Miko spider corruption p3-4
Added 2022-09-28 22:14:15 +0000 UTCOk another draft done.
As always if you have any suggestion or found any grammar mistake feel free to tell me in the comment.
Comments
Thanks and thank you for grammar edited.
ibenz009
2022-10-05 22:35:48 +0000 UTCBut fantastic as usual
ElSalsaRey
2022-09-28 23:48:17 +0000 UTCPage 1 Panel 1: "Taint of mortality" Panel 2: "Taint" Panel 3: "Embarrass" Panel 4: "I'll teach you how a proper priestess should behave" Panel 5: "...screamed...a cockroach (not the)..."she must really BE out of her mind..." Page 2 Panel 3: "I am no longer THE Mikoto you know." Panel 4: "I am Yame-Hime, Avatar of THE Goddess who rule this mountain. Hmmm...where are your manners, mortal? Kneel, as a goddess stands before you." (eliminate "A" in front of "Avatar" or replace it with "An" or "The") Those are my grammatical thoughts.
ElSalsaRey
2022-09-28 23:48:05 +0000 UTCOh awesome stuff! Now to deal with her companion ^^
Arbiter
2022-09-28 23:07:57 +0000 UTCPure *from*, but otherwise yep
Dealer
2022-09-28 22:46:21 +0000 UTClove you ibenz!
Wayne Chen
2022-09-28 22:27:59 +0000 UTCOh some very lovely work. Did find some grammar problems with the last sentence. You wrote "Kneel, as goddess stand before you." A better way to write that would be "Kneel, as a goddess stands before you."
Violet Wilk (BlueCherryWolf)
2022-09-28 22:25:37 +0000 UTCNot 100% but think the top middle panel should go like this. A divine vessel 'needs' to be pure form any mortal 'taint'
Stephen Bordley
2022-09-28 22:23:53 +0000 UTC@ibenz009 Will the bodyguard be corrupted too?
Arthur Yeung
2022-09-28 22:17:45 +0000 UTCWow she looks amazing already!
StarGazer
2022-09-28 22:17:30 +0000 UTC
