SSR - Chapter 87: Finals (2)
Added 2025-02-17 20:10:20 +0000 UTCPlease keep giving me feedback on these chapters. I'm going back and editing the tournament chapters to try and add more anticipation and hype, like what I did with Evenon (but on a lesser scale). I'm not making major changes, but I've already written an edit to introduce Hayden much earlier, and I'll add more from his PoV. I'll tell you guys when I'm done. Enjoy the chapter!
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Rylan dashed to the side and leaped over a large rock. He widened his eyes in mid-air. Without even stopping to think, he trusted his instincts and twisted his body. A heartbeat later, a Magic Missile went through the place where his left shoulder had just been.
He rolled as he landed on the floor, narrowly dodging another Missile. Rylan looked at Hayden, filled with surprise. A third Magic Missile had already almost taken shape.
What is this casting speed?
Even though Magic Missile was the most basic spell, he hadn’t faced anyone in this tournament capable of casting it so quickly. He scoured his memories. Only Gerard surpassed Hayden’s casting speed when it came to Magic Missile. Rylan let out a whistle of admiration, then lunged to the side and started to run. There was no time to stop and think about how this was possible.
Rylan neared a stone pillar and spun around it, using it as cover to block another Missile. He left the column’s shadow with large steps and dashed behind a stone wall, his back against it. As he let out a breath, the sound of air parting reached his ears. Roland’s instincts took over. He took two steps forward, moving away from the wall but still staying behind it. A moment later, a Magic Missile curved around the wall and hit the ground where he had just been, drilling into it. It only disappeared after creating a hole that was almost ten centimeters deep.
After throwing the hole a glance and gauging its depth, Rylan started to run. His chanting never stopped. As he got out of cover, the ground in front of him shook. Rylan reflexively jumped to the side instead of upward. The ground caved in and then rose. It moved toward his legs in earth tendrils. He jumped again, but the Earth Grab followed his movements, even though he was meters away from its origin point.
“Magic Missile,” Rylan cast.
The Missile took shape and tore through the closest earthen restraint, sharp mana forcing its way through stone and earth. This allowed Rylan to leap to the side and avoid the remainder of the spell. He looked at Hayden with a furrowed brow.
Some distance away, the boy’s expression was completely calm. He chanted unceasingly, waving his wand as if he were the maestro in an orchestra. Rylan frowned.
This is going to be difficult.
Hayden had only used First Circle spells so far, but they had been troublesome enough. His casting speed made him much more dangerous than any of the other Mages Rylan had faced in the tournament. Rylan clicked his tongue.
“Earth Spikes,” Hayden suddenly said.
Rylan bent his legs and readied himself to move as quickly as he could without the Falling Snow Steps. The floor around him rippled as the Spikes tore their way out of it, pointed at his legs and torso. The first one arrived, piercing through the air straight at his belly. Rylan sidestepped it and tilted his body to stand parallel to it. It only managed to graze his shirt. He kept his guard up. Given Hayden’s skills, this wouldn’t be the end of it. The Earth Spike’s side rippled like the ground.
A smaller Spike rose from the body of the previous one as if it had been submerged into the stone. It went for his chest.
As expected.
Alongside it, another of the large Spikes arrived. His concentration reached its peak. Rylan smiled.
Hayden had surprised him, but there was no reason for him to lose his cool; it would only lead to mistakes. Letting out a breath, Rylan took another step to the side and spun. The two Spikes were avoided, but they bubbled like boiling water. Just like the first, other smaller Spikes ripped their way out of them. Rylan was forced to tilt his body and step backward. Two of the Spikes cut his chest, drawing lines of blood. With a light jump, he dodged the one that was about to pierce the back of his knee. He watched the nearest Spike as he landed on the one he’d just avoided. It aimed straight at his chest.
Instead of dodging to the side, Rylan jumped backward, getting even closer to another Spike that sought to pierce his back. Its structure was completely different from the usually straight Spikes; it had curved, as if the stone and earth that constituted it were liquid, making it look like a tentacle with a pointed tip. It drew a half-circle around Rylan.
He slid on the ground, grinding to a halt with calmness. The Spikes continued to approach him at high speeds, one from the front and the other from the back.
