Novel Excerpts
Added 2023-12-19 03:43:35 +0000 UTCThe flickering candlelight cast sensual shadows on the walls of the dimly lit room, as Dante and Sam found themselves entwined in a passionate embrace. With practiced ease, Dante guided Sam onto all fours atop him, their heated breaths mingling in the charged air between them. Deft fingers traced tantalizing patterns across Sam's bare skin, drawing gasps and moans from the man above.
"Trust me, you'll enjoy this," Dante whispered into Sam's ear, his seductive charm weaving a spell of lust around them both.
As he took Sam's length into his mouth, Dante's other hand caressed Sam's entrance, teasing at it before pressing a single digit inside. Sam gasped, eyes fluttering shut as Dante continued to work his magic, alternating between pleasuring Sam's throbbing member with his skilled tongue and probing deeper into his lover's most intimate depths.
"Gods…Dante," Sam panted, his body shivering with desire. "You're incredible."
Dante smirked against Sam's flesh, adding another finger and eliciting a throaty groan from his partner. The demon revealed the power he held over Sam, feeling a thrill of excitement race through him as he brought the man closer and closer to the edge of ecstasy.
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This is part of the prologue.
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Thank you!! I will share your feedback and idea with the writer :) This is the beginning to impress the reader with the character of Dante, so please look forward to what is coming next.
2023-12-23 12:53:33 +0000 UTCThank you and yaaay😂 We are happy to hear that you enjoyed it hehe
2023-12-23 12:46:56 +0000 UTCOh, this design is also nice. He has more of a rebellious vibe in this one. It's off to a nice start. The sensual shadows part in the beginning is a nice touch, but sounds a bit weird as an opening. We don't know what the shadows being cast are but they're described as sensual. The first two sentences can be remixed so that the shadows are of two figures entwined, and later Dante and Sam are highlighted in the narration. I'm just going by the excerpt, assuming that's how the scene or chapter opens. If they're already established, then it might make more sense, but I like being a bit more specific with what exactly the sensual shadows are. Maybe there can be some additional detail somewhere about how the magic looks or how it's affecting Sam's body, if it does. Like a popular spell is increased sensation or perception. Little details like that go a long way for the reader's fantasy in the big picture of the scene. The narration highlights specific details and drives the scene forward for the reader's visual experience, which I think is one of the more intimate ways to write a sexual romance novel. 🌺🍵🙏
Yoshi Darkice
2023-12-19 06:01:57 +0000 UTCYes I love it. To tell the truth, I was getting aroused 🍡
Physical exam
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