The Spirals Nightclub - Editing Banter

Story: Can you really have a breakdown on a mind that doesn’t work right normally? 

SG: Yes, yes you can (just a general answer)

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Story: “Hey, hey, hey!” she said “I’m working! And besides, the last time I saw you I was waking up in a warehouse surrounded by hypnotized and frozen women while you were being escorted out by the police! This is a new job for me, I don’t need you doing something stupid here, not now. Behave!” She scolded harshly. 

SG: I always know you're doing a good job of writing a character when I read something and either answer what they're saying or, in this case, think 'that was a bitchy thing to say...I dislike you already'

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Story: The brunette’s eyes had rolled up into her head during the massage. She was struggling to keep her wits about her…but that struggle was slowing fading away. She gave a quick shake of her head to try and clear it, but Xander kept his fingers firmly on her temples, slowly working away her tension and her resistance. It wasn’t long before her eyes fluttered closed. 

SG: Non editing related: nice image (and nicely written, too)

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Story: Key: MD, MC, M/F, Hypno, Sleepy

SG: Non-editing related, but I thought I was having a dyslexic moment here and was reading your screen name backwards...I need more sleep.

Me: possibly =cP

SG: i think the answer you're looking for here is 'probably'

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Story: She did her best to give each of them her attention, but she only had two hands. They, on the other hand, had six that were all put to good use. Her moans could be heard even over the music…for quite some time. Until exhaustion kicked in. 

SG: Ok that is a hell of an image that pushed buttons for some reason…

Me: A foursome pushes buttons? What?

SG: how about we just forget i said anything about that

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Story: He continued to get closer and closer to her, until finally he tried to move in for a kiss. But he never made it. As he moved towards her, her lips getting almost painfully close, she raised a single finger in front of him. All at once he stopped moving, but not by choice or hypnotic suggestion. It was as if he was being held back by an invisible force exerted along his entire body. Veo smiled in her blank, hypnotized state and simply said “Now now, that's not very gentlemanly…” She pulled her finger away from his face and as she did a white mist was pulled from his body into hers. He fell asleep on his feet…completely drained of his energy by the angel. She blew him a gentle kiss and his body floated to the side of the club for him to sleep off the effects. 

SG: Damn (that was for the whole paragraph)

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Story: Strangely enough, it made perfect sense to her,

SG: Made perfect sense to me, too, i'm not sure what that says for me or the character :oP

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Story : A flash of blue hypnotic energy pulsed out of his eyes, and of course he was looking directly at Stacy when this happened. 

SG: Buttons...successfully pushed...from this whole encounter...specifically the last few paragraphs...holy shit.