Arc 1 - Chapter 17 - Catharsis
Added 2023-05-16 19:00:04 +0000 UTC---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
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Hello everyone, LunaWolve here!
Welcome to the release of Chapter 17 for y'all.
This is a chapter a lot of people have been wanting and also one of the ones I've personally been very excited about for multiple reasons, that will hopefully become apparent during your time reading it!
For the Wolf Lords among you, there has been some minor adjustments in the latter half of the chapter, but nothing to write home about. Just fixing up the parts that your feedbacks pointed out to be a bit weird.
I'm looking forward to hearing your first impressions and opinions on this exciting chapter. \o/
I hope you will enjoy it!
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As Thea waited for the arena to reset her and resurrect Astra, she quickly prompted the System to show the levelled-up version of her Sensory Overdrive with excited anticipation. 'Show me what level-ups do in this strange System...!'
[Active (Silver) - Sensory Overdrive - Level 1]
Description: Allows the participant to use up a certain amount of focus to drastically heighten their own Perception and mental capabilities for a short time.
Cost: 50 Focus - Factor: 550% - Effect Duration: 0.55 seconds
Taking in the changes in her Ability, Thea couldn't help but smile to herself, as further excitement rushed through her body.
'50% more on the Perception increase?! That's a 10% increase compared to the baseline, with every level going forward...! Same for the Effect Duration, too...! That's kind of crazy... Professor Pierce said that Abilities cap out at Level 20, so that would land me at a Factor of 1500% and an Effect Duration of 1.5 seconds! Assuming the Level-Ups are linear, of course. No wonder this is a Silver-ranked Ability... That is an absolutely absurd prospect to be working towards...
'I wonder if there's a way to grind out Levels... But based on what the Major said, I doubt there would be such a convenient option in the System. Still worth looking around for, though, I'd say. This Ability has definitely saved my ass a couple of times already and will likely do so again in the future, so pumping it up in numbers will definitely be worthwhile.'
With a sudden tug at her mind, Thea found herself standing next to a newly resurrected Astra, a couple metres away from the equipment racks inside the arena. The girl quickly acclimatised herself to her new body and location as her eyes landed on Thea. Eyes wide, she bowed deeply before her.
"Ahh…! I apologise for my poor showing…! I was really trying hard, but…"
She stopped mid-explanation, clearly unable to find the proper words to express her feelings.
Thea still felt strange being regarded in such a way by another person, but she couldn't help but feel sympathetic to the girl before her. Raising her hands in a calming manner, Thea replied, "Hey, don't worry about it too much. I actually thought you did amazingly well in that second round. You should've gone with the sword from the get-go; you're a real magician with that thing. Stick with it in the future, build your own style around it, and you'll be an absolute menace in future Practicals, trust me!"
Finishing, Thea realised that she felt oddly at ease talking to Astra. Her strange, subservient behaviour seemed to make Thea feel less anxious than usual, similar to when Thea herself talked to higher-ranked members of the UHF. It was like an obvious hierarchy had been established, making it easy for Thea to understand her role in the social encounter, putting her anxious mind at ease.
Astra smiled at Thea's reply, but it was immediately apparent that she did not feel the same way, as the smile bore a hint of pain and regret.
"I was really hoping I'd be able to get a good hit in, using my Ability… but I guess I completely miscalculated what it might be able to do in a close-quarters fight… I'm probably not cut out for this at all… You see, I was trying to get you to charge at me, then use my Ability to disorient you while you were moving at a fast speed, giving you no time to get used to it! But that clearly didn't work…"
Astra’s explanation confirmed what Thea had assumed during the fight. She couldn’t help but feel bad about the shattered confidence of the girl, especially as it wasn’t a fair assessment in Thea’s eyes.
“Actually… Your plan was perfectly valid and worked.”
With a glint of confusion, Astra’s eyes, which had gradually turned towards the ground in front of her as she had explained her thoughts previously, shot back up to Thea’s, who immediately averted her own, still unwilling to make eye contact with anyone outside of combat.
“It’s just… I used my own Ability beforehand, and it just so happens to counter yours perfectly. It allowed me to mostly ignore your Ability as a whole and go for the kill-shot. If it wasn’t for that, I definitely think you would have been able to land quite the nasty hit, Astra. I don’t think someone like Lan, for example, whose fight you’ve probably seen earlier, would have been able to avoid it like I did.”
With sparkling eyes at her idol's words, Astra excitedly bubbled, “Really?! You mean, I just got unlucky with the Ability matchup?! That… That helps a lot, thank you, Thea! I really want to know what your Ability is, but I definitely agree with what Lan said earlier after your fight…”
Her voice trailed off, unsure of where to take the conversation from there.
Thea felt somewhat sympathetic to the girl, understanding the tribulations of social encounters very well. Simultaneously, however, she also did not want to engage further in the conversation, as her anxiety was beginning to rise when the conversation found itself in a bit of an awkward place.
“We can always talk outside of this Practical and share our Abilities at a later date, then? We should get the arena ready for the next contestant before Lt Eifang comes by and sees us chatting instead of fighting. I doubt he’d be too happy about that…”
With big eyes and hands clasped before her mouth in silent amazement, Astra nodded enthusiastically at Thea’s proposal.
Conversely, Thea immediately regretted her decision to offer such a nondescript solution. She still wasn’t sure how she felt about the fangirl in front of her, whether she wanted to interact with her at all or simply avoid her entirely going forward.
Forcing a smile, Thea waved to the stunned Astra, in an attempt to break the girl out of her frozen state and get her to leave. “Good luck on your next fights then, Astra.
