Innocent Devil’s Harem Ch. 213
Added 2025-11-17 01:32:32 +0000 UTCAll these years that I’d known Serenity, all these years that I’d interacted with her and become extremely familiar with her, and suddenly that had all been...
November 16, 2025
NOTE: This is one of those chapters where I am really emphasizing their appearance, but it’s also a longer chapter than normal (almost TWICE as long as a normal chapter), so you’re just getting 'bonus content' in the form of extra description. As in, the chapter would have ended in the same spot, even without all the extra appearance details.
ALSO: I am roughly halfway through the next Combat Healer chapter, so hopefully I'll be posting that this coming weekend. I'VE BEEN STUCK on the direction I want the plot to take the next few Combat Healer chapters, but I think I have a better idea now.
Not only stuck on the plot of the main part, but also the third-person perspective that I always do at the beginning of those chapters. I have to decide 'whose perspective' to share. Sometimes it's easy to decide, and other times I have no idea. Initially, I was going to do Lyla, but I think I'm going to do Hailey instead, in part because she has a bird's eye view of the situation. And because I don't feel like Lyla's perspective would actually add much to the story at this point in the plot.
Immortal Supers Book 6 audiobook is available on Audible.
Combat Healer Book 1 audio should also be releasing soon-ish (few weeks).
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FEEDBACK: Thoughts?
As I mentioned at the top, the emphasis on appearance was just ‘bonus’ content to really try to reinforce how big of a change this is, and the chapter still would have ended here either way (it's a longer chapter), partially because I want some feedback before we get involved more with Amber.
Anyway, some questions (these are important, since your responses might affect the direction the next few chapters take):
1. What do you think about the new identities? (Goal is for this to be a fun thing that the characters will want to do again, just for the fun and excitement of it. But I need feedback to know if you guys are liking the direction or not.)
2. What do you think about Amber’s supposed ‘pet name’ for men? (It will be relevant in the next couple of chapters, so I want to know how you guys feel about it.)
3. What do you think about Amber so far? And what do you think about Amber and Miriam's relationship?
4. What do you 'want' to happen in the next few chapters? (Your request could become a reality!)
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Comments
Lol. PVC, latex, vinyl, “wet”-looking fabrics are a recurrent theme in his books. Can’t you feel the enthusiasm? It’s not my thing but at this point, I would feel like something was missing if he toned it down too much.
slugbiscuit
2026-01-15 21:10:14 +0000 UTCI might be alone here, but I'm definitely getting bored of the PVC. Feels like it's been the same day forever, with the same costumes. Going from the school thing to the maid customers might have been more interesting if there had been more of a break between them.
zurvan2
2026-01-08 17:38:55 +0000 UTC1) Only comment I have on the new identities is kind of lke a Cosplay or roleplaying even if it is forced due to the rings snd not by choice 2) Having frequented some seedy bars and strip clubs some of the women did think like that, if they did not like your or not attracted to you you were a pig, if they liked you you were cute. Defense mechanism to not fall for the guy 3) Regarding Amber I guess I'd say I am ambivalent to her, ot a major player as far as character. She is only there to see if she is or working with the enemy they are facing. As far as SmokeJam's comments go with regards to Jessica I kind of agree she shouldn't be par of the harem at the moment I leave the door open depending on further interractions. She was there to try and safe hr from whatever disease or curse she has. As she is a friend of Serenity and by extension a friend of Kai's. that said, I'd say Kai will need to give her his blood. Being part of the harem I leave open as relationships develop with her she may become am asset 4) I rhink rhwaw may be needed for the toryline to progres a) Jessica does receive Kai's blood and is cured of the cure/disease. I'l let further interactions unfold naturally and see if she c be added to the harem b) Liz somehow with the destruction of the crystal containing Liz's spirit is reunited with her body and Bethel is separated from Liz's body. What happens afterward I'm not sure what should happen
dfontana59
2026-01-06 03:02:48 +0000 UTCI usually don't have a problem with people voicing their opinions, and I often appreciate the feedback, but calling anything I write 'AI-slop' is crossing a big line for me. I have never used AI in my writing, not even for editing, and I never will. You generally don't seem to understand (or appreciate) the amount of time that goes into writing even just one chapter. I often spend anywhere from 20-40 hours plotting, writing, and editing just for one chapter (some chapters are faster, some take longer, but it's a lot of work either way). So your comment about AI-slop is very much a slap in the face. I'm a real person, and I sometimes have weeks and months where I'm struggling. Maybe because I'm sick, or maybe because I'm stressed, etc. I don't usually share what's going on in my personal life, but it's not like I don't have things that influence my ability to be creative. There are times when I have really bad brain fog, and so it leads to repetition because I'm so exhausted, stressed, and generally burnt out that my working memory is shot. You want to make all these very opinionated statements about how the chapter is progressing, but you weren't around to give feedback when I first posted those chapters. If you want your opinion to hold more weight, then you need to be around when I'm actually posting them. In general, feedback usually doesn't bother me, but I sometimes get supporters who drop in randomly and have all these 