Chapter 3 (no proof reading yet)
Added 2022-12-02 13:13:14 +0000 UTCHere it is folks. Will let it stew for a good w
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The parts that was split from this version will be part 4, maybe even part 5.
Antarctica77
2022-12-12 06:07:36 +0000 UTCFirst of all, hot as fuck, absolutely loved it and will definitely read it again when the completely finished version is out (if not sooner lol). Second, I know you said you were planning on splitting part 3 up, was this the split version and there will be more down the road, or is this the "complete" part 3?
Morgan
2022-12-12 01:06:32 +0000 UTCYeah I was changing to third to get more of Cass' perspective, but Im so used to first that when I get in a groove I forget. It will be fixed when I do proof reading, don't you worry.
Antarctica77
2022-12-06 11:45:29 +0000 UTCThe POV shift is really borked. The of whether it should even happen aside (fwiw, story should stay in Isaac's pov imo), you have Cass referring to Isaac as 'me' when I'm assuming the narrative at that point is supposed to be from her POV? Unless he's an invisible, psychic ghost standing in the room relaying a scene he'd already experienced. I assume not though lol.
hugplx
2022-12-06 07:50:26 +0000 UTC