“Don’t get discouraged with this one; I’m sure you’ll be able to do well against other people who don't have the perfect counter to your Ability!”
Nodding to herself, as if to shake free from her stunned state, Astra gave Thea a bright smile before she bowed once again. "Thank you, Thea. For everything. Keep being our idol going forward, okay? Do your best in the upcoming fights; I'm sure you'll do well!"
With those words that made Thea cringe internally at being called an 'idol' once again, Astra quickly ran off towards the spot of the arena that she had entered from.
Staring at the retreating form of Astra with a mixture of emotions, Thea thought to herself, 'I don’t know if I’ll ever get used to this kind of treatment… I don’t exactly hate it, but I can’t say that I enjoy it either… Neither do I want this kind of responsibility… Being a sort of icon for mid-worlders…? I’m just a random cyan girl from the undercity of Lumiosia, not some kind of princess or whatever…’
Just as she was about to head towards the center of the arena once again, to prepare and wait for the next opponent, the barrier in front of Astra opened, and a loud conversation wafted into Thea’s enhanced sense of hearing.
"... just a mid-worlder, after all! Who even let her go in?! It was obvious she’d just get clapped like some street dog, considering she’s mid-world trash."
Thea’s head snapped over to the open barrier, to see a sturdy-looking man gesturing wildly at Astra, who was just about to leave the arena. She recognized the man’s voice easily, not to mention the intonations and obvious disgust at mid-worlders in his voice.
Like a wildfire, Thea’s stored up anger from the past couple of years bubbled up into her chest, immediately evaporating any negative feelings towards Astra as she watched the girl get berated by Alex for no reason.
Just as it seemed like he was about to go on another tirade at the meek-looking Astra, who had somewhat shrunk in front of Alex’s directed hatred, Thea couldn't stop herself any longer.
With vitriol in her voice, she raised her voice just loud enough to be easily heard, but not loud enough to be considered yelling. "Hey, asshole! How about you step in here and show everyone just how big of a man you really are? Ever since we got into this class, you’ve been spouting complete nonsense about your backward ideas that inner-worlders are somehow superior to us mid-worlders. Put your money where your dirty fucking mouth is, instead of hiding behind the barrier. Get your ass in here, and prove it for once, Alex."
At once, the spectators around the arena fell silent, as they waited to see what would happen. Even Astra had spun around to Thea, a complicated mix of emotions visible on her face.
"You dare…? That’s it! I’ve had enough of you! You asked for it, so don’t come crying to me afterward that I hurt your feelings, cyan," came the incredulous yet spiteful answer from Alex after he overcame his initially stunned state at Thea’s sudden outburst. He then pushed Astra forcefully to the side and entered the arena, the barrier closing behind him.
Thea could've sworn she briefly saw Lan sigh in exasperation just before the barrier closed, but she paid it no further attention, as her anger had set her entire body ablaze. She felt elated at the opportunity to let loose for once after the past two years of Basic had been marred with constant dirty looks, people actively avoiding her, and worse.
Coupled with her frustrations at Desmond and Isabella as well, Thea wasn't quite sure when she had last felt this level of anger towards anything. Alex's constant bigotry had definitely sent her over the edge, but at this stage, she didn't care about appearances any longer.
With determination and a burning fury inside her heart, she headed towards the equipment rack behind her and equipped two additional daggers, putting them into the holsters at the side of her armour before briskly walking towards the centre of the arena to await her opponent.
With an equally brisk step, Alex lumbered over towards the equipment rack, rapidly donning a suit of medium armour and pulling out two chainswords for his weapons.
Revving the swords as he walked towards the centre, he gave Thea a dirty look before spitting onto the ground. "The UHF should've never allowed your kind to be part of the Corps. I don't know what the hell they were thinking, but I'll make sure that at least our recruitment drive won't be marred by the likes of you. Don't think that just because you got lucky against Lan, ‘cause he got a thing for pretty girls, and beat up some mid-world trash, you'll have any chance, cyan."
Meanwhile, Thea had completely blocked out any thoughts towards Alex, her mind single-mindedly focused on only one goal: to humiliate and utterly demolish him in front of everyone.
Unlike the previous rounds, Thea did not take her usual low stance but instead opted for a medium one. Lowering her centre of gravity slightly while gripping one of her knives backwards, she mentally commanded the arena to start the battle.
As she waited for the timer to appear and the fight to start, she briefly examined Alex one last time to make sure her game plan was as foolproof as could be.
Alex was a tall, sturdy-looking man with a strong build, similar to Lan’s, that spoke of his dedication to physical training. Thea noted that he’d likely be around a 4 in Strength, based on his physical appearance alone.
His broad shoulders and well-defined muscles conveyed power and overwhelming confidence. He had a well-defined, chiselled jawline that he kept slightly elevated, giving the impression that he was perpetually looking down on people around him.
If not for his insufferable attitude and demeanour, most might have even called him handsome, speaking strictly from a physical perspective.
For Thea, however, the only interesting point of her examination was the reveal that her game-plan was likely going to work without a hitch.
The only unknown factor was his Ability, but based on the small bit of information she had gleaned from overhearing his and Lan’s conversation after her battle with Lan, she figured it couldn’t be worse than Lan’s. She also planned to end the fight quickly anyway, so she figured that Alex’s Ability was not going to come into play either way.
Finally, the holographic countdown appeared in front of Thea.
She focused her attention fully on Alex, her body filling with adrenaline in anticipation of finally releasing her stored-up anger. Coiled like a spring, Thea awaited the inevitable start of the fight.
As the buzzer rang, Thea immediately activated her System Ability.
'Sensory Overdrive.'