Now.
Rylan suddenly crouched as they were about to reach him. The two Spikes met each other right where his chest had been, colliding and cracking with a loud noise. But he knew it wasn’t over.
As he expected, the underside of both Earth Spikes rippled, even as their tips shattered. Rylan used his crouching position to leap to the side as two smaller Spikes surged out of the rippling stone and pierced toward him, almost completely vertically. One grazed his right arm, creating a gash. Rylan frowned. He jumped again almost immediately after landing, dodging a Spike that aimed for his leg. Stepping on its body, he lightly jumped again to avoid the Spike that rose from the one he’d just stepped on.
Continuously, Rylan spun and ran around as if he were dancing. Every time he dodged a Spike, its body rippled before another rose out of it. Because of this, even though there were originally only six Spikes, he had already avoided almost fifteen of them.
Rylan felt the strain as more and more Spikes flowed out of the previous ones, creating an elaborate stone network that sought only to pierce him through. His movement paths were limited by the existence of the Spikes he’d avoided, which didn’t simply disappear or crumble.
How familiar.
This thought appeared when he dodged a large Earth Spike that had been aiming for his chest. Behind him, the structure of the other Spikes created a veritable cage. To his right, two Spikes crossed each other in an “X” shape that would force him to either jump over them and spend too long in the air or crouch under them. Right in front of him, there was the Spike he’d just avoided. Everything about this made him feel some familiarity. Roland’s memories flashed through Rylan’s mind.
High-level battles were about cutting off the enemy’s possible options just as much as they were about dealing damage.
Did Hayden understand this instinctively? It was an incredible trait for someone so young, especially because Hayden probably hadn’t had access to formal training and guidance. It was a wonder that he’d even reached the Third Circle with such limited resources, even though the Circles theory was widespread.
One Spike cut Rylan’s shoulder, while another grazed his left knee. They pierced his skin and ground against his flesh and bone. His blood stained the ground, pain coursing through him.
Without stopping, Rylan continued to dodge the Spikes with small movements, using the ones that missed him as support to step on and push himself out of the way of the others. This plan, which had worked all previous times he’d had to face Earth Spikes, had its effectiveness diminished by the ramifying nature of Hayden’s Spikes. Every time he stepped on a Spike, Rylan only had a bit more than a second to remove his foot before a smaller Spike surged and pierced it.
His injuries piled up. His clothing, which had been carefully tidied up by Sarah, was torn to pieces, as he’d predicted. His vest fell to the ground and his beige shirt was now marred by the blood from the various cuts. The stinging pain wasn’t enough to overwhelm his senses and mental state, but it was annoying.
Rylan jumped up to avoid the largest Earth Spike so far, then landed on its body. Unlike the previous ones, it didn’t ripple. He breathed deeply and raised his body, looking at the sight before and under him as he stood at the tip of the largest Spike, above the others. The Spikes had finally stopped coming after him. They had created a small stone forest that reminded him of a tree’s roots. Each of them had ramified into at least two more Spikes, which then gave rise to more, smaller Earth Spikes in a multiplicative fashion.
The Spike under his feet cracked with a loud noise. Rylan lightly jumped back and landed on the ground. All the Earth Spikes’ bodies cracked and crumbled into earth and stone, creating a dust cloud.
“Gust,” Rylan cast as he waved his wand. The wind blew the dust away.
With deep breaths, Rylan looked at Hayden, who stood some distance away. The boy was staring at him with a serene expression.
“This was a single Second Circle spell,” Hayden said loudly, almost shouting. “Draw your sword or give up here. I don’t want to hurt you more than this.”
Rylan maintained his stable posture and cracked his neck.
He’s good.
It was an undeniable fact. His previous assessment that this would be ‘difficult’ was mistaken; it would be much harder than that to win.
“Sorry, but it’s not enough yet,” Rylan said with a smile. “And I have no reason to give up. I have my own reasons to fight with magic alone.”
Hayden frowned.
“…Let’s see how you handle this, then.”
He started chanting. Rylan shot to the side, ignoring the cuts and gashes on his legs. His explosive movement only intensified the bleeding, but he only smiled.
