Cumbunny Ending Pitch
Added 2025-01-20 23:09:14 +0000 UTCHello everyone!
I am currently working on my next commission, but the back and forth planning process has given me some extra downtime, so I started work on Cross Contamination part 13!
If anyone is interested in providing feedback on the outline or the first fifteen or so pages, shoot me an email at grogstoopid32@gmail.com!
I've been thinking about the ending to Cumbunny a lot the past few days. The story has been getting a lot of positive reception here, and in the poll, most people said they would prefer to see a dark ending where Eliza loses.
I recently thought of an ending concept that is very dark, but involves a win for Eliza. And I wondered if people would like it. If people think it stinks or would be unsatisfying, obviously I wouldn't use it.
I felt like it would be easier to get the impression of what I was going for if i just wrote up a potential scene rather than describing it in bullet points. So I did just that! This is different than ending choices I have done before, but I feel like knowing if people would like this beforehand would help with shaping the story moving forward.
Obviously, if this ends up being the ending I run with, this will be a MASSIVE spoiler for the story as a whole, so I won't paste the text into the post here. The potential ending will be posted in the attached pdf.
Let me know what you think in the poll and the comments below!
Comments
We're obviously reading this story because corruptive mind control and cuckolding stories are turn-ons for us, so of course the "bad-guy" needs to win. I do think the girls need some sort of "victory" so it has a sort of bitter-sweet happy ending, but ultimately still end up as Gene's happy Cumbunnies. Maybe David joins the girls in their service like Gene initially wanted and they all live a "satisfying" life together.
Rose Raynier
2025-08-11 00:14:44 +0000 UTCI’d love to she her and his sister or maybe there’s a way you can make gene and the sister dominate her together. What’s to say we can’t get her addicted to a woman’s cum
Chris N
2025-04-15 16:06:17 +0000 UTCChapter 2 mentions David has a little sister. The story has to end with her as a cumbunny as well.
J
2025-02-20 17:57:24 +0000 UTCYour idea to save Eliza is unique and I liked it. But I am feeling no mercy toward Eliza. Not sure why but let her have it...full cumbunny mode.
Stephen Chilcote
2025-01-23 02:09:51 +0000 UTCWhy end the story at all? Just keep writing chapters of Eliza getting more and desperate and depraved while Gene adds more women to his stable of cum addicted sluts? If you are going to end it though, don't let Eliza win. It's always more fun to see the dark endings and I think in this particular instance we haven't seen enough of Eliza and David to feel very sympathetic towards them. I can see more of a case in cross contamination where we've been with the characters for longer and might feel like they deserve some kind of reprieve but for a stuck up food stealing HR manager and her wimpy accountant husband? Nah. Fuck em. In her case, literally.
CabFredDead
2025-01-21 17:27:26 +0000 UTC
