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Dialogue Update: Narration and Other Edits (Pages 7-12, 28, 34-35, 51-52)

Hi hi!

After further thinking on this change, I decided to remove the 4th wall narration from the edits I previously added. It just felt like...too much.

I let y'alls feedback sit for a week and I agree that less is more, and the narration detracts from the emotional impact the pages had previously. There's just something to be said about an art page with no dialogue–it hits different, ya know?

Thanks for your love and support on these changes, it means a lot to me.

-J


© James Schleisman February-March 2019 All Rights Reserved.

Dialogue Update: Narration and Other Edits (Pages 7-12, 28, 34-35, 51-52) Dialogue Update: Narration and Other Edits (Pages 7-12, 28, 34-35, 51-52) Dialogue Update: Narration and Other Edits (Pages 7-12, 28, 34-35, 51-52) Dialogue Update: Narration and Other Edits (Pages 7-12, 28, 34-35, 51-52) Dialogue Update: Narration and Other Edits (Pages 7-12, 28, 34-35, 51-52) Dialogue Update: Narration and Other Edits (Pages 7-12, 28, 34-35, 51-52) Dialogue Update: Narration and Other Edits (Pages 7-12, 28, 34-35, 51-52) Dialogue Update: Narration and Other Edits (Pages 7-12, 28, 34-35, 51-52)

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In the end, the most important thing is you feeling comfortable with the result. Personally, much better :P

Carlos Melero

Haha, as much as I hate to admit it cuz a part of me thought the 4th wall narration was helpful at the time, you're right. It was definitely one of those ideas where I was like "nO I wAnT iT iN My bOok" but it was garbo 😆

Jamie Schleisman

Much better this way :)


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