Don’t fail me now, my body.
This was the battle he had been wishing for from the moment he joined the tournament.
Comments
Hard agree
Broseph
2025-02-23 21:36:09 +0000 UTCThis pretty much sums my thoughts as well.
Simon
2025-02-21 14:54:08 +0000 UTC(Obs: Esse comentario está ridiculamente grande, pois acabei demorando demais para comentar sobre a obra e decidi apresentar uma opnião mais geral do que li até o momento) Muito obrigado pelo capítulo! Eu realmente espero que o capitulo 88 leve ao climax da batalha e possivelmente seu encerramento. Aparentemente Hayden é um maniaco por batalhas com uma exelente caracteristica (provavelmente), bons titulos e habilidades relacionadas a magia, além de experiencia no uso dela em combate, diferente da grande maioria dos outros participantes, que embora talentosos, são no máximo, joias brutas com potencial não explorado (Principalmente os nobres protegidos ou plebeus sem um treinamento adequado). Gostei muito do fato do adversário ser construido assim e ser um plebeu, pois nos aponta que ele, apesar de talentoso, ele teve que lutar muito, seja com outras pessoas ou monstros para desenvolver sua magia dessa forma. Adorei a forma como o feitiço earth spikes foi utilizado durante a luta, na verdade, posso até ousadamento aponta-lo como uma dica de como os magos mais experientes e de circulos mais altos realmente usam suas habilidades, não se tratando somente de poder bruto e uma estrutura fixa, mas sim de ter liberdade para usar a magia da forma como achar melhor e mais vantajosa durante o combate. Levando em conta o que observei da luta até o momento, espero que Rylan perca a batalha, o que em si não é ruim, pois como um mago, ele ainda é extremente deficiente em todos os aspectos nos apresentado durante a história, seja quantidade de mana, conhecimento dos feiticos que tem em seu arsenal e experiencia em luta como mago, o que o seu adversário tem em grande quantidade. (Sinceramente, o que esperavamos de uma pessoa que esta seriamente usando magia a menos de um ano, seu conhecimentos esta em outra area) Muitos podem achar que o protagonista deve simplesmente sacar sua espada e vencer o torneio, algo que realmente aconteceria, pois pensem comigo, ele já conseguiu lutar contra 2 magos do 5° circulo (lutas distintas) enquanto estava no 1°, usando o conhecimento de sua vida passada. Agora ele estã no 2° e o autor propositalmente (minha interpretação) não nos mostrou nenhum treino ou luta com o seu pai para que tenhamos noção de quanto poder ele possui agora, mas acredito que o poder dele disparou, pois ele aumentou sua reserva e criou uma tecnica de circulação de mana (espero muitas exploração mais profunda dessa tecnica, possivelmente ela vai ser passada para o restante da familia ou os cavaleiros da casa?), baseada em como a aura deveria funcionar. Gostaria também de apontar meu proprio pensamento sobre o por que da regra implicita do não uso das tecnicas de espadachim durante o torneio seguida pelo protagonista. Levando em consideração o mundo atual, onde até onde nos foi apresentado, não existir aplicação da mana a tecnicas marciais, o impacto e os problemas que Rylan traria a si mesmo e a sua familia atualmente seria insustentavel com o seu nivel atual de poder, podendo levar a sua captura e sendo usado na realização de experimentos por seres ambiciosos em busca de mais poder. Acredito que a linha da historia irá se passar com o seu caminho como espadachim e seu uso de mana sendo escondido dos outros o maximo possivel, pois esse conhecimento, embora venha de um ser com mais de um século de vida, não tem explicação para os outros quando é apresentado por um jovem que nem tem 20 anos e com o seu historico passado. Sobre essa situação, concordo um pouco sobre o ponto dos demais leitores sobre a frustração de não usar sua melhor habilidade para vencer a lute e ao inves disso, se torturar tanto contra seres que são mais capazes do que ele, no quesito magia. Acredito que, se fosse adicionado algum tipo de conversa entre Rylan e Gerald sobre isso e talvez uma proibição sobre o uso real da espada, a não ser que fosse em uma situação de extrema necessidade deveria ser adicionado (Algo simples, no POV do pai do MC) . Isso daria uma base melhor para suas atuais ações e comportamentos durante as lutas, pois ele teria prometido ao pai que não mostraria descuidadamente o seu poder a estranhos. (Rylan parece respeitar bastante as palavras de seus pais e familiares) Adicionar um premio aos top estudantes do torneio é uma ótima ideia e acho que nesse ponto uma obrigação, pois os alunos estão realmente indo até seus limites simplesmente pelos caprichos do diretor (afinal, eles estão realmente se machucando bastante, mesmo com a cura e tudo, o trauma e a lembrança da dor não será esquecida), sendo que só precisariam mostrar uma luta satisfatoria para entrar na escola. Também, sobre a questão dos seus relacionamentos pessoais, acredito que essa parte está progredindo de forma estavel, com Rylan aos poucos se reconectando com sua familia e interagindo com novas pessoas, expandindo o universo da obra a cada capitulo, mesmo que essas interações