Kitty's Cookies - Chapter 2
Added 2021-08-24 00:02:20 +0000 UTCDay 2 of Jordan and his new mind control powers brings him straight up to Lynsey and Vickie's roommates!
If you haven't read chapter one during the votes you can start here:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1yyhnSi-E7Z5ahJS91WOBKVaJV31XAjUGuD-Mq6DYWCU/edit?usp=sharing
The whole folder is here: https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1w8Tee6Pg2nt3ZM8czd6vL-Uu5SzqTIdp?usp=sharing
Thank you all for your support!
Comments
Thanks! I always feel all of my stories are slow, so I'm glad this one is going at a faster pace.
Neal Johnstone
2021-08-28 14:41:25 +0000 UTCI’m breathless. Definitely a much faster pace than most of your stories. This looks to be a wild ride. I think Lynsey will be interesting to stick with. She surprises even herself so far.
HardhatDoozer
2021-08-28 04:18:03 +0000 UTCMy idea with Kitty's Cookies is that Jordan can have any ONE girl, but he wants many. Not all girls can get along with each other.
Neal Johnstone
2021-08-24 23:54:35 +0000 UTCI was curious what the reason for keeping the girls limited was. As a story I know it’s better because it allows more fleshed out characters but I didn’t understand why would Jordan do this as a character. Now with this chapter it has become clear it’s difficult to control and juggle a lot of girls at once long term. Between making them comfortable with sharing and keeping the girls with less compatible minds happy when in each other’s presence he just can’t handle too many. It will be interesting to see how figures out how to manage his burgeoning harem.
Nick Cartwright
2021-08-24 22:12:51 +0000 UTCYes, I did thanks for the catch! However, language changes by use if we can all use the their, there, and they'res totally interchangeably we can change the culture and It won't be a mistake any longer! Yeah, I think going back and editing the document may be easier than force changing the culture. What a world.
Neal Johnstone
2021-08-24 06:14:47 +0000 UTCOn the first page you say “Vicky! Lynsey! They’re roommates too!” I believe you mean “their roommates” because the 2 girls mentioned are not roommates and “they’re “ gives the impression they are. Also you keep saying hands under tits. What do you mean by that? Was she playing with them. I’m finding it odd to visualize
Nick Cartwright
2021-08-24 04:43:03 +0000 UTC
