Downward Dog Part 3 Full Rough Draft
Added 2024-08-11 02:45:14 +0000 UTCGood Evening!
I just finished drafting the end of Downward Dog part 3! This is the end of the series unless I decide to do any follow-up stories at some point.
For those who have been reading the periodic updates, I marked the beginning of the new material with a small green highlight.
As always, feedback is highly appreciated.
Especially on the ending! I have included two possible endings to the story. Ending one reflects my original plan for how to end the story, but after sounding out my audience for their preferences, I decided to write an alternate ending to see if people preferred that more. Be sure to vote on which ending you prefer, and let me know why in the comments!
A few other topics I am considering for rewrites:
This section is pretty Faria-light. Normally, I would have at least one more programming session, perhaps before the scene where Heather becomes fully a puppy. The issue is that I feel like I ran out of interesting things for Faria to do and say because this story was so much longer than the others in the Freelancer series. So I am questioning whether to add one more Faria scene or keep it as it is.
The original outline called for Jackie to force Heather to run an agility course like in a dog show. I cut this sequence because it felt like the scene flowed naturally from Jackie displaying Heather's pussy to the crowd into the public sex show. It would be another opportunity for ridicule and humiliation from the crowd, but I think it might break the flow a little.
Was there anything you disliked? Anything that could have been done better? Anything you thought was a slam dunk? I'm anxious to know if you have any opinions.
Which ending did you prefer?