geralmente levem ao seu ostracismo, devido ao seu passado. Penso que, além de desejar ser um grande mago na sua vida atual, ele deveria focar também em ter mais laços com outras pessoas, algo que ele abondonou em prol do poder em sua vida passada. Espero que no futuro tenhamos uma boa quandidade de interação entre o MC e sua familia, pois o núcleo de sua motivação gira em torno dela. E por fim, no momento atual, acho seu pensamento de unir a mana e a aura (algo que ele nem conseguiu gerar ainda) seja bem ambicioso e um desafio de longo prazo, nem sabemos se a existencia de dois tipos de poderes em um mesmo corpo será permitido, coisas como incompatibilidade ou de uma energia tentar expulsar a outra, algo que o protagonista vai ter que lidar quando chegar a hora. No geral eu so tenho que agradeçer pela história e pela forma como ela está caminhando até o momento. Ah, e peço que levem o que escrevi a cima como uma opnião minha sobre oque li e entendi até o momento. Acho que devaria se encaixar mais em uma discução sobre a história do que um comentário.
joao vitor
2025-02-19 14:32:38 +0000 UTCAs a more cohesive critique: I'd say the central issue of this arc is two-fold. The length and personal motivation/growth. The first, the length has been reiterated by others and boils down to one or two fights with ongoing characters like Jasmine prove to hammer home the general aims of trying to showcase that Rylan is not top dog with magic alone, but compensates with generalized combat experience. This is fine as a point but I feel it lead into the second point more. The second is the character motivation for Rylan in this arc. More broadly we understand he is wishing to make right with his siblings and mother, and continuing to crawl out of the pit of bad reputation the previously Roland-memory-less-Rylan dug. It's been a fairly engaging emotional motivation but has no ties whatsoever to the tournament arc and reads as a B plot. However, personally I would also note that this arc is merely a rehash of the first arc with Sarah, his Father, and the guards. No reason to not still deliver in this plot beat, but maybe some deeper tie connecting the two plots? For instance, it could be dragged into a plot about how even though Rylan feels like he has improved himself, there is still a good distance to go before he fully shakes his past? Maybe despair or serious questioning about how Roland who has everything come naturally to him and is used to being able to command respect dealing with a series of personal failings might work. Granted I can already see issues in this, but am just throwing things out there for alternative suggestions As for the current emotional motivation of needing Rylan to distance himself from the easy power he had as Roland? Runs counter to the established character of Rylan in some sense and seems contrived for a "magic swordsman" build. In the 1st arc it was established that Rylan is living for his family and the more emotional and non stat based aspects of life. His training was both a means to improve himself to protect his family and to prove to said family that this time was different. When the opening scene is Rylan taking on armies worth of master warriors, it seems hallow to have Rylan suddenly turn his nose up at the accessible power to him. Sure, magic is differing power scales but that's why he is at the academy, not swearing off the sword. If it is purely a political consideration, then leave it at that and don't make it an emotional point without other plot points to back it up. I could see it honestly more so as a reaction by Rylan to Regis' reaction of denying Ryland as his brother now that Roland's memories are in there. If it is centered purely in the self, then it seems more like Roland is peering through and his hunger for never-ending training or proving himself as the best, which the opening and his death established as the incorrect path. Sure, there's lip service to it being centered about finding his limits but thats what one or two fights in the tournament can easily discover, especially the fight with Jasmine. As it stands with him still in the tournament but disrespectful of his enemy's desire to have him draw his sword, he is quite literally doing the young master "you are not worthy of me drawing my sword" trope. It seems arrogant or like a man who is stuck in the endless cycle of proving himself the best. I feel it would've been more meaningful if he maybe spent more time comforting his brother after his loss, or training him some when he realized he was mimicking his battle style. That would seem more consistent with the character goals of Rylan, someone who is discovering and searching for the other aspects of life. You've built him as a character who has a ready and easily accessible path to power that is already making inroads into it. It stands that his character flaw and failings are centered around the emotional and social aspects which provide better plot to overcome, not the X's and O's of what his build and stats will be. I hope this is coherent, as I'm typing this on the phone and unable to view it all in one go.