With time slowing down around her, she rapidly analysed Alex's initial movement.
As she had expected, he was the hyper-aggressive type. Alex was already primed to rush towards her at full speed, his right leg pushing him hard off the ground in her direction.
Thea's senses sharpened by her activated Ability, she effortlessly kept track of Alex's every movement as he barrelled towards her. She knew that she needed to end the fight quickly and efficiently, leaving no room for doubt about her victory.
As Alex charged towards her, chainswords revving menacingly, Thea carefully timed her next actions. She had decided to revert back to her undercity style of fighting for this match, rather than use her copied version of Lt. Frost’s style, for this exact purpose. It was not a style that promoted grand spectacle, nor a style that cared about appearances or safety. It was simply a style to kill or severely maim your opponent, in any way possible, as fast as possible.
Just as he entered striking range, she smoothly sidestepped to the right, baiting Alex to forcibly alter the direction of his strike towards her, before twisting her body in the opposite direction, narrowly avoiding his aggressive swing with seeming ease.
She knew that Alex's strength and momentum would momentarily leave him off-balance, providing her the perfect opening.
Exploiting that brief window, Thea executed a swift roundhouse kick to the back of Alex's knee, causing him to stumble backwards, in a fruitless attempt to steady himself once again, and drop to the ground with a grunt of surprise. Before he could even begin to recover, she had already closed the distance between them, knives at the ready.
As she felt the effects of her Ability wane, Thea activated it once again, to extend the duration.
'Sensory Overdrive.'
Turning mid-fall, to intercept Thea’s follow-up, Alex swung his chainswords towards her to keep her at bay, but she had long anticipated and seen the attack coming, thanks to her Sensory Overdrive. Suddenly throwing herself to the ground, Thea slid across the arena floor towards the now grounded Alex, her momentum from the brief sprint carrying her forwards.
Wide-eyed, Alex realised the threat she posed too late, as both of her knives plunged deeply into his exposed armpits, an area that she knew had weaker armour than the rest of his torso, as his arms were still wide open from the attempted swings at the approaching Thea.
He cried out in pain as the knives penetrated through his shoulders and out the other side, effectively disabling both of his arms in an instant.
Simultaneously, Thea let go of her knives, pulling out the additional pair she had prepared before the fight, while using the last bit of her forward momentum to headbutt the reeling Alex with her forehead, further disorienting him.
While her Vitality and Strength were doubtlessly below Alex’s, the sudden action, coupled with his already injured state and Thea’s continued forward momentum from the slide making the attack even quicker, gave him no chance to react.
Thea felt the bridge of his nose and parts of his orbits shatter underneath her brutal hit, her own pain at the impact quickly forgotten.
Just as her Sensory Overdrive ran out, she plunged her two additional knives deep into the stomach of the now lying Alex, targeting his kidney and liver, eliciting a scream of agony from her defeated opponent.
Slightly disoriented by the backlash of her Ability, Thea got back up on her feet with a fluid motion, quickly backstepping from the reeling Alex. From the outside, the entire sequence of events had looked like a single, fluid attack, rather than multiple individual actions, carried by Thea’s supreme control over her own body.
She had decided not to go for the instant-kill, as she had done in all the other fights so far, to let out some of her frustrations. Thea simply watched, while nursing her slightly bleeding forehead, as Alex screamed in pain on the ground before her.
He briefly tried getting up and attacking Thea, but his attempts quickly proved futile, as he was unable to use his arms and the pain from his injured liver and kidney kept him nearly entirely delirious.
“Fu…ckin… bitch… I’ll kill you!” He managed to squeeze out through gritted teeth, between bursts of pain.
With an amused, mocking voice, Thea replied, “Oh? My bad! I thought that was the entire point of our fight here? I was under the impression that we were already trying to kill each other. I apologise profusely for my mid-worlder brain not understanding the instructions completely. For you see, it seems that I’ve already killed you.”
Adding a fake, surprised face to the mix, to further mock the dying Alex before her, she was certain that even Lt. Frost would have been proud of her banter.
Walking up to the profusely bleeding Alex, Thea loomed above him, looking down on his writhing form.
“Say, what happened to all that bravado from before? I thought you were here to teach me how worthless I am. What happened to that? Did you decide that I had too much of a pretty face and ended up unable to pull through? Is this really all that inner-worlders pride themselves on? A fleeting feeling of false superiority, immediately shattered upon being tested?”
As she continued, her voice became more and more frantic, her anger overtaking her initial intentions of simple mockery.
“You’re utterly pathetic, Alex. Lan even warned you. I heard all of it. He even told you straight up. You're not even close to his level, yet you thought you could beat me? Why? Just because you’re an inner-worlder, who has never had to fight a real life-or-death battle?
“You don’t even know what it means to truly fight for your life. You never had to run for your life until your lungs were burning, your legs gave out, and you were puking your guts out from exhaustion, simply to survive another day in a shithole undercity. You never had to scrounge up dregs of food from trash cans or the streets, just to have something to subsist on for the next couple of hours until you found more.
“You’ve never had to hide underneath the dead bodies of your peers from roaming gangs that were out to rape and kill you, just for fun! You. Are. Nothing. Alex.
“Your inner-world pride will amount to nothing, because you simply are nothing. You have no future here, no chances to climb the Corps, no potential. You are the worst of all the Marines in our drive, for you don’t even understand where you’re going wrong, when your friend forcefully rubs your stupid fucking face into it.”
She kneeled down next to Alex’s face, who was glaring at her with utter contempt in his eyes, a quiver of rage and pain escaping his mouth.
“One last thing: How dare you? How dare you question my sacrifices in getting here?”
