I had adjusted the location of the text for the first panel, so the flow is a bit disjointed. I'm also wondering if the writing might be leaning a little too much into Stan Lee-ism where it re-iterates what is already shown. But I think that the core is still good, perhaps a re-run through the script might be a good idea for the clean-up.
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