BRAGR) Rotating Dungeon
Added 2024-07-31 03:57:26 +0000 UTC“Foggy…” Angel whispered softly while hugging my arm.
She was right, though. As soon as we entered the dungeon, we were met with a thick fog. This was something I did not understand, though. “I thought we checked this place out.”
“Leader, we did. We had a small team enter it yesterday to check it out. It was a cave dungeon yesterday.” The person who answered was named Frank. He had just joined the Marines before everything happened, and he was deployed to try to stop the monster wave in New York. Sadly for him, the government saw him as disposable. But what he just said bothered me. From what I could remember this dungeon should be a normal dungeon.
“Master, this dungeon seems to be a rotating dungeon.” Hilde did not make me feel any better at all. I had heard about such dungeons before. But that was not supposed to be how this dungeon worked. It was like a starter dungeon for those around level 30. But now I have no idea if the monsters are even of the same level or not.
But the issue was the rotating dungeon part. Rotating dungeons, from what I heard in my dreams, were dungeons that changed in structure and design each time. Some would be forests or caves, while other times, they took on modern settings. And the one we were in resembled such a setting, but these dungeons…
“So, we are looking at a dungeon that is most likely filled with undead…” I muttered in response.
“Yes. This type of dungeon does seem to fit that characteristic. Although we can not be sure until we run into a monster. The only issue is undead are undetectable.”
“We will just need to keep our eyes open. Everyone get into a tight formation. Report any movement or sounds. Healers are to be in the middle, casters around them, and melee protecting the casters. Keep up. Anyone that lags behind can cause the death of everyone here. Remember, this is not the game. We do not respawn if we die in this dungeon.” I swept my gave over everyone present. I could see some of their faces turning pale. Some even gulped, but they still held firm. No one tried to argue or back away.
I patted Angel’s hand and gave her a look. She nodded and fell back to the center of the group. She was our highest mage and best healer. She had to be in the back. I know Hilde can heal, too, but she was our main tank this time around, so she had to be in the front.
“Oh right. Like in the movies if you get bit you will be infected. If you do not get treated quickly you will turn into a zombie. This means be very careful not to get bit or even scratched. You can think of ever worse case scenario with it comes to zombies.” I had to make sure they kept this in mind when fighting.
The fog slowly began to let up as we continued forward, revealing what looked like a town. It reminded me of an old-school game called Quiet Hills. I played it a few times on my PC. It was quite a good game. The graphics sucked, but the game itself was very good.
Looking at the current situation though, there were no zombies close by from what I can tell. But we only just entered the town. It was a long stretch of road with a few houses dotted here and there with overgrown lawns. A few abandoned cars on the road. Some had crashed into telephone polls while others were left as is with their doors open as if they had to escape something. There were patches of dried blood stains all over as well.
I have no idea how long this place had been like this but it looked to be from at least the late 90s or early 2000s. I was not a care buff, so I couldn’t tell. But it did resemble a place you would see on Earth. Just desolate with no living creature in sight.
“So what now?” one of my team members asked. I could tell everyone was nervous. This dungeon allowed larger teams, which was nice. We had ten people all teamed up. It was like a small raid. And in a way, with how this dungeon seemed to be laid out, it was not entirely wrong to say that.
“Dungeons like these normally have key points of interest we need to find in order to progress through it.” I explained. “So for now we are just searching everything including these cars and the houses. But we will move as a team. Even if it takes longer. I can not afford to let any of you lose your lives in here.” Even if I were to fail my quest, I did not care. I did not want anyone dying on me. Since we decided to team up we would stick together like planned.
“Master, this dungeon type should offer huge rewards for completion as well so it will be good for leveling everyone up.” Hilde was not wrong. These raid-type dungeons gave great experience. At least the ones in game did, from what I read. I am not sure about in real life. We can only wait and see.
Comments
I swept my gave over everyone present. Gaze Something about this feels off grammatically speaking: "... This means be very careful not to get bit or even scratched. You can think of ever worse case scenario with it comes to zombies." I do not feel comfortable making a judgement call as you can write this several ways and have the same or similar meaning. This is how I would have written this: "... This means you must be very careful not to get bitten if scratched. Things only get worse from there when it comes to zombies." But, you could also write it this way "... This means be very careful not to get bitten or even scratched. You can imagine an even worse-case scenario when it comes to zombies." However, for some reason, this still feels off to me. I can't place why though. You're switching tenses at points, which is a little off. I have the same issue, so I've been more alert to this error lately haha. (Looking at the current situation though, there were no zombies close by from what I can tell.) You swapped between past and present tense here. Can should be could. However, this only fits if the rest of the passage is past tense. Otherwise, were should be are and can is fine for present tense. (Edit: the passage is past tense so we're and could would be correct) A few abandoned cars on the road. Some had crashed into telephone polls while others were left as is with their doors open as if they had to escape something. Wrong poles. English is super weird. Poles, pulls, and polls are almost identical sounding. I was not a care buff, so I couldn’t tell. Car This dungeon allowed larger teams, which was nice. Quality of life edit: This dungeon allowed for* larger teams, which was nice. It reads better this way. Especially since it doesn't lead into an explanation of why this is good, or what it allowed one to do. The way you put it would work if you were following it with something like this, This dungeon allowed larger teams, which enabled us to... There are various ways to write this, in that case. We can only wait and see. We could only wait and see. Past tense is the overall perspective of the writing, so unless it is a character speaking in present tense or some other exception, past tense is how it should be written I think? I am going to preface this with the fact I am not an editor, nor am I an English major. Double check everything before taking my word for fact. I just wanted to help to the best of my ability.
Hoshi-chan
2024-08-03 15:59:49 +0000 UTCThank you for the chapter!
Hooloovoo
2024-07-31 12:09:01 +0000 UTC