'strong opinions,' only to disappear for years. Obviously, it's a little different in your case, but you have to remember that I'm primarily writing this story for those who are here month after month. It's fine if you don't want to support monthly, and there are definitely others who only support every few months, but if that's the case then don't pop on here 'making demands' and expect those demands to actually make any difference. Certainly, it's perfectly fine for you to express concerns about the direction of the story, even if you support maybe once a year, but the 'demanding' part is the issue. Your comments very much have a vibe of "How dare you! How dare you deviate from what I want!" and generally very belittling toward an author who is writing a story that you're supposedly enjoying enough to support occasionally. You've commented at least twice. Have you even read the other comments and seen the other feedback from those who support monthly? There have been some criticisms here and there, and I've often made edits to address those concerns, especially since they were concerns brought up when I actually posted the chapter. But, as an example, if someone were to comment on Chapter 100 with a whole bunch of criticism, I'm not going back to change something in Chapter 100. That person would be too late to the party at that point. In case you forgot, I believe you've left criticism and feedback in the past, and I was receptive to it, but this is altogether something different. You've lost the politeness, and just generally sound extremely entitled. To the point that it doesn't even seem like the same person. If you want to have more input into the direction of the story, then you'd have to stick around longer. And if you're not willing to do that (or just can't do that), then that's fine, but then don't be shocked if the story goes a direction you weren't expecting or wanting. Again, it's not the feedback that's an issue, but the 'belittling' nature of it, and the sense of entitlement, as if I was somehow supposed to read your mind months ago and write what you expected, despite you not being around. And if you want to complain about something, at least have the decency to be polite. I don't recall you being so rude in the past. I had actually done a poll awhile ago about what people want: more plot or more steamy content, and it was split 50/50. And that's generally the goal I aim for. We just had a decent chunk of plot (Absalom showing up, Werewolf Queen issue, etc.), and now we're getting into a mix of plot and steam. It might not be your cup of tea, but it's what roughly 50% of my supporters want. And with the other chapter you commented on, I legitimately was having a bad month, and it definitely affected my writing. If you had read the other comments, you'd see that I tried to address issues as I was able, but also decided it wasn't worth rewriting the whole chapter when I could just focus on the next few chapters instead. That's because I'm human (not a machine), and I'm not at a 100% all the time. I have my ups and downs, so have a little empathy.
Author Kaizer Wolf
2025-11-29 18:07:37 +0000 UTC1) Absolutely not my thing and rather much more unsettling. I can see it being maybe interesting from the girls POV, but we just had the thing of "soul not in the body" brooding of Kai last chapter, to introduce a much weaker form of this combined with a sort of compulsion willingly just right after feels very off. Not even considering how much Kai was against influencing and controlling other people and suddenly it was a fun sex activity was already quite jarring back then, this is even more in that direction and even if it is told that the girls are excited, I simply cannot see that meshing with Kai's character. His sincerity has already taken quite a few hits, if this becomes regular, then I don't see how this story can end in any other way than him still being cursed. On a slightly different note: Instead of having to start on a note that you doubled the chapter for descriptions, maybe just safe yourself the time and don't add them in the first place. They were basically repeating themselves with tiny differences I stopped counting how many times. I just kept scrolling and tried to piece the ring informations together throughout. The tendency to describe every appearance in detail again and again, even multiple times in the same chapter, is very prevalent and something I commented on a previous chapter today after catching up. To add even more to that just ruins it completely. 2) If this goes the jealousy route (which is one of the logical barrier-passing explanations) then I can see that nickname having some interesting double meaning. She doesn't necessarily like men that much but still kind of wants them, so twisting that term could fit. 3) I honestly don't like to add potential outcomes to a story, especially at a point where the main character's background history is fleshed out more, but rather see what the author actually has as an idea. The only thing: PLEASE don't add her or Jessica to the harem. Having more women than the day has hours in what, 3 weeks of story time, is simply bad business if emotions, relationship and love are the main reason for Kai to even get this new un-cursed body. And he will have even more women anyways with Petra and Eve joining after Brooke soon. Sex is fun, but turning every encounter into a "private whore" feels very much not like him actually finding a peaceful existence. It also heavily detracts from his prior intentions of actually being a husband to his wifes. If he really wants to keep them all around and satisfied, the girls must be either unfathomable shallow and wouldn't be any help to properly anchor him, or his curse isn't really broken but just transformed. Even now a lot of the female characters only have a screen-face (or sex-face, so to speak) and not an actual character (looking at you specifially, Gabriella), adding even more women besides the obvious ones from his past just feels like plastering window stickers at this point.
