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Love the Sinner: An Erotic Novel

Edit: I inadvertantly left this up as a "paid members only" post almost all day! That wasn't my intention, and was simply a mistake. I currently don't have plans to gate posts like that. I see that some people signed up today, maybe with the intention of seeing this post. I apologize to those people especially. As a way to make up for that, if anyone signed up today just to see this post, please reach out to me. I would like to give you a special sneak preview of my next project as an apology.

Good afternoon!

I am thrilled to finally be able to share with you the story that I spent all November working on.  Is it conceited to call it a novel? Maybe. But I think the story earns it on length alone. I never said it was a good novel!

It was a commissioned story, and in many ways it's unlike anything I have written before, so I am especially curious about any feedback, good or bad! Would you like it if I wrote more stories like this? 

One thing I would like to pick your collective brain about in particular is how to release this story.

Normally for a story this length, I would split it into 4-5 parts. But there is a major issue with that here. The first fourth of the story is a fairly harsh cuckolding story. The latter three fourths is an enemies-to-lovers romance. 

So if I release the first fourth as “part 1”, the people who might like the rest of the story could get turned off instantly. Then, the people who enjoyed the first part might expect the rest to be the same, and be disappointed when it's different.

The way I see it, I have three choices.

What do you think?

Comments

Damn this was a good story. You're really good at writing romance, I hope you write more romance in the future.

Xehanort

Thanks for the review! Glad you liked it! If I ever revisit this story, I think you are spot on: it could use more depth of the world, and show a little more about Celine and Seth's life apart from their direct interactions. That would give me a chance to flesh out side characters more as well. In my initial plot outline, Nina had sort of dethroned Celine in the club scene after the cuckolding event, becoming the new top dog. The commissioner was not especially interested in that plot direction, so it was cut. Exploring that idea a bit more could be an opportunity to develop her character. If you are interested, I could use my magical narrator omniscience to tell you the contents of the letter lol, but it could be better to leave it a mystery: Celine clearly thought so! Thank you again!

Mickey H Newman

Awesome story, the characters felt fleshed out and real to me. Except for Nina and Tom, which were essentially just mustache twirling, shallow villains. The enemies to lovers development also felt fully fleshed out and real to me, or at the very least didn't feel like you haphazerdly threw it together, which I've seen in alot of other similar stories of reconcilliation. The quieter moments between the two was super cute and especially endearing to read, like how they both tried to deepen their knowledge of the others interest. Not to mention their character development was fairly spot on. Celines in particular. All in all, the only real negative in this story, to me, was that you didn't really involve Nina, Tom or the other side characters as much, but given the length of the novel, and the focus being the romance between the 2 leads, its understandable. And finally, (Light Spoilers) leaving us without showing what Ninas letter was about in the end was mean. I demand answers! (in a more serious note, that was a nice touch of showing us that they've fully moved on by the end). Looking forward to more of your stories, keep em coming! 4/5.

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