Arin K Nave.
2025-02-18 22:11:26 +0000 UTCI agree with the injuries actually but mostly for Rylan him dodging specifally with the same "just avoiding terrible injury" against mages with "low skill" as against young third circle geniuses seems strange looking back. You second point I don't agree on though... First of all those fights probably don't actually last all that long lol, its more likely the extremely detailed showing the author does that makes them seem so long. What 10-15 spells for one individual at max or something I think? each one takes a couple seconds thats what 5 minutes at most. I don't know if you regularly has "gnashes and small wonds" but I can assure you that even 10 of those do not EVER cause somone to "die of bloodloss". "Death of a THOUSAND cuts" is called that for a reason... Nature is increadibly resilliant its extremely difficult to actually kill something (And this includes humans) with small wounds causing bloodloss while adrenaline keeps them going. The PAIN tolerance everyone here seems to have is honestly more putting me off than that lol. For the record "small wounds, gnashes, grazing strikes" those are ones with millimeter depth in my mind. the ones that don't even punture the skin only hurt the topmost layers... and those would actually with natural healing close/crust over long before you could bleed out. even really small puntuce wounds some 2 centimeter deep in the correct place won't bleed to much. (Do not ask how stupid I have been in the past to know this)
Gopard
2025-02-17 23:44:12 +0000 UTCNo problem! And really yeah I think its still best for you to decide mostly yourself what to change^^ I mean at the end you created this story already and we're paying just to read it a bit earlier so I definitely trust your judgement! And what you think might be exactly on point yep! You do a great job of showing us whats going on, just even those things we didn't really need to see quite as often xD
Gopard
2025-02-17 23:33:18 +0000 UTCThank you for the insightful comment, as always! I'll go back and start cutting off the unnecessary parts of earlier chapters right now. Hopefully, it will only take a few days. I think I get too caught up in "show, don't tell" that I end up extending my chapters by too much. They used to be 1.5k words, but now they usually surpass 2k-2.2k. Thank you again, I'll reread this entire arc and change it.
L.E. Miranda
2025-02-17 23:27:51 +0000 UTCThe thing is, he wouldn't be able to brute force things with swordsmanship without consequences. To face trained Mages, he would need to circulate his mana, which would push his physical abilties beyond what they "should" be. It's better to be considered a genius with incredible instincts than someone that "shouldn't possibly exist." The progression thing is a good point and I'll get to fixing it immediately. Thank you!
