Behind the Neighbor's Door - Part 4
Added 2025-04-12 09:43:03 +0000 UTCHere is the 4th part. I made a few changes sinc
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Nolan has become full blown stupid. Sadly, that's a trademark of your writing. I would love for him to NOT be so stupid and naive. Have him suspect she's withholding info, keeping a closer eye on her AND nate, and still get his cum nut in the process. Let him deal with not just the fantasy, but the mistrust and suspicion that comes with playing the game. Maybe a small hidden camera on the deck and in the living room, with a live feed. And, it's time for Grace to own her sluttiness and go ahead and fuck the troll next door.
Speechless
2025-07-20 03:46:57 +0000 UTCI like slow burn but, at this point, we already know where this is going so why sooo slow? Honestly, while hot, there doesn't seem to be anything unique about what I've seen so far.
Czoftw
2025-06-15 19:10:47 +0000 UTCHot as hell. I love that Nolan feels like he knows the boundaries, but Grace is holding stuff back. I hope that continues, and that they don't have a full and frank discussion with Nate about what they're doing, that'd be a fairly well trodden road we don't need to go down. I do feel like I need a clearer description of this balcony though. I thought it had a dividing wall which blocked most everything, but somehow Nate is also using both hands on Grace past the divide because now it's a half-wall? I don't need a picture of Grace, I need a picture of this balcony.
Display Name Here
2025-05-20 15:00:23 +0000 UTCWell written character development. So what happened during those hushed conversations and what happened when the sexually aroused wife can’t get satisfied does she leave hubby sleeping and go next door? Or does she masturbate thinking about what Nate’s cock feels like? Does she tell hubby, or keeps it secret? Is she going to cheat or tell all maybe making some of it up to make her boyfriend give her permission to take it all the way? She is being groomed slow but surely to give it up and cockold the boyfriend, once she realizes she can have it all she will want more….
FU
2025-05-13 18:07:26 +0000 UTCI say drop #5 a day early ☆ We are all waiting Antarctica77 ☆ DO IT! 😈
Sask306
2025-05-12 00:27:18 +0000 UTCVery well written but, I dont like when she is flirting with Nate and knows that husband is watching or listening... make her relation with neighbour more hidden, i like to see when wives are doing it in secret, it is more interesting when husband is watching or listening and learns about her dark side... Threesome with Wife, Dora and Neighbour is my dream:))
Cofe Diss
2025-05-02 23:40:35 +0000 UTCThank you for the short-term ones. I've fixed them and will update the document right after I hit "enter" now. I couldn't find where I switched to the first POV, but I hope I fixed the rest. In my brain, from the start of the story until now, it has gone max 4-5 months since early-ish February(?) or late January. I'm thinking late May, early June. And yes, math isn't my strong suit. I'm very much a stereotype as a writer in that regard.
Antarctica77
2025-04-23 13:49:53 +0000 UTCI love Graces assertive, teasing personality and dialog. Both in the sex scenes with Nolan, and "Rubbing his fantasy in his face " without being a full on evil sadist. Even if she might get turned on from teasing/taunting him in the future. The demeanor she has is perfect. Honestly I would be happy if you wrapped up your other stories or paused them to work just on this. Especially if the gap between stories shortened.
