Nutt Milk - Update
Added 2023-03-29 12:09:51 +0000 UTCIm at the half point of the first chapter rendering (20/40 pages rendered)
Im also planning on redoing most of the text in order to simplify things
and I wanted to ask if there are areas where you find yourself "lost" or no clear or where to improve stuff?
if there are places where you would like to see more pages/panels to better understand a certain part or you feel something goes by too fast and you would much rather to "linger" on it a little more?
Comments
Awesome comment ^__^ Yeah Im pretty new to the whole comics/manga concept so there are things that in my had and on paper kinda seem like they make sense but than when I go to visualize them I kinda fall either cause I dont notice or cause Im trying to actively avoid them (like drawing the environments which evidently I should) you make good points and I will remake and adjust some stuff here to help the flow and understanding of things thank ya :)
PirateFoxBox
2023-03-30 22:05:58 +0000 UTCI've read over the comic a few times again, take everything I say with a grain of salt I'm not like saying I'm any good at this. Page numbers I use aren't including the title, so the patreon album position - 1. So to start on the third page it wasn't immediately clear for me that Japy with their shirt over their nose wasn't happening currently. Especially since JD is super horny in that page and that's happening currently. That might just be me, I'm dumb, I realized when I looked again. The rest of that whole scene tracks. Page 13 is going to be cool when it's fully done, there's a lot in that one but it all tracks. The jump from when they're walking to the farm to being at the farm on page 17 with the doors opening. I like page 17, but I don't really have a good picture of what the farm is. Like in 16 there is a lot of dialogue, maybe draw this part out so the farm can be better pictured. Page 14 does have it in the background but I didn't really notice that in my first read. In the next part now in the stable or barn, I don't have a great idea what the inside really looks like either right now. The only page in particular in this part is 25. The left of the page was a little hard to distinguish what was happening when looking at it the first time. This might just be with how it is currently and fixed in a passthrough. Quick shoutout to page 21 and 28 for being some of the best pages, and the final page too. I'm really excited to see more of Elysium.
HazyHind
2023-03-30 21:07:37 +0000 UTCLooking forward to it!
TheZoi
2023-03-29 23:12:04 +0000 UTC
