Switching Perspectives
Added 2023-07-03 12:02:25 +0000 UTCThroughout my writing, I often switch from the perspective of one character to another, despite the fact that it always remains in third person. For example, if our main male protagonist in SAAS does something rash and I want to explain how a female protagonist perceives his action, I will write it from her perspective, which includes more of what she sees in a scenario and what her thoughts may be.
I've realized, though, that this has the potential to mess up the immersion if you're trying to read the story purely from Josh's perspective. So I'd like your opinion. Does this switching impact your reading at all? Do you prefer one or the other? Check out the examples below.
Example 1:
Josh abruptly slammed the door and turned to gaze at Poki with a lustful stare. She looked absolutely beautiful. Even with a glimpse of uncertainty in her eyes, her body, her curves, and her innocent face were all begging to be used savagely. He could feel his cock harden as his imagination filled with the potential sex positions he'd fuck her in. Her plump lips were inviting, but her ass jutted outwards in such an irresistible manner; there was no question where his cock would end up first.
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Example 2:
Poki's head immediately shot towards her bedroom door as she heard it slam shut. There, Josh stood stoically, glaring at her with a rigid stare. He was clearly eye-fucking her. It was obvious that he had one goal in mind, and from the look on his face, he had no intention of being gentle. Her heart pumped more rapidly and she could feel goosebumps form on her skin. She knew that he was already undressing her in his head, and she wondered how long it'd be before he was undressing her in real life. Seconds? Minutes? She wouldn't have to wait long to find out.