how I don't think this is a BTB story. Dan is the progenitor of the path they are currently on. Sarah has gotten caught up in it so Dan can't fault her too much. Things are the way they are because it becomes important later on.

Neighbor Chronicles, Envoyeur has branched from the original. I like it so far and find that it's a better presentation.

I enjoyed that series a lot and am hoping for a conclusion or continuation at some point soon.

Dan may already be irrelevant. I keep coming back to the shower scene.... * You don't have to be here.... * 'Bad boy' then she turns around and ignores him...

Lester likes to check what size equipment his apprentices for Sarah are sporting. I believe Jesse is bigger than Dan but not as big as Lester.

Agreed I see 2 paths Lester becoming the distant uncle with regular fuck benefits of Sarah. With Dan and Sarah raising Lester’s child. Or The fantasy threesome blows up in their faces and all go in seperate directions. Lester and Sarah will be fine. Dan not so.

Yes I remember you wrote that , agree 100% love to read that.