Cumbunny part 2, Final Cut
Added 2025-02-18 01:46:28 +0000 UTCHello all!
Just a short update today. Cumbunny part 2 is going to print, with a couple of edits.
I thought I would post the final cut here so that people can get an early peek at it if they are interested.
Changes are relatively minor, so don't expect a wholly different plot.
Here is the changelog:
A new scene at the beginning where Eliza speaks to her husband before meeting with Gene. accomplishes three objectives:
Hopefully brings David forward a little as a character.
Answers a question that some people were confused by: why didn't David have any questions for his wife who works in HR after an HR investigation mysteriously breaks in Gene's favor?
Subtly introduces a new character that will become more important later on.
Adds new material to the final under-the-desk blowjob, intended to emphasize that Gene is taking a huge, risky leap forward here with Eliza's submission. Got some strong feedback that it felt like a huge shift, so this will hopefully make that feel a little more natural.
Smoothing and corrections throughout.
A huge thank you to everyone who gave feedback, and especially to Grandeman, who provided a huge amount of feedback and also his excellent editing services!
Comments
Excellent changes!
Jay Muney
2025-07-09 07:07:28 +0000 UTC