Devon88
2025-04-16 17:51:19 +0000 UTCFirstly, I'm loving this story. I liked My Neighbor, but I think this has all the tools to be even better. Great premise, well rounded characters with emotional depth, really well paced, with great naturally flowing dialogue for the most part. Has some great moments that are dynamite for this genre too, like overhead moments that could or couldn't be something. So a huge well done for all of that! 👏 For some constructive criticism though, two things that I have issues with, which may just be pet peeves of mine. The narration sometimes flips between character narration and third person narration in the same paragraph. Like Nolan being referred to as "Nolan" and "he" in one sentence, but as "I" in the next sentence. Probably just my pet peeve though, most people probably don't notice. The other issue I have is relating to the timeline of the story. Both the overarching timeline and the shorter moments. For short term moments in this chapter alone - Nolan was in the office on a Saturday and "the morning turned into late afternoon and he'd worked longer than he'd planned", but then he went home at midday. If he worked to the late afternoon he couldn't have left at midday. And later that day Grace went out to tennis, Nolan went out with Nate while she was out, but she saw Nate at the mailbox when she got back. Nate couldn't have been in two places at the same time. For long term timeline issues, there have been points where time has been brushed forward as is often required, at one point I'm pretty sure "over the next few months" was mentioned as weather was changing etc, and weeks have passed in a single comment at several other points. All those moments of brushing time forward add up, but I don't think that this story is being written as 6 or 7 months having passed since the start, so that could become an issue when plotline points are introduced that don't fit in the timeline. Like it was mentioned Dora was pregnant in the last chapter. I'd have put money on Nate being revealed as the father later, but already the timeline outlined doesn't support that (she was playing tennis this chapter for example so she must be very early on in the pregnancy and not 5 or 6 months along like she'd need to be). So just some minor things to work on to take you to the next level, but a good story and good storytelling ability is on show in abundance overall. 🫶
Gabby
2025-04-16 00:14:28 +0000 UTCBravo for sticking to your schedule and giving us regular uploads of multiple stories per month - that’s unheard of on this platform and very pleasant change from literally any other writer. Even if a story disappoints with the pace, we know that it will continue in just one month, not six-ten months. Having said that, it would be absolutely fantastic if you gave Emperor’s a tiny raunchy scene before the next chapter, to get us through the wait. I know you have other stories to keep you occupied, but I assume you’ll be writing Neighbour 5 sooner than a day before release, so you could give us some Alpha draft.
Z
2025-04-13 15:01:57 +0000 UTCI'm not kidding,the most sexually explosive part of that was the last paragraph, where he can hear snatches of murmured conversation. The suggestive noises that could be something or nothing.That was sensational. I would love to see him get wrapped up in self doubt,confusion , paranoia,uncertainty.
Amer Gill
2025-04-13 10:25:06 +0000 UTCUgh great story it’s amazing so for the wait is killing me tho lol. Can’t wait till next month great job
Chris N
2025-04-13 01:48:56 +0000 UTCYou were right about a slow burn
John Lewis
2025-04-13 01:29:38 +0000 UTCGreat story, I know some think it's slow but we will get there, the month wait makes it more difficult, but have to give time for the other stories he's writing to be written too.
Mondo36
2025-04-12 19:55:26 +0000 UTCAgree this is progressing great! Loving it, Just hard to wait a month for next installment.
Reader79
2025-04-12 16:06:28 +0000 UTCThe rhythm isn't too slow, but it's very frustrating to have to wait a month between chapters.
Pascal
2025-04-12 15:27:04 +0000 UTCVera Dijkmans
Antarctica77
2025-04-12 15:23:08 +0000 UTCCan you share the name of the model in the photo?
Kratos
2025-04-12 14:23:40 +0000 UTCI love this story! Your pacing is great! I hope this story ends with no sequels after part 8. Not that I don't love it, but I'm afraid I'll resent paying for your story if it drags on. For example, "My Neighbor" lost me after part 4. The main female protagonist went from reserved teacher to cock crazed super ho to quickly, and the most consequential plot point in the whole story happened in part 3 which naturally made parts 4 through 16 feel inconsequential. Good luck on the upcoming!
Jake
2025-04-12 13:32:06 +0000 UTCI like it, but the pace is painfully slow - it’s chapter 4 and we didn’t even get a handjob. Considering the price of highest tier, it’s a bit of an asshole move.
Z
2025-04-12 12:49:36 +0000 UTCLove the direction this is going keep it up, only painful part is waiting for the next chapter lol
Azrael Arisen
2025-04-12 11:43:35 +0000 UTC