L.E. Miranda
2025-02-17 23:14:01 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter! So you ask for criticism: For me while I enjoyed this Arc alot especially the whole NON-Combat portion. The basic handling of it was well done, him hiding mana reinforcement most importantly how far it can go makes absolute sense and as you wrote he doesn't need it generally. Magical combat is more than pure casting and Rylan through Roland excells in every other facet of it so much as to be stupidly incomparibal to everyone else here. That being said all of what I've written about can and was in my opinion conveyed pretty well in the first longer fight. (Long is for me any 2 chapter fight even one taking on a whole chapter is a lot but when it goes beyond that you NEED a very good reason to drag it out so much). One fight over several chapters where Rylan has to use a lot dodging and stuff and recognizes in pure magic casting even the 2. Circle mages are ahead of him but he wins through battle awareness and forcing them to "waste" mana by dodging. That's what I would say is "enough" after showing us a relatively quick first fight which he just kinda wins (for the laughs this would be great lol) he then has a difficult battle and realization that he is better than any 2. circle mage here in battle but worse at magic. Focus on this and the byplay in the fights against Jasmine and they can be reduced a lot. While its interesting to read about them, I at least genuinely remember them as "pretty much all Rylan winning by outlasting his opponents through dodging and then ending it with strategically fitting spells right after his sense and physically abillities allowed him to save mana on shields against very expensive offensive spells". Then comes the Jasmine fight: The part where he is forced into using an OFFENSIVE spell on himself into actually dodging a huge well controlled and great planned assault by her who is simply a MUCH superior mage than him and has much more Mana and power to boot... THAT was amazing, because we saw Rylan grow there, his "overcoming limits by pushing to the brink" was actually felt in the writing. I think personally if you want to write multiple chapter fights they NEED to bring something new to bring the suspense. Now in a tournament where literally everyone uses pretty similar magic styles except Rylan... Thats hard, we have seen him dodge earth spikes in every single match that went on longer so far I think? Earth grab dodged several times, finishing fights with a strategic "Magic Missile" almost expected at this point... And I think thats the problem. I feel like we as readers are anyhow expecting Rylan to win the tournament you know? The trope of "OP MC hides most of his power gets laughed at (literally in this case lmao) and still wins at the end is just too common. However usually those MCs need to reveal their power partway through more and more each fight. But here (and I realize I'm repeating myself a lot lol sorry I'm not a very structured commenter I think) the fights are mostly "the same". Showing off Rylans power is still necessary because of Regis and his Sister (who Iadmit to somehow forgetting her name rn) but not in such detail. So yeah that would be my advice and criticism reduce the volume of similar fights by not showing all his fights in such detail, because you showing us how every fight WAS pretty similar was great exactly how it should be when you pit a bunch of Teens who trained in very similar ways against one another lol ;) I enjoyed it either way, but I also admit I was always much more looking forward to say the meeting of the siblings or his mother in this Arc. Or at the end even during Jasmines fight (before he was forced to actually innovate and use magic in new ways) looking to see "ah and then he used limited mana reinforcement won and everyone was awed and wondering WTH just happened" xD
Gopard
2025-02-17 23:09:56 +0000 UTCI mean he has literally the biggest discovery in the use of mana and for martial purposes like... Ever in his abillity of "Efficient body enhancement" . The Kingdom is going towards a national security issue with the big Empire growing aggressive... If he just revealed that he would probably lucky if his Grandfather could even get him into his family stopping the King of straight up forcing Rylan to reveal everything he knows about Mana Cultivation to the Army and other Royal institutions. Hiding this makes sense and came through quite clearly I believe. That being said I think the Arc is too long really. During the fight against Jasmine Rylan actually learned new stuff about manipulating mana himself but the fights before that were very similar with it being pretty clear most people are better "pure casters" but he is much better at "magical combat" as the "combat portion" consists of "battle sense, spatial awareness, dodging, fighting/casting while moving, pain tolerance, tolerance of hurting others, nerves, ect..." and he is just incomparable to everyone else at this. That's why it wasn't really working to built suspense in more than one fight before Jasmine as that was when it would be unclear if his skills would be enough to beat such a vastly magically superior opponent without using mana-reinforcement and swordfighting!
Gopard
2025-02-17 22:43:49 +0000 UTCI only agree with the length of the Arc and each fight. The basic concept of fighting with Magic only as he wants to develop his magic makes perfect sense. Even completely hiding his mana reinforcement which is the vast majority of what makes his swordskills relevant in a fight against someone like Hayden for example... Makes sense. The judges SAW his physical dodging speed if he suddenly starts moving faster and breaking spells with his sword they won't be like "Oh wow that guy is talented with the sword hes soo good his sword even makes him faster and cuts through Mana!!!" They will know immediatly that he is faster than he should be and his sword is more effective against spells than expected. Depending on how good they are they might straight up SENSE the Mana moving inside him and his thoughts (though I doubt that we haven't seen or heard about that level of Mana perception yet), and with the Kingdom literally being in a national Security situation RIGHT NOW they definitely would go quite the distance to get the basic secret which Rylan obviously has out of him. That being said while I like and agree with this arc in principle the lengths for the respective pay off feels to much...