SmokeJam
2025-11-29 17:22:41 +0000 UTCOkay, in the first half of the chapter, I made a ton of changes and tiny additions (added little things, like the girls' subtle 'reactions' and such). Please re-read the first half of the chapter (up until Amber shows up), and let me know if the changes/additions help!
Author Kaizer Wolf
2025-11-20 19:25:57 +0000 UTC1) This is why I feel like I have the tendency to over-explain things. In the chapter, it's emphasized that they are fundamentally aware and still present, and that they could resist the ring if they wanted. So, for example, let's say that Amber tried to get one of them to do something they really didn't want to do. That kind of situation would snap them out of it. They wouldn't just agree to whatever. Also, it's emphasized that because Miriam hasn't given them much 'instructions,' that right now they have a blank personality layered on top of their normal personality (and my plan was for some of their normal personality to begin 'filling in the gaps,' due to Miriam's lack of instructions). However, if Miriam gave them a bunch more details and backstory of 'who they are supposed to be' then they'd have that going instead. But still, the underlying 'it's really them' would still be present. I thought I had made it fairly clear that they are both aware of what is going on, and they will both remember everything once they take the rings off. In a way, it's sort of like they are 'in a trance' right now (after all, how could they be 'spies' if they can't remember what happened?) However, despite all that information being included, and despite Gwen's explanation, the general response (not just you, but from others too) seems to be 'don't like this, because it feels like it's not them' -- given some time, Kai is going to be able to see Serenity in that face will all the make-up, but he can't right now because he's known Serenity basically all his life and is just shellshocked by how drastically 'hotter' she can look. But it's not like it's not really her. But her feeling 'like a stranger' to him is also kind of the whole point right now, so that he doesn't have to 'act' in front of Amber. So I'm really left scratching my head as to why there are these complaints, despite the situation being explained (Gwen explained it beforehand). It's obviously still them, just dolled up and basically 'in a trance' so that they don't give themselves away. Kai's initial response is 'wow, this feels like a totally different person' but that's not going to last forever, and that kind of reaction is needed so he doesn't have to act. So yeah, I really am just completely confused by everyone's reaction.
Author Kaizer Wolf
2025-11-20 18:16:23 +0000 UTCVery interesting chapter: 1) Im honestly a bit torn in regards to the personality rings. The reason why this story is so good, in my opinion, is the characters and their personalities/relationships with each other. The rings therefore seem to almost diminish that, creating 'blank canvases' that arent really the same people that we've come to love and care for. Its mentioned quite consitently throughout this chapter that Serenity and Gabriella are pretty much completely different people, not only in terms of their appearances being altered, but also their state of minds and how theyre interacting with Kai and each other; for me, when we have scenes involving Kais women, especially scenes of a more intimate nature, i would prefer for it to actually be THEM, rather than a mind controlled/altered version of themselves. Similarly, because Kai has so many women within his harem, it can be rare for specific characters to get time alone (of a more personal/intimate nature) with him in which to further strengthen/expand their bonds together. This is another reason why, for me, i'd rather have this scenario be handled similarly, regarding how Serenity and Gabriella are dressed and how theyre acting, whilst still having them possess their 'true' intentities/personalities, so that it truly feels as though Kai is still interacting with the 'real' Serenity and Gabriella, rather than it feeling like he is about to be intimate with two complete strangers who i honestly dont care about/have no emotional attachment to as a reader. I guess to try to sum up, i honestly dont hate the idea of the rings, its more the way Serenity and Gabriella have been portrayed. I think having them wear the rings is fine, but maybe they need to still retain parts of their identities. For example, if the makeover hadnt made them look like two completely different people, but rather had been more like a 'model makeover', in the sense that they were still clearly Serenity and Gabriella, but perhaps 'enhanced' versions, then i think that would work better, at least in terms of it not feeling like we're reading about two complete strangers, but instead still the women that Kai (and the readers) love. Also, having them retain some of their own unique personality traits (even if its just from Kai focusing on their bonds), such as Gabriella still being bubbly, erotic, and flirty, coupled with Serenity still being loving, caring and slightly timid/shy when dressing so slutty in front of Kai, would, in my opinion, make this chapter and any future scenes involving the rings more enjoyable, as it would still "feel" as though Serenity and Gabriella are present. Moreover, i wouldnt mind the rings being used for other, potentially dangerous, situations going forward, such as any future meetings with potential allies/enemies that require the gathering of information/intel; this would potentially necessitate the wearing of the rings, so that those involved could better play a particular part/role and more easily garner said information. 2) As far as Amber and Miriams relationship is concerned, it seems as though there is a genuinely profound bond between the two, which isnt suprising considering theyve been intimate together for over a decade. If Amber does turn out to be truly innocent, then i wouldnt mind their relationship continuing, either with Kais involvement or not. For example, i could see Amber potentially becoming a part of the Miriam and Delilah dynamic, almost as though Miriam is the "wife", Delilah is the "concubine" and Amber is moreso the "girlfriend", in regards to their place within Kais heart, with Amber ultimately having a less intense/prevelant relationship with Kai personally (at least in comparison to the other two), with her instead being more focused on/worried about her relationship with Miriam initially, which could then lead to her being introduced to Delilah and potentially forming a deep connection/bond with her aswell. However, i'd also be more than fine if Amber doesnt have a sexual relationship with Kai at all, with her remaining as Miriams 'booty call' but now with more knowledge of Miriams life and overall situation, as well as the dynamics at play between Kai and the other harem women/Miriam herself; in many ways, this may be the better option as it will allow Amber to continue to sleep with other men in place of Miriam, whilst at the same time helping their own relationship to become more trusting and open.
