Demon lord ch3 sketch p40-46
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In a bit of a rush so might have missed some points. Format: Original quote ↴ Modified quote with [notes] ↴ Modified quote without notes. Notes shown in [square brackets] Multiple possible modifications shown in {curly brackets / braces} ―――――――――― [Page 40] "Good. You didn't break by just my touch." ↴ “Good, you didn’t break from just my touch.” "Nah, barely a scratch, impressive. And you only half transformed." ↴ “Nay, [As in ‘negative’, or in this context, ‘not only that, but’. ‘Nah’ is an informal dismissal of a previous statement.] barely a scratch. Impressive. And you’re only half transformed.” ↴ “Nay, barely a scratch. Impressive. And you’re only half transformed.” "Show me more of you new power, blade." ↴ “Show me more of your new power, blade.” "Is being a living scarp metal is all you can muster?" ↴ “Is being living scrap metal [‘metal’ is uncountable, drop the ‘a’] all you can muster?” ↴ “Is being living scrap metal all you can muster?” "Get creative you say?" ↴ “Get creative, you say?” "If that's your request..." "How can I refuse!" [It should be noted from a typographical perspective, this reads strangely. Put simply, running one word at a time vertically centred like that is inelegant. I’d recommend: “How can I Refuse”] [Page 41] "Hah! How do you like that." ↴ “Hah! How do you like that?” [While rhetorical and therefore not needing a question mark, the phrasing is significantly more in-line with a query than a statement, so one reads better here.] ↴ “Hah! How do you like that?” "I actally hurt her. Her attack are barely scracth me." ↴ “I actually hurt her. Her attacks are barely scratching me.” "But the more I use this power the faster I transform." ↴ “But the more I use this power, the faster I transform.” "Huh!?" "Why is my arm burning!?" "It's also look different than before!?" ↴ “It also looks different from before!?” "It's look more refine." ↴ “It looks more refined.” "Is it from crossing blade with her?" ↴ “Is it from crossing blades with her?” "It's almost like..." "I'm being hammered into shape." "Just look at my razor sharp fingers." ↴ “Just look ay my razor-sharp fingers.” "Instead of hurting me. Her attack only make me stronger, sharper and finer." ↴ “Instead of hurting me, [Join dependant clause] her attacks are only making me stronger, sharper, finer.” [The omission of ‘and’ makes this punchier.] ↴ “Instead of hurting me, her attacks are only making me stronger, sharper, finer.” [Page 42] "Just look at that pathetic steel she's holding." ↴ “Just look at that pathetic hunk of steel [‘Steel’ is uncountable and needs be qualified when referenced. ‘Hunk of’ is about as basic and degrading.] she’s holding.” ↴ “Just look at that pathetic hunk of steel she’s holding.” "What a fragile trash." ↴ “What fragile trash.” [‘Trash’ is uncountable.] ↴ “What fragile trash.” "It's clear as day. I'm a superior blade." ↴ “It’s clear as day, I’m the superior blade.” "Just you wait O' arrogant queen." ↴ “Just you wait, O [‘O’ is one of few particles in English and is not a contraction nor related to ‘oh’, therefore it does not have a trailing apostrophe.] arrogant queen.” ↴ “Just you wait, O arrogant queen.” "I'll cut you up nice and clean." "Ha! Now this is a fight between a demon!" ↴ “Ha! Now this is a fight between demons!” "Perhap you should start take this more seriously, Demon Queen!" ↴ “Perhaps you should start taking this more seriously, Demon Queen!” [Page 43] "Again." "And again." "My body being fold and shape by her poweful blow." ↴ “My body is being folded and shaped by her powerful blows.” "I'm becoming lighter and sharper." "Still..." "It's impressive what she can do with just a scrapy blade." "She made sure to not push that junk too hard." ↴ “She’s making sure to not push that piece of junk too hard.” "And compensate it with her techniqce." ↴ “And to compensate it with her technique.” [Page 44] "What waste, like a ballerina dancing in a work boots." ↴ “What a waste, like a ballerina dancing in work boots.” "Just imagine whe she can do"↴ “Just imagine what she could do,” "if she wielding me instead!" ↴ “if she wielded me instead!” "Glorious! This duel is the work of art." ↴ “Glorious! This duel is a work of art.” "I've only experince such intense sword play once!" ↴ “I’ve only experienced such intense swordplay once before!” "When I was facing..." "...him." "And it's begin! The final round Holy Sword Selection Tourney!" ↴ “And it’s beginning! The final round of the {Holy / Sacred} [Is it the ‘holy’ or the ‘sacred’?] Sword Selection Tourney!” ↴ “And it’s beginning! The final of the {Holy / Sacred} Sword Selection Tourney!” "Who'll earn the right to wield the Sarced Sword!" ↴ “Who’ll earn the right to wield the {Holy / Sacred} Sword!” "Sir Leo of House Motenzia or the dark horse contender Man at Arm..." ↴ “Sir Leo of House Motenzia, or the dark horse contender, Man at Arm…” [Is that his title?] ↴ “Sir Leo of House Motenzia, or the dark horse contender, Man at Arm…” [Page 45] "Such masterful sword play." ↴ “Such masterful swordplay.” "But my blade have a superior reach!" ↴ “But my blade has a superior reach!” "Victoty is mine!" ↴ “Victory is mine!” "You fall for the same trick again." ↴ “You fell for the same trick again,” "Motenzia brat." "It is you." [Page 46] "I have some fun. You might actually make a good blade afterall." ↴ “I had some fun. You might actually make a good blade after all.” "I'm no match to her neither as human or demon." ↴ “I’m no match to her, neither as human nor demon.” "This is the Demon Lord might." ↴ “This is the Demon Lord’s might.” "An absolute domineering prowress." ↴ “An absolutely domineering prowess.” "And I'm going become her personal arm?" "What is this feeling?" "Just imagine her holding me like that blade make heart pounding." ↴ “Just imagining her holding me like that blade is making my hear pound.” "Ahhh How she will make me sing with her glorious move!" ↴ “Ahhh How she’ll make me sing with her glorious moves!” "I want to be use by her. Slash for her. Cut for her." ↴ “I want to be used by her. Slash for her. Cut for her.” "And she can go all out with me in her hands. This body can endure her prowress." ↴ “And she can go all-out with me in her hands. This body can endure her prowess.” "What better fate for a finest blade such as myself." ↴ “What better fate for the finest blade such as myself.”
