Demon lord: Latex demon P21-25
Added 2025-02-22 21:12:53 +0000 UTCI'm so sorry again for very late update. I made a mistake of start playing Metaphor refantazio and got myself addicted and also got vertigo for a few day. Anyway manage to finished 5 pages this month. As always if you find any mistake please tell me in the comment.
Also Thank you again for this month support!
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Incredible! Masterpiece!
Emile Vander Sijpe
2025-04-15 12:05:42 +0000 UTCFormat: Original quote ↴ Modified quote with [notes] ↴ Modified quote without notes. Notes shown in [square brackets] Multiple possible modifications shown in {curly brackets / braces} ―――――――――― [Page 21] "This is your doing isn't it, creature!? I...I would never do anything shameful such as this!" ↴ “This is your doing, isn’t it, creature!? I…I would never do anything as shameful as this!” "Oh my my, I may give yor a demon body but all of those fun action you did earlier. It's was all your my dear." ↴ “My, my. I may have given you [Past tense] a demon body, but all that fun action you did earlier? That was all you, my dear.” ↴ “My, my. I may have given you a demon body, but all that fun action you did earlier? That was all you, my dear.” "What if I told you." ↴ “What if I told you…” "What you had just eaten was but a fraction of that human energy. After all most of it came to me." ↴ “…What you had just eaten was but a fraction of that human’s energy. After all, most of it went to me.” "Do like it, dear? This is a full magical energy distilled from that human." ↴ “Do you like it, dear? That is [‘energy’ is uncountable; no ‘a’] pure [‘full’ doesn’t seem right here] magical energy, distilled from that human.” ↴ “Do you like it, dear? That is pure magical energy, distilled from that human.” "Cooked and inject direcly into your lovely mana body. A night and day from that's bland raw energy doesn't it?" ↴ “Cooked and injected [Past tense] directly into your lovely mana body. Night and day [‘night and day’ is uncountable] from that bland raw energy, isn’t it?” ↴ “Cooked and injected directly into your lovely mana body. Night and day from that bland raw energy, isn’t it?” [Page 22] "Ah,ah, stop! If any more waves coming I...I..." ↴ “Ah, ah, stop! If there are any more waves coming, I…I…” "My body are being pump full of this delicious energy"↴ “My body is being pumped full of this delicious energy.” "Ekk! I can feel my expanding mana body push again my leather shell!" ↴ “Eek! I can feel my mana body expanding, [Shift verb to make the sentence read better] pushing against my leather skin [‘shell’ is odd choice of words. ‘skin’ feels like it’d fit better]!” ↴ “Eek! I can feel my mana body expanding, pushing against my leather skin!” "No more! If I keep experience this. I...I won't be able to go back being a man." ↴ “No more! If I keep experiencing this, I…I won’t be able to go back to being a man.” [Page 23] "After experience a true demon ecstasy." ↴ “After experiencing a true demon ecstasy…” "How can I go back being "that"?"↴ “…How can I go back to being “that”?” [Page 25] "These lovely knight's hearts are belong to me now." ↴ “These lovely knights’ [Apostrophes are strange. In this case, you wanted the plural (the knights) possessive (belonging to them); because ‘knights’ already ends in an ‘s’, the apostrophe is not followed by another ‘s’. So, ‘knights’’.]” hearts belong to me now.” ↴ “These lovely knights’ hearts belong to me now.”
trigger_portal_cleanser
2025-02-23 01:14:56 +0000 UTCI was looking forward to the update!
fatcat
2025-02-22 21:53:01 +0000 UTCIh this is beautiful, the final look, the design and the details, definately one of your best works
Doppelganger
2025-02-22 21:22:12 +0000 UTCGod Fang turned out so amazing and hot ^^
StarGazer
2025-02-22 21:14:56 +0000 UTC
