SP Chapter Twenty Eight Is in Editing
Added 2021-03-20 00:56:42 +0000 UTCAnd here's the (completely unedited) full text of the next chapter. You can find it here: Chapter Twenty Eight - The Solstice (Part Two). For all the work that the song took, there really wasn't much left. Only a thousand words at most, I think, and half of that came from the lyrics.
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Yeah, if everything went according to plan, Luna would have sang the end of her heartsong. With Sweetie Belle's interference, however, we get a reprise from the other side.
2021-03-20 02:50:55 +0000 UTCI like this version of the song much better! Great chapter. Totally taken off-guard by the cliffhanger, though. After reading the previous version (and not reading your notes in this post), I expected a whole other half to it.
Meyer
2021-03-20 02:46:29 +0000 UTCEeeeh, not exactly. Luna is too pissed and Celestia too guilt-ridden, both for nontrivial reasons, to fix things with an apology song/friendship speech/etc.
2021-03-20 01:15:36 +0000 UTCDeus Ex Sweetie to the rescue?
Kharakian
2021-03-20 01:11:52 +0000 UTC
