“Cuckold Epic” Pitch: In the Zone

I said in my latest post I had a tentative idea for a longer running "Cuckold Epic". Here is that idea. Let me know what you think!

Here is an idea that I have been kicking around for a while that I think could work as a long slow-boil cuckolding story. As the pitch is currently written, it involves college students and a boyfriend/girlfriend relationship, but I think the core concept could be tweaked to involve a young married couple if that is more impactful.

Monica Barnes is a little firecracker. Petite, energetic, fiercely intelligent, a little immature, and, most importantly, competitive. The main place she lets her competitive spirit out is at the gaming club at her college. It’s also where she found her boyfriend of two years, Brett. 

Brett is a laid-back guy who is totally in awe of his hot little girlfriend. He’s the strong silent type, and one would normally assume he would be a little too cool for a video game club. Maybe it was the fact that Monica was a member that made him stick around. He and Monica are sort of the “power couple” in the game club. When Monica discovered that Brett liked to be teased by her, not just during games, but in bed as well, she was delighted. She finds it utterly satisfying to be his naughty little brat, wind him up, and lead him around by the nose in the bedroom, and they have an active and satisfying sex life. 

But there is trouble looming in paradise. 

There is a new freshman who has just joined the club, Kade Garrison, who seriously gets on Monica’s nerves. His swaggering attitude, casual sexism, and utter confidence that he is God’s gift to women are all like fingernails on a blackboard to her. It only makes it worse that despite his confidence he is a scrawny little dork. And don’t get her started on the fact that the younger man’s gaming skills are enough for him to almost rival Monica, the queen of the club…

Everything starts to go wrong from Brett’s perspective when he calls in sick one day to the club. Monica returns home, obviously upset. She guiltily shares with her boyfriend that she might have fucked up… Kade was talking shit, as usual, that he was the best fighting game player in the club, better even than Monica. Monica simply couldn’t let that stand. Her pride was on the line. She challenged Kade to a match, and if she won, he would have to admit that she was better than him. But if she lost…

Monica is pathetically sorry, she really really thought she could beat the cocky little shit, otherwise, she never would have agreed to the bet. She explains that her penalty is that she has to go on a date with Kade. Brett is thunderstruck, and tries to convince Monica to back out of the agreement, but he knows it's a lost cause. Bets and penalties are taken deadly seriously in the game club, and no one takes them more seriously than Monica herself. She would lose all respect from the club if she went back on this one. 

Monica assures him that the date is utterly meaningless, and Brett grudgingly agrees to allow it, on the condition that he watches from a distance to make sure Kade doesn’t try anything. 

But during the date, Brett and Monica discover that Brett’s love of getting teased and Monica’s love of teasing are powerfully triggered by the experience, and they fuck like rabbits afterward. They think the experience is behind them, but then Brett is challenged to a game by Kade with another date with Monica as the stakes, and for some reason, Brett can’t resist…

Things slowly spiral from there, with Kade worming his way into their relationship little by little. Brett and Monica try to allow carefully controlled dates as a way to explore this new fetish they've discovered, but Kade has an infuriating way of successfully crossing their carefully drawn lines. Monica insists that she can’t stand the little twerp, but hate and love are two sides of the same coin, and her passionate negative feelings about Kade are still a kind of passion.

How far exactly are Monica and Brett willing to let Kade get? 

And at a certain point… are Brett and Monica even on the same page about that question?

PS: The name “In the Zone” for this story is a mild spoiler. It references the fact that, after a certain point in the story, Brett is in danger of becoming “friend-zoned” by Monica while Kade becomes her real boyfriend. 

Well… what do you think? A good premise for a long-run grounded story? A little weak? Boring? Curious on your thoughts.