Feedback for Ch 7
Added 2022-10-31 04:18:30 +0000 UTCI want to explain my intentions for Chapter 7 and why it took so long to write.
Usually each chapter has one central goal. In this chapter, there are many. Trying to balance them all was very difficult. This chapter was hugely important and I couldnβt half ass any of it.
1. Introduce Dr. Carson and his clinic
2. Provide exposition for JPS
3. Show Lukeβs acceptance of having a pussy
4. Hint at Coachβs conflicted feelings
5. Have a filthy sex scene that makes the wait worth it
I especially struggled with 2 and 3. I wonder if the JPS explanation is enough (Iβm aware nobody has actually said βJock Pussy Syndromeβ yet, that will come later). For any readers who are unfamiliar with JPS, what did you think of Dr. Carsonβs explanation?
And I wonder if Lukeβs turn is believable? Iβm worried itβs too rushed but itβs something heβs been fighting against for a while. In a way I wanted to show that his relief at finally understanding what is happening to him helps him accept his pussy.
If anybody has any feedback on these points Iβd greatly appreciate it. Even though the chapter is complete, itβs still not done. Iβm not satisfied with it and I donβt feel like Iβve sufficiently reached those goals I have.
