Unorthodox Farming: New Chapter 17
Added 2026-02-16 22:44:33 +0000 UTCComments
Love the last two lies. Thanks for the chapters :) Possible Edits: Mum was behind them the moment dad tried to take a bite of his dinner, so now they're washing dished(dishes)." Misk handed me the hand mirror. ("x)
Iain Grubb
2026-02-17 04:18:45 +0000 UTCSomehow even funnier than the last one, I love it. The whole thing made me giggle like a kid, but Misk's joke at the end made me guffaw loud enough to surprise my daughter while she was getting ready for bedtime. Great work!
Matthew Wilmsmeyer
2026-02-17 00:38:22 +0000 UTCIf Farentine had explained -> Farentine had explained
Aaron
2026-02-16 23:29:21 +0000 UTCErroneous quotation mark after the following: Misk handed me the hand mirror. "
Aaron A. Cole
2026-02-16 23:23:38 +0000 UTCThe changes are subtle, but very nice.
William Howe
2026-02-16 23:13:08 +0000 UTC“If Farentine had explained how to fix my problem, but if she had her way, I was going to be a teen heartthrob for almost a decade.”—> I think the first ‘if’ is not appropriate/needed. But you could add an ellipsis after ‘problem’, too.
William Howe
2026-02-16 23:12:06 +0000 UTC“so now they're washing [dished].”—> dishes
William Howe
2026-02-16 23:08:32 +0000 UTC“but [Frieng] Arnold only safe when inside."—> Friend
William Howe
2026-02-16 23:03:57 +0000 UTC‘Frabjous day!’
William Howe
2026-02-16 22:51:41 +0000 UTC