Thea forcefully slapped him across the face with her gauntleted hand, eliciting a renewed scream of pain and a spray of blood from his mouth.
“How dare you question the sacrifices all of us mid-worlders have made to get here? The sacrifices our planets have made over centuries, to finally be recognized by the UHF?”
Once again, she slapped him across the face, her anger fully taking over at this point.
“And lastly, how fucking dare you question the UHF leadership? Major Quinn? The initial assessment as a whole? 2 years of Basic, including the entirety of the Allbright System? Just who exactly do you think you are, to judge all of this with your narrow mindset of being a stuck-up, stupid cunt, to claim they’re all conspiring to get mid-worlders into the Corps, simply to spite you?”
One last time she forcefully slapped him across the face, fully putting her all into the hit, breaking parts of his teeth and cheek bones in the strike.
Upon slowly recentering his vision on her, his eyes filled to the brim with contempt and hatred, Alex gritted his, partially broken, teeth and muttered, “Fuc—”
Before he could finish however, Thea rammed her gauntleted fist deep into his mouth, shattering nearly every tooth in his mouth and cracking parts of his jaw, as she continued to bore her fist deeper and deeper.
“No. Fuck you.”
With a last, violent push, accompanied by a sickening crunch, Thea put all of her weight behind her fist, shattering the back of Alex’s neck.
A few moments later, as Alex’s hate-filled eyes finally glazed over, the buzzer sounded, ending the first round of the fight. Slowly, Thea regained her senses, as the unbridled rage inside her body subsided.
It was instead replaced by a feeling of utter regret, ‘I definitely went way too far on this one…’
Where before, she had somewhat hoped that the blue barrier was translucent from the inside, so she could see the reactions of the spectators, she now wished the opposite. She wanted the barrier to be fully opaque and not let anyone from the outside see her behaviour, one entirely unfit for the Marine Corps.
Stunned by her own actions, Thea thought to herself, ‘I should have stopped when I was ahead. That was incredibly stupid of me…’
Suddenly, the entire arena turned crimson, as the lighting abruptly changed. Simultaneously, Thea heard the revving of chainswords mere metres behind her, before an ear-splitting screech robbed her of her senses entirely.
The next moment, when she managed to spin around and open her eyes again after the intense bout of pain brought on by the sudden noise, she saw a recently respawned Alex, suspended in a cone of light, mere metres away from her, brandishing his dual chainswords in a clear attempt on her life.
Eyes wide, Thea rapidly backed away from the cone of light. Sure, Alex was a bigot and a piece of trash, but she never expected him to go this far. To actively try and kill her, outside of the official arena fights, was utterly insane. It had been a completely impossible scenario in her mind, to the point she hadn’t even considered it.
Just as abruptly, a deep, threatening voice echoed through the arena from Thea’s left, “Just what in the Emperor’s name do you think you’re doing?”
Startled by the voice, Thea quickly spun around, while backing off from the origin with a jump.
Seeing Lt. Eifang lumber menacingly around ten metres away from her put Thea’s mind into a state of panic. His face and general body language spoke of a severely upset demeanour, no matter how one tried to look at it.
“Recruit Alex Cladion, due to the attempted assault on the life of one of your fellow Marines, you are hereby immediately stripped of your rank and will be transported to the brig for further processing.
“I truly wish I had the authority to take care of you myself, but rest assured that Major Quinn will receive a full report on the incident, with very precise recommendations on what to do with you. Consider yourself lucky that you’re getting off that easy…
“Sovereign, take him to the isolation brig. Inform Major Quinn of what occurred and include a full recording of the entire Practical class. His prior comments before the class started will likely play a big part in her decision-making.”
Upon the Lieutenant’s words, Alex suddenly disappeared from the arena, alongside the cone of light and all of his equipment. Before Thea could process what even happened, Lt. Eifang turned towards her, his gaze freezing the blood in her veins to the core.
“And you, Recruit Thea McKay… Consider yourself equally lucky that his bad behaviour outshines yours several fold. While you did not, technically, break any rules or regulations, as everything that occurred was part of a fight-to-the-death, I trust that you understand your actions were way out of line with what the UHF Marine Corps stands for?
“Trying to prove that mid-worlders aren’t savages by displaying the most savage, borderline torturous treatment of a fellow Marine is not exactly what I’d call fruitful. Make no mistake, the beginning of the fight was beautifully executed, but you should have ended it there. Especially as a member of Alpha Squad, you are supposed to be an example of how to behave, not an example of how to get kicked out of the Corps in record time.
“If I ever see you needlessly prolong the suffering of a fellow Marine like that again, I promise you here and now that I will be sure to return it in kind, before throwing you into the brig and handing you over to Major Quinn. This is your first, last, and only warning you will ever receive about this matter. Are we clear, Recruit?”
Utterly terrified at the thought of being on the receiving end of Lt. Eifang’s fury, Thea quickly saluted before him and pressed out a “Yes, Sir! Crystal clear, Sir!” between laboured breaths.
“Good. Now, get your shit together and prepare for the next opponent. The class has not been dismissed yet, so you’ll continue to fight until you drop. Don’t ever do stupid shit like this again. You’re in the Marine Corps now, not whatever backwater undercity you hail from. You might be fighting to the death, but only a simulation and exclusively for training. Keep your disciplinary actions to a limit going forward, Recruit.”
With those words, Lt. Eifang briskly walked towards the exit of the arena, which opened before him. As the barrier opened, Thea heard a flurry of discussion waft in. After listening to it for a few seconds, her mind was slightly put at ease.
“What just happened?! Where did Alex go?”