Carl
2025-11-17 08:06:43 +0000 UTCThis is a chapter where I wrote a portion of it, and then I went back and rewrote a section of it, and then I had to sort of stitch two sections together, and because of all the 'spot edits' it resulted in some repetition. Usually if I write a chapter in a linear fashion, from start to finish, then there's less chances of repetition. And then, when I actually go through and do a final edit of it (I actually edited this chapter twice), I sometimes have real life interruptions that prevent me from keeping my head in the story the whole time. And then there's just the 'mental fatigue' factor, where my 'working memory' is shot (as in, my ability to 'remember' what was recently stated is fatigued). So yeah, this chapter could probably be tightened up, but that would just take time and energy away from me writing the next chapter, which will hopefully be much more streamlined if I can write it in linear fashion.
Author Kaizer Wolf
2025-11-17 04:17:05 +0000 UTCA small crit, I have picked this up in other chapters and noticed it becoming more frequent, which is why I mention it. So I suspect you might be doing it without realizing it. I feel you repeat your self a lot Kaizer, and frequently almost in consecutive repetition. As an example: Look like we are paid sex workers and strangers - 7 times Serenity and Candy tall - 6 times Serenity and Candy looks hot with clothing description - 6 times Serenity and Candy looks like a new person from makeup - 5 times mindless sex-doll - 5 times Within the first 4000 words, first half of the chapter you repeat the descriptions above that many times slightly wording the description differently. Its gives the impression that you are trying to fill up the page with material without saying much, or you think the reader has a very short memory and needs constant reminding. I found myself skipping entire paragraphs because I already knew what you were going to say having read it multiple times some paragraphs up. As a longer chapter than usual, I am halfway through and you are still describing them in repetition.
JayBase
2025-11-17 03:51:14 +0000 UTC1. I think the alternate identity and being able to remember everything is an interesting storyline. I do agree it would be interesting to get a perspective for both Serenity and Gabriella. 2. It's an interesting twist for a term of endearment. 3. It seems like a strong relationship and maybe that Amber might have caught wind of some detail on what was going on between Kai and Miriam and figured a way to to possibly keep Miriam for her self (Jealous towards Kai and Miriam's relationship) and didn't know of Kia's past or his tendency toward wrath in protecting his harem. 4. Even if Amber was the culprit, I kind of want Amber become part of the group, of course with some trust building to get back in Kai's good graces, so that her and Miriam don't have to split up.
Thouz83
2025-11-17 02:51:34 +0000 UTCWell, 'unsettling' is not the goal, so can you try to elaborate? Is there a specific 'aspect' or comment that makes it unsettling? In the chapter, it's emphasized that they could resist the ring if they wanted. So, for example, let's say that Amber tried to get one of them to do something they really didn't want to do. That kind of situation would snap them out of it. They wouldn't just agree to whatever. Also, it's emphasized that because Miriam hasn't given them much 'instructions,' that right now they have a blank personality layered on top of their normal personality (and my plan was for some of their normal personality to begin 'filling in the gaps,' due to Miriam's lack of instructions). However, if Miriam gave them a bunch more details and backstory of 'who they are supposed to be' then they'd have that going instead. Furthermore, they are both aware of what is going on, and they will both remember everything once they take the rings off. In a way, it's sort of like they are in a trance right now. If any of those explanations helped change your opinion, let me know so I can actually add that comparison in the chapter.
Author Kaizer Wolf
2025-11-17 02:16:44 +0000 UTCGotta admit, the "different identities" stuff comes off more as unsettling than fun, to me. Amber's "pet name" for men sounds weird, but I'll reserve judgement until I see how she uses it, I guess.
Tejing
2025-11-17 02:07:22 +0000 UTC
