The New World Rewrite(Chapters 43 & 44)
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Still have more rewrites to go yeah?
Shadeymankey
2021-10-28 06:52:16 +0000 UTCWhen do we get the next chapters of the rewrite? (Sorry if I'm a to insistant, you just gave me a really bad case of blue ball 😥) I don't feel like reading the rest of the story with the context changed this much and that's already one month since this post. Surely I'm not the only one who feel like that
MrGaujail
2021-10-07 13:03:44 +0000 UTCI've thought of that premise before as a villian spin-off. It would be a lot fun seeing him struggle between a growing awareness and his monstrous self. I ended up making Plazia as an outlet for that idea.
Monsoon117
2021-09-07 14:32:02 +0000 UTCOn top of providing new material, and rewriting previous stuff we want an alternate reality story that has Baldag-Ruhl, of Many win and get a shiny Daniel carapace. (Im joking keep up the good work.)
Titaniumtac
2021-09-06 18:12:30 +0000 UTCRemember to use the tag function at the top of the patreon page to filter the stuff I post. This is a rewrite, so its goes in that section, and new chapters go in the newchapters section. I keep the titles intuitive and easy to use so that you guys don't get confused. I'm also glad these chapters are done. 44, in particular, is essential to Kessiah's longterm development as a character. I really tried to convey her situation this time. It adds a lot of context behind what she'll do later in the story, along with her inevitable redemption arc. This breakdown also sets up the stage for other stuff, keeping everything nice and congruent. It also adds a layer of depth to Torix's story as well. He's not some purely benevolent grandpa lich, and these chapters show that. His controlling nature can cause him to overextend himself and become arrogant. Either way, I was very proud of a few of the changes I put up here. Cleaning up the tense and grammar errors also helps the story out immensely. An editor will help with that further. Either way, I hope you all enjoy.
Monsoon117
2021-09-05 18:41:12 +0000 UTC