“Why did the barrier block out the rest of the fight? Did she win?”
“Of course she won, there’s no way he got back up!”
“What was Lt. Eifang doing in there…? Why did the barrier turn solid?! This is ridiculous; I wanted to see the end! It was just getting good!”
Still shaken by the encounter, Thea slowly started collecting her knives that she had used during the fight, before a tug at her mind abruptly jolted her awake. Once again, she found herself standing in front of the equipment racks.
‘Ah… Right. The fight is over, so of course I’d be reset…’
Feeling slightly disoriented, she sat down on one of the benches near the equipment racks. They were placed for contestants to be able to sit down and equip their armour, but they also proved effective at providing the necessary breather Thea required at that moment.
‘I got really lucky there. I wouldn't have been surprised if Lt. Eifang had thrown me out of the Corps immediately… I can’t believe I was this stupid… I can’t ever let this happen again. I cannot lose this chance, after finally getting here…’
While letting the emotions of the past minute wash over her, Thea heard the chatter from outside the arena abruptly cut off. Being used to the barrier opening and closing by now, she knew that it meant her next opponent had entered.
With a renewed focus, one aimed at providing exemplary performance with no further mistakes, Thea got up from the bench, holstered her additional knives, and walked towards the centre of the arena once again to ready herself for the next fight…
Comments
Hey, thanks for the kind words and feedback! I think the main thing what happened here is that it simply overflowed. Even the most stoic and self-restrained person has a point at which they'll go "That's enough". Thea went through a bunch of shit, emotionally, the same day and the day before, coupled with 2-years of prior bullshit to handle, and then something she absolutely abhorrs (shit-talking someone who tried their best -> Astra), it simply reached a point where she didn't WANT to restrain herself. Considering that she was in an environment that allowed violence, she didn't really take a giant leap. She simply lost control half-way through, feeling the catharsis taking over her rational parts, if that makes sense. Hope that makes sense? Those were the thoughts that went into this decision.
LunaWolve
2023-05-27 17:09:44 +0000 UTCAnother new patron here, love your story. Just letting you know that I also found this chapter surprising. You’ve portrayed Thea as a very competent character with high self control in situations of adversity, anf against this background I was surprised to see her lose control like this. Is someone who is so good at operating in spite of pain, fear etc. going to lose their mind over nasty comments? Or not think of the consequences? An Ender Wiggin -style calculated takedown of a bully might have been less surprising. Have I understood Thea’s character wrong?
E. V. R. K.
2023-05-27 15:24:37 +0000 UTCHello there! That "Ability" you're referring to, was simply her instincts automatically avoiding the incoming shot. This is not something she has active control over. The reason it did not trigger here is, as you've aptly surmised, the fact that the strike wouldn't have connected. There was no inherent danger present in the attack, so her instincts did not kick in.
LunaWolve
2023-05-23 22:24:18 +0000 UTCHi, I’m a bit behind, but I had a question. Thea has shown an ability activate that allowed her to dodge a gun point blank, but now Alex can reequip, run across a hall and start his strike and Thea does nothing? Is it because the skill inherently knew that the strike wouldn’t land?
Stuart Anderson
2023-05-23 22:20:36 +0000 UTCLOL
LunaWolve
2023-05-21 03:57:44 +0000 UTCWhat was that about fangirling and imitating styles? Looks to me her original style was more fitting for her too. XD
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2023-05-21 03:02:55 +0000 UTC👍😎
Quendolayne
2023-05-18 16:04:21 +0000 UTCI tried demonstrating that Thea lost control, with the whole slap/fist thing. I agree that it would have been more... precise and controlled with your way, but that was not the point of the chapter, if that makes sense. --- Winning and disciplining Alex was not the issue, but the later torture. So there was no reason to hide the fight from view, before she had won. The issue was with what happened AFTER she had won. --- Hope that clears things up!
LunaWolve
2023-05-17 13:22:29 +0000 UTCThank you!
LunaWolve
2023-05-17 13:20:04 +0000 UTC@Critical Hit, first and foremost, a big thank you for being straight forward and open about your dislikes for the chapter. Having dissenting voices willing to step up is a massive benefit to me, as a writer, as it gives me things to think about and work off of. The same applies to @Quendolayne, by the way. --- Now let's get into it: Alex not getting a warning from the Sovereign, is simply due to the fact that it has never been instructed to do so. The official UHF stance as of this moment, on matters regarding social interactions is "Deal with it yourselves, don't let it affect missions". So the Sovereign had no reason to ever issue a warning or similar, prior to the point where Alex breaks the rules (actively tries to severely hurt/maim/kill a fellow Marine outside of the designated training environment). --- Psych evals were done over the course of Basic and throughout the every-day life on board the Sovereign. The Sovereign's AI does a continuous evaluation of the Marines, to detect potential hotspots for issues. This does not mean, however, that these issues will be rooted out immediately. To speak a bit from behind the scenes (spoiler-ish, as parts will come up in future chapters): Alex being placed with Thea in the same Practical was no coincidence. The entire situation was purposefully set up to test Alex's psyche, to see whether he could overcome his issues if presented with undeniable facts. The Sovereign is certain that Thea can handle such bigotry, so it was not considered a risk to have them run into each other, in regards to potentiall stunting Thea's own development. --- The fight was shown to the recruits up until the point where Thea steps up to Alex's face (cutting out the slaps, the monologue and the kill). There is no official "this is what happened and this is how we dealt with it" yet, as Lt. Eifang does not do these kinds of things. Major Quinn is directly responsible for the administration of this drive of Recruits, so she will have to make the final decisions on punishment, etc. Once that is done, there is guaranteed going to be an official announcement on what exactly is going on. --- As to the sniper <> explosion issue during the assessment: The reason that the local leadership did not immediately know how or what exactly was happening on the first sniper shot, is twofold: