Fudged Fertility 105-126
Added 2023-09-22 03:03:21 +0000 UTCRemember the other day when I said it would be 12-14 pages?
I lied.
I've rewritten this entire scene several times now. I appreciate any feedback on them :)
Also, the archive has been updated.
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I'm going to take this feedback and strut around the house like I won a 2am game of drunken Mario Party!
Werey
2023-09-22 11:49:34 +0000 UTCTo my eyes - you got the shape _just_ right for her laying on her side. (edit: also other views/etc good) Great scene build-up - conclusion - and then a nice little post-talk leaving us wondering how she might handle his lil' threat/promise/?.
MetalXT
2023-09-22 04:00:21 +0000 UTC
