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INTEMPERANCE X - Chapter 24, Release of Pressure

Our friends are reaching the breaking point and Jake declares a vacation for their own mental health. But this is the Kingsleys we're talking about and nothing ever goes as planned. Let me know how I'm doing.

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From Reno in 2005 there are only a few likely destinations.

Al Steiner

Great chapter Al - very realistic scenario - nearly worthy of a video from mentour pilot - i'm not sure if they have covered an avanti yet! - not sure where Jake et al can go to - Over here in the UK we're about to get a non-stop flight from London to Sydney!

David Stewart

Very well written, I have to say, I was waiting for the second bad thing to happen, and have them go down hard...

Rob H.

I did some significant re-writing of the chapter scenes, particularly the flight scene. Nothing that changes the outcome, but just a few things to make it more realistic and to explain Jake's POV a little better.

Al Steiner


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