First, the actual local-level leadership, outside of Captain Greysmith, were brand new. This was part of their promotion assessment, so they aren't fully prepared for the level of detail and attention they'll have to pay to everything to get to the right conclusions. So you can definitely blame it partially on being straight up incompetent, to a degree. Second, figuring out the exact connection between a sniper taking a shot and being blown up right after, might seem easy in hindsight, but in the actual battle itself it would go more like this: Thea sees scout, asks for permission to shoot. Simultaneously, other snipers see the scout as well and to the same thing towards their SL. Thea gets permission to shoot, as do multiple other snipers that spotted the same scout. Someone takes the shot and gets the kill, likely confirms it to their SL. A short time later, but not instantly, the person that actually got the kill, out of the group of people requesting to shoot, together with the rest of their squad get blown to bits. From a communication and information standpoint, trying to connect the dots that shooting the scout caused the explosion, with a sample size of 1, is extremely hard to do. Especially as the SLs act autonamously for decisions such as giving the go-ahead for shooting individual low-medium priority targets. Leadership was not even aware of the fact that a scout was spotted and shot, until after they asked "What the fuck was that explosion". By the time Thea shows up (after the 2nd sniper), Leadership has already figured out it's SOMETHING that the Stellar Republic is doing, but not how or exactly what causes it. One explosion might be an accident and needs to be investigated, Two explosions is deliberate. The first thought would go towards things such as sappers, infiltrators, spies or the like, as the Stellar Republic was not known to have access to technology like GOG Launchers at this moment in time. Connecting the dots that shooting a scout would somehow cause the explosion, is a bit of a leap when it comes to logical thinking and conclusions, especially as leadership is still not patched into every single sniper's request to fire on low-medium priority targets. When Thea comes in and explains what she learned, which is something she has a unique perspective on, as she saw both scouts, requested permission on both, but did not shoot, and then ALSO learned that the snipers that DID take the shot, due to her curiosity regarding the 2nd sniper, both died in the explosions. Without that specific rundown of dots, it would be hard for anyone to connect the dots, as crucial parts of the whole would be missing. Leadership would be missing the most information, as they'd be completely in the dark outside of "explosion occured at sector X". By the time the second explosion happens they'd know "explosion caused by Stellar Republic at sector X" and madly scrambling to figure out HOW it was happening, likely presuming sappers and the like. Snipers would be missing the information of who actually died in the explosion (the snipers that got the actual kill), as that would never come up in a normal conversation unless specifically requested, such as Thea happened to do with the 2nd sniper. Leadership would have undoubtedly made the connection by the third, fourth or maybe fifth sniper, but expecting them to get it right on the first or second, when there is no real logical connection between shooting the scout (which leadership isn't precisely aware of, outside of "It's a thing") and the explosion occuring (as it would be impossible without sappers and the like, according to their current understanding of the missing tech for the Stellar Republic). --- Alex would have gotten counseling, if he had been deemed worthwhile to keep, after the Practical test. As stated in the comment previously, this WAS his psych eval, so to speak. There's no easier way to test whether someone will break down under pressure, than to put them under that exact pressure. "You hate midworlders and especially cyans? Here's a midworlder cyan that was placed so far above you, that you will never be able to touch her unless you work your ass off!" If Alex's reaction had been hateful, bigoted and inconsolable, he'd be getting proper counseling to work through his issues. If he fails the pressure test and cracks, he's unfit to be a Marine and gets removed from the Corps. Not an elegant solution, but an efficient one. --- What @Michael Holloway said is also partially true here and definitely worth a read. One correction: Alex was definitely booted for what he did (the attack), as that action DIRECTLY is what broke the rule xD He was not booted for being a piece of shit, however. That would only come in later, as stated above. --- I hope this comment alleviates some of the concerns, although I recognize that it won't explain everything. The UHF Marine Corps is not perfect. It's far from it, actually. They're an army that was established during a time of all-out war, with very little time to actually get their foundations right. Most of what they do is on a "If it works for now, it'll be good enough until further notice", where the notice never came. There are absolutely things that we can go and question as whether they're efficient, elegant or even good solutions, but they don't necessarily have to be. As long as they have worked for the UHF so far, they're good enough in their eyes, for they don't have the leeway to do vast, sweeping policy changes while also trying to wage a war on a galactic scale. Getting midworlders into the Corps is a necessary change they had to make, but it's not fully thought out down to the very last thing. Major Quinn is here to oversee this drive in specific, to create these guidelines and figure out what works and what doesn't. That's her role. Hope that helps!
LunaWolve
2023-05-17 13:19:52 +0000 UTCNever apologise for interesting posts! :) I don't disagree with your overall points. I actually think you're spot-on with a lot of it. I'd simply like to point towards the fact, that this is the first time something on this level of bigotry is happening in the UHF. Mid-worlders have never been part of the Marine Corps before, so such an intense level of dislike, especially for the cyans, is entirely new for the UHF as well. The leadership is not actually omnipotent or omniscient. Most of what the UHF does, is cobbled together in the recent centuries and been implemented on a "works well enough" basis. There will be some additional fallout for this particular issue in future chapters, which will hopefully align a bit more with what you would like to see, although I can't guarantee that, of course xD There is a definite intent behind the way it is written as of now. A feeling of "this doesn't feel thought out" in regards to the UHF leadership's decisions, are definitely intended.
