Bar None part 3, and a Big Thank You!
Added 2025-04-06 00:21:50 +0000 UTCGood Evening Everyone!
First of all, a small update. I just finished the rough draft for "A Bitch in Time" part 2, and I will be working on revising the draft over the next few days. I've been shopping around an outline for Cumbunny chapter 6 with some of my regular feedback providers, and I think I have a strong concept to work on. But, next up for drafting is trying to finish "Bar None".
Speaking of which! I have the third installment of the series here for you tonight, freshly edited. Just a little warning here, the humiliation in the final scene gets a little intense.
Finally, I'd like to take a second to thank all of my readers. I just passed 2000 subscribers on Literotica, which, although it's a meaningless number in a lot of ways, feels like a major milestone to me. It puts me in spitting distance of some authors I really admire. So I would like to express my appreciation to all of you who have decided to give my kinky stories a try.
Here's to a thousand more!
Comments
Love this story you’re doing great
Chris N
2025-04-07 02:23:23 +0000 UTCThank you, I don't know how I missed that diamond in the rough. A fun story but that diamond had a few flaws to me. My concern was the transitions in your story. For instance the first transition is abrupt. And it is not only harsh, but it leaps at least 7 years into the future. a little line like "7 years later" would have really helped smooth the change. A couple of other changes needed some smoothing too. I think that because it was not only physical changes but temporal ones too made it harder than normal to follow.
Stephen Chilcote
2025-04-06 23:41:19 +0000 UTC