Gopard
2025-02-17 22:37:23 +0000 UTCThat could also be that this arc has dragged quite a bit. The tournament has Zero stakes. All the contestants at this stage know they passed. Whats the motivation here? Might have something to prove to himself but its not apparent as a reader. Its a pretty shallow feeling goal
Docnox
2025-02-17 22:16:14 +0000 UTCLove the idea of the story but I think it’s become too compartmentalized. I hope that things become more cohesive going forward. I understand to a degree the reason to focus on magic only but I feel only using magic and overcoming people at something they are much better at is a bigger op move then using his swordsmanship with magic. If his instincts tactics and mind are so far beyond everyone else then that just draws even more attention opposed to using the sword as well but using the brute force method and concealing the effectiveness with which he can operate at. My biggest critique is the lack of progress in the chapters. I feel that the chapters are over detailed which is making everything seem a little busy. Keep up the good work I am not trying to take away from what you’ve done so far just giving you another perspective as to what can be considered OP or beyond the norm.
AB
2025-02-17 22:14:53 +0000 UTCHonestly, he takes way too much damage and there are too many super close calls. It ruins any immersion for me when he loses enough blood to kill ten humans and still runs around. Blood loss doesn’t give a fk how well built you are, you dont have endless gallons of the stuff. People die in seconds from heavy bloodloss, not minutes. Every time someone gets stabbed, gashed, and keeps going like a monty python sketch, its harder to keep reeding for me. If there had been any indication magic affects their vital systems, i could buy it a bit more. But the story has been very clear , these people neglect physical stats. Furthermore it would require extremely beyond human perception abilities to fight like they have, and again nothing has alluded to that exists.
Docnox
2025-02-17 22:12:37 +0000 UTCHis goal is to be a great mage and swordman. Perhaps a...magic swordsman (ha). If he used his sword now, with his skill in it being so lopsided compared to his magic, he wouldn't actually test his limits in a battle of magic, he would just be rehashing Roland's path. Rylan wants to surpass that old self, and also affirm to himself and his family that he is Rylan.
thaughton2
2025-02-17 21:59:11 +0000 UTCThe point of this arc isn't at all for Rylan to draw his sword and one shot everyone in his way to make it into a Magic Academy, especially since he doesn't know if his abilities are considered "impossible" and if they would attract too much attention from powerful Mages. He's testing his skills as "Rylan" and not just "Roland's reincarnation." It's already been established that he wants to explore magic as a way to bridge the gap between his two lives and become greater than Roland. Pouring out Sword Arts against teenagers would serve no purpose.
L.E. Miranda
2025-02-17 21:48:37 +0000 UTCHad to look up the word ramify lol maybe try Branch instead?
Haley Abbott
2025-02-17 21:46:37 +0000 UTCI sure enjoy reading a novel called sword saints reincarnation where the dude spends an entire arc refusing to draw his sword while he sandbags fighting children. I like the story but I’ll be glad when this is over and he’s incorporating his actual weapon again. I usually love tournament arcs but each fight being how long he can run around dodging spells until he decides to fight seriously just isn’t compelling imo. Him punching above his weight fighting monsters and higher circle mages was way better.
Kaze
2025-02-17 21:33:48 +0000 UTCAwesome, tftc!!
James Faulkner
2025-02-17 21:25:57 +0000 UTCTFTC
Some Guy
2025-02-17 20:59:50 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter.
Raymond Mouton
2025-02-17 20:19:11 +0000 UTCOne thing I like about Rylan is that his goal isn't to win the tournament. This is something that you could expand on much earlier on the tournament arc as I am only now getting it. Before I thought it was a "save my trump cards for later" kind of motivation. But now it is clear that winning or losing doesn't matter to him so much as developing his magic.
The Lost Pages
2025-02-17 20:16:22 +0000 UTC