LunaWolve
2023-05-17 12:42:43 +0000 UTCVery true. The way I read it was that her fight was public, her taunting was not.
The Lost Pages
2023-05-17 12:27:50 +0000 UTCthat was awesome lol
Quinn Hopkins
2023-05-17 06:07:30 +0000 UTC@Lost: If her actions make the socio-nazis think twice before furthering their hateful agenda then she did more for morale and discipline then whole leadership together. But if it was blocked then we should really be worried about the true agenda of the leadership here.
Quendolayne
2023-05-17 04:52:36 +0000 UTCI agree … pls read my lengthy post above in the replies … I guess I wrote similar thoughts without reading your post (even if my focus wasn’t so strongly on the leadership capabilities).
Quendolayne
2023-05-17 04:48:07 +0000 UTCThx for your answer. Your arguments are well thought and precise. But let me point out some problems with it: 1) It is a society construct that physical trauma is more worse the emotional trauma. Therefore there is an unwritten rule that says you shouldn’t break someones arm bc he/she spilled some hateful bias and negated verbally your right to life. Which is ofc BS bc emotional trauma can like physical linger for years. So when the Alexhole belittle the mid-worlders he do so much more damage then a simple bruise. Interestingly it is mostly ppl in power who preach the society construct with the goal to spill safely their hate without consequences. But you can’t measure pain so it is all equal with no concern of the source. In a virtual environment the society construct above lose even more traction. All the Alexhole got in the end was emotional pain and nothing more. I refuse to see a difference between pain he caused with his words to the pain Thea caused and the Alexhole felt after he respawned. So in the end it is all the same kind if pain and the societal construct is irrelevant. 2.) The prolonged painful state was the only state a being like Alexhole would listen long enough to acquire the message … I doubt he understood it. Beings like him can’t or won’t reflect or use their brain on the roots of their bias and hate. Therefore only fear of pain, same like a pavlov reflex, can train them to step back from publishing their hateful agenda. 3.) He wasn’t a fellow marine. There is no organization in which his kind of beings can be together with ppl like Thea. Therefore either the mid-worlders leave or the socio-nazis leave. There is no middle ground. For this reason alone was the diatribe from the Ltn. “I heard everything, but couldn’t bothered to do something about it” very off topic. 4.) A organization which preach water and drink wine is highly suspect. Rank can torture and the file have to take it and is led to believe torture is wrong. Way to go to create a cognitive dissonance. The message is clear: “Do as we say, don’t do as we do” and power/rank overwrite any rules. …. But, heh, Thea joined out of her own free will - so she just have to deal with this bigotry. And no this isn’t the same as condemning any hierarchical structure. But I believe that you have to life what you demand from your subordinates. Sorry, for the long post.
Quendolayne
2023-05-17 04:39:48 +0000 UTCThink it would have been better if more of the taunting was mid fight. Maybe disabling one arm at a time and dragging out his death via the same stabs but without the slaps or the fist through the mouth thing. Seemed weird to me how he only intervened to block the other recruits view and let her torture Alex after she had obviously won.
IWannaBeATiger
2023-05-17 03:53:34 +0000 UTCFor letting it get this far out of hand. That isn't actually out of character. Depending on the situation and the military. They tell you something, then give you enough rope to hang yourself. You gotta remember. This isn't that out of hand by their standards. They're in a giant video game, respawns, all the rest. It's a brutal fight, but no harm done long term. No hospital stay. No bruises. Just pain followed by a reset then no pain. From a military point of view this isn't actually that big of a deal. They are in the business of killing people. They look at learning how to work through and manage pain as an important part of the job. They do not condone fighting, you'll get in trouble for it, there's special punishment for it. But it isn't the same as fighting is for civilians.Part of training for some MOSes in the US military involve the US military purposefully breaking a bone during training. Usually a finger. But something is going to be broken, and the person in training has to deal with it while they continue on. They don't want the trainee so badly hurt they are crippled or dead, just badly hurt enough the pain impacts performance so they can learn to deal with it. To continue doing physically and mentally strenuous activities while hurt. If you're in the military and see someone with a badge on their uniform from one of those MOSes you know what it entails, there is respect. You know they can get hurt and keep going. They're trustworthy by your side in a firefight. Alex wasn't booted for what he did, he was booted for not following the rules as set by the exercise. Because trust me, if the military had the ability to do what these people do.. there'd absolutely be exercises where what Alex did is allowed. To them it'd just be training to stay on guard while an exercise is ongoing. Mental health isn't the same either. What they want to know is if they have someone unhinged that's going to commit war crimes or can't deal with the pressures of war. Not if someone is in a tippy top mental headspace. There is no such thing as a good mental headspace in the military, battlefields do not produce good mental health. So they don't try. They want you good enough. Not perfect. Fixing mental health is after someone is out, not while they are in. Military life is not the same as civilian life. Looking at it from a civilian standpoint is not going to work.
Halycon404
2023-05-17 03:31:30 +0000 UTCLike... it really feels as though you are writing the leadership of the Marines as being incompetent and I really don't get it. During the initial assessment, it took Thea having to do a Priority Message thing to let the leadership know that hey, the snipers seemed to be the ones getting taken out. How the hell is that not something the leadership figured out after the first sniper? Who almost assuredly did the same thing Thea did and reported up that they had a target and a shot, gotten permission to take it, and then suddenly they die? To a massive explosion? And leadership just... does nothing? Then similar here, they had to have known this kind of discipline issue was going to come up, and they let it get this bad? No counseling? They clearly cared about mental health right after Thea's assessment, why would they not be doing the same thing with Alex and whatever his base issues are that causes him to just... have a complete mental block around mid-worlders? None of this stuff is making sense to me except to think the leadership is incompetent.
