INTEMPERANCE IX - Chapter 13, Damage Control
Added 2025-05-13 13:04:00 +0000 UTCThe burst of energy continues. I spent the entire day writing, taking breaks only for eating and sleep here and there, and managed to write an entire chapter in twenty-four hours. This is a very Kingsley chapter and delves deep into the spiritual life of us all. Let me know how I'm doing.
Comments
I love that such excellent chapters are coming out fast and furious! I was rereading a bunch of your material on Storiesonline.net and found a very cool piece of foreshadowing! In "Intemperence I", after Michelle leaves Jake high and dry and horns on the boat, he ends up with Colette, his first groupie, who offers to fetch Jake a second girl. He's brainsmacked at that, but he does, after all, end up with basically two wives.
Lawrence David Thompson
2025-05-16 21:42:21 +0000 UTCI will. Thank you!
Al Steiner
2025-05-15 10:50:33 +0000 UTCI will review and fix in the final edit. Thanks.
Al Steiner
2025-05-15 10:50:02 +0000 UTCGreat story, Al, as usual. Your speed in completing and then sharing new chapters is awesome. Keep it up. I just came across some possible typo/inconsistency. Look at page 6, when Jake, Pauline, Matt and Coop, with the 2 lawyers, went to the police station. I am sure that Coopo's lawyer was Redmond and Matt's lawyer was the lady lawyer Celest Marwood. Perhaps you can check this out? a minor inconsistency, understandable as you have been writing so many chapters.
Azri Ahmad
2025-05-15 02:02:07 +0000 UTCAl, been with you since book 1 chapter 1 and this is the Apex of all of the things I've ever read. Loving all of the characters old and new. I don't even need illustrations, the pictures in my head are far better than the ones you're creating. Keep up the good work!
Bob Holden
2025-05-14 22:03:33 +0000 UTC
