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Added 2024-08-19 02:03:29 +0000 UTCHERE IS THE BLURB. TELL ME YOUR THOUGHTS, ANY OF THEM:
The End of Days has come... but not for us.
The UEC was fighting a losing battle against the demons for decades, forced to sacrifice more ground every day. But the Overmaiden, a technoghost AI and leader of the resistance, has created the perfect weapon: The Hellmarine.
He lost his family to the demons. Now, all that's left is hate and rage and unyielding power. Rip, crunch, gore, dismember—this unstoppable juggernaut will slaughter his way through the hordes of Hell, single-minded and filled with righteous purpose.
And he won't do it alone. Seraphiel the exiled angel and the UEC's newest recruit, his personal physician Dr. Mandy Hughes, and the Overmaiden herself will be there with him every step of the way. They will bear witness to the carnage he unleashes, for he is the nameless one that will make the demons fear. He is the Sword of Mankind.
He is the Hellmarine.
Comments
This sounds great. The art is amazing. I can't wait for the books.
Tj Pierce
2024-09-16 13:45:12 +0000 UTCI’ll start posting chapters soon
Virgil Knightley
2024-08-21 12:03:32 +0000 UTCI'm already looking forward to this. Definitely getting Doom vibes, which is excellent. Also, the art is dope af. I'm a sucker for celestials.
Judex
2024-08-21 11:29:26 +0000 UTCSo when the hellmarine defeats the antagonist, that's the guy that gets isekaied to be the demon lord in master class right? 😂 Jokes aside, this is one of the few darker haremlit series that I'm actually looking forward to just from this blurb. It has a great hook to it Virgil
Nathan
2024-08-20 02:57:24 +0000 UTCI’ll maybe do a poll later but so far you’re the first who didn’t like it. We will see what we land on!
Virgil Knightley
2024-08-19 15:08:28 +0000 UTCThis cover is sexy AF though!!!
Dctrwho007
2024-08-19 13:10:05 +0000 UTCThat sounds awesome!!! The only suggestion I would make is to not call him a “hellmarine”. It’s not something that will make me not read but it hits my ear weirdly. Infernomarine, Maleficmarine…. Those are just a couple I thought of off the top.
Dctrwho007
2024-08-19 13:09:46 +0000 UTCOh hell yeah as long as there more then enough sex and battle I'm there . I want it tomorrow here take my money 💰
Jeremey Bartel
2024-08-19 10:50:24 +0000 UTCSounds serious enough that’d I’d expect some high stakes, intense plot.. maybe even a few deaths here and there… while I enjoy the haremlit genre immensely, there does seem to be a plethora of SOL and light drama and focuses mainly on the spice… but to see a more hardcore storyline and plot with some harem spice mixed in would absolutely be a fresh new take on the genre… imo of course
Mr Koko
2024-08-19 10:49:19 +0000 UTCI am already looking forward to reading the story and would love to have a darker and grittier type of story with a slice of Life thrown in.
Tim Nielsen
2024-08-19 10:32:31 +0000 UTCAlways down for some grim dark/Doom style. Now, if Thorne spins us an idea for a SoL with a space faring dragon for an MC, I quit XD
Raven3ye
2024-08-19 08:56:47 +0000 UTCReminds me of memento massacre by A.V. Ray for rip and tear m.c.
Swagmaster
2024-08-19 08:23:12 +0000 UTC