Critical Hit
2023-05-17 02:38:59 +0000 UTCThen beyond that, was Thea trying to show mid world's weren't savage? Seemed much more like she was showing off that they were savage combatants, tougher and better than core world's or whatever. Certainly showing that in a fight she was much better. Because Alex didn't even say anything about her being untrustworthy or the like. Just incompetent and incapable of being so. Subhuman potentially even or at least the implication thereof. But he calls them trash, not savages. So the whole thing the LT says about her doing a poor job of showing mid worlders aren't savages doesn't make any sense. Then why not show the fight to the rest of the recruits? Show what they both did? Like how are they going to get decent discipline if they don't show what happens when you break the rules? And then a warning? For extending the suffering? He's the one who decided to let pain be on in the first place! Its not like they can't filter that out!
Critical Hit
2023-05-17 02:26:25 +0000 UTCI don't like this chapter. I don't like how it worked, or how it ended. The whole thing feels like a scripted drama. Sovereign is an AI keeping watch over everyone at all times. This guy has been spouting bullshit and effectively insulting the entire chain of command with his talk about mid-worlders and he doesn't get a single warning about it? No psych eval showing he's completely incapable of rational acting under stress? Like if the leadership did their jobs this never would or could have happened. Hell Sovereign could easily have just like... filtered Alex's perceptions so he never had any idea there was a Midworlder in the Marines until he was deep enough in his prior thoughts and preconceived notions didn't really occur to him anymore. It's not like it would even be hard for the leadership to keep them separated so this didn't come up.
Critical Hit
2023-05-17 02:17:40 +0000 UTCAgreed, eagerly awaiting more!
Not Telling
2023-05-17 01:16:31 +0000 UTCThank you, good sir! Can't wait for it either! ;)
LunaWolve
2023-05-17 00:58:15 +0000 UTCIt's written between the lines that he hid it from the others. It won't affect morale or her reputation. More evidence the Lt tacitly consented.
Kyfe
2023-05-17 00:50:09 +0000 UTCAmazing chapter again! Can’t wait for the next!!
Thomas Downing
2023-05-17 00:49:01 +0000 UTCNo that was a perfect explanation! Pretty much exactly in line with what I thought lol
Thomas Downing
2023-05-17 00:48:43 +0000 UTCThe main issue that the Lt. tried to hammer home, is not that what Thea did was wrong, but the way she went about it, was. Beating him up, humiliating him, taunting him. All those things are proportinate responses very much allowed and encouraged (as stated by Major Quinn "Deal with your own shit"). Torturing a fellow Marine, on the other hand, is a bit too far. It's a disproportinate response and one that a simple Recruit is not entitled to over another. That's the main part, really. If Thea had been an Lt. or a Major, then this would be considered a disciplinary action taken by a superior officer, aka. a non-issue. But as they are both on equal ranks, Thea has no direct right to administer direct disciplinary actions, outside of what is considered a proportinate response. Hope that clears things up a bit. Not sure if I phrased that well in the comment...
LunaWolve
2023-05-17 00:43:30 +0000 UTCExactly. That said, her behavior was not going to produce good morale and would lead to a host of other issues. So it makes sense that he did nothing to stop it initially.
The Lost Pages
2023-05-17 00:41:20 +0000 UTCand thats why he only came after Thea was done with him, and when he attacked her without that match restarting
SamHawke
2023-05-17 00:33:34 +0000 UTCThx for the chapter … and while contrary to real school life in this case the bully will get maybe punished it is in another way just like the injustice in real life bullying scenarios. It is expected by the people in power that the victim shows restraint and behave better then the perp. This is just rubbing salt in the wound, why shouldn’t the victim use the right to self defense and punish the bully. Why it is automatically expected that the victims have to be like zen monks and stoically weather all insults and injuries. Why get this sick expectation promoted as good management? In the end the evildoer get more protection then the victim which in bad cases will be punished by the powers that be right after being bullied. … In Thea’s case Alex got exactly what he deserved and there was no need to threaten Thea with dishonorably discharge, except to hit the message home “whatever the perp do to you, say thank you and be nice or you are more bad then the perp.”
Quendolayne
2023-05-16 22:20:21 +0000 UTCLOL! I'm sure there's a certain part of the Lt. that didn't really mind...
LunaWolve
2023-05-16 22:08:04 +0000 UTCThank you for the super kind words! I'm glad to hear that my revisions lived up to the expectations!
LunaWolve
2023-05-16 22:07:42 +0000 UTCThank you! (and yes, it seems that way)
LunaWolve
2023-05-16 22:07:26 +0000 UTCShe wasn't "torturing" Alex or "needlessly prolonging his suffering..." she was simply administering Non Judicial Punishment (NJP) as his superior (Alpha Squad Member). In the context of digital bodies as well as the brutality of this universe, this seems like perfectly reasonable punishment to me. I mean, the Major DID lift into the air and shatter a person's skeleton with her mind for speaking out in surprise. That was 80% a joke, but I wouldn't be surprised if the Lt secretly appreciated her actions just a bit, lol.
Kyfe
2023-05-16 20:14:54 +0000 UTCAbsolute masterpiece. I love how you took the feedback and made this chapter even more beautiful. The second activation of her ability was perfectly timed. And her repeated slaps just added to the humiliation she layered on. Which also was an excellent replacement in one of the earlier sentences. I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter.
The Lost Pages
2023-05-16 19:32:34 +0000 UTCLove it (and First apparently)
Jon
2023-05-16 19:16:24 +0000 UTC