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2026-02-19 01:16:40 +0000 UTC@ibenz009 Here are the grammar edits, in UPPERCASE. Punctuation is spaced out. 40 Demon Lord: Good. You didn’t break JUST BY my touch. Nay, barely a scratch . And YOU’RE ONLY PARTIALLY TRANSFIGURED/TRANSLATED. Show me more of YOUR new power, BLADE! Is being a living SCRAP OF METAL all you can muster !? Leo: GET CREATIVE , you say? If that’s your request … how COULD I REFUSE !? 41 Hah! How do you like THAT !? I ACTUALLY hurt her! Her ATTACKS ARE BARELY SCRATCHING/BARELY SCRATCHED me ! But the more I use this power, the faster I transform. Huh!? IT also LOOKS different than before!? IT LOOKS more REFINED. (consider using SMOOTHER as a substitute) Is it from CROSSING BLADES with her? I’m being HAMMERED into shape. Instead of HURTING ME, her ATTACKS only make me stronger, sharper, and MORE REFINED. 42 What FRAGILE TRASH! It’s clear as day I’m a superior blade. Just you WAIT , O’ arrogant queen. Demon Lord: Ha! Now this is a fight BETWEEN DEMONS! Leo: PERHAPS you should start TAKING this more seriously, Demon Queen! 43 Leo: My BODY’S BEING FOLDED AND SHAPED by her POWERFUL BLOWS. Still … It’s impressive what she can do with just a SCRAPPY blade. She made sure to not push that SLAG too hard … and COMPENSATES FOR IT with her TECHNIQUE. 44 What a waste, like a ballerina dancing IN A PAIR OF/IN HUESES/COKERS/SABOTS. Just imagine WHAT she can do IF SHE’S WIELDING/IF SHE WIELDS me instead! Glorious! This duel is A work of art! I ONLY EXPERIENCED such intense swordplay AND IT’S BEGUN! The final round OF THE Holy Sword Selection Tourney! Who’ll earn the right to wield the sacred sword !? Sir Leo of House MORTENZIA or the dark horse contender MAN-AT-ARMS … 45 Leo: Such masterful swordplay. But my blade HAS a superior reach! VICTORY is mine! Demon Lord: You FELL for the same trick again … MORTENZIA BRAT. Leo: IT IS YOU/IT’S YOU. 46 Demon Lord: I HAD some fun. You might actually make a good blade AFTER ALL. Leo: I’m not match to her NEITHER AS A HUMAN or demon. This is the DEMON LORD’S might. An ABSOLUTELY DOMINEERING PROWESS. And I’m going to BECOME her PERSONAL ARM!? What is this FEELING!? Just imagine her holding me like that blade makes MY HEART POUND. I want to be USED by her. This body can endure her PROWESS. What better fate for THE finest blade such as myself?
Arthur Yeung
2026-02-19 00:58:15 +0000 UTCThank you!
ibenz009
2026-02-18 23:33:42 +0000 UTCIt's just her blade mindset begin to take over her. It's still a few more page before she fully corrupted by the blade. She will snap back to Leo for one last time.
ibenz009
2026-02-18 23:33:15 +0000 UTCWell it seam she gave in rather quick to being the qween new blade.
Lore643
2026-02-18 23:23:57 +0000 UTCDefinitely taking an interesting route, excited to see where it leads! My notes this time: page 1: you['ve] only half is being [] living sc[ra]p metal page 2: her attack[s] are barely scra[tching] me. it[] also look[s] different it[] look[s] more refine[d] crossing blade[s] her attack[s] only make me page 3: what [] fragile trash a fight between [] demon[s]! perhap[s] you should start tak[ing] page 4: my body [is] being fold[ed] and shape[d] by her powe[r]ful blow[s]. with just a scrap[p]y blade. and compensate[s] it with her techniq[u]e page 5: what [a] waste, a ballerina dancing in [] work boots. if she wield[ed] me instead! is [a] work of art only experi[e]nce[d] and it's beg[u]n! the final round [of the] holy who'll earn the right to wield the sa[cr]ed sword[?] page 6: my blade [has] superior reach! victo[r]y is mine! you f[e]ll for the same trick again page 7: I['ve had] some fun. You might make a good blade after[ ]all. neither as human [n]or demon an absolute domineering prow[]ess this is the demon lord['s] might just imagin[ing] her with her glorious move[s] I want to be use[d] by her endure her prow[]ess fate for a fine[] blade
Nepisa
2026-02-18 23:15:21 +0000 UTC😈☺️👠😎🥷
Stormfries
2026-02-18 22:53:14 +0000 UTCThe other knights seeing those expressions on her at the end and just like "..."
NekoIncardine
2026-02-18 22:16:51 +0000 UTC
