Liliraune comic page 1-2
Added 2020-06-30 21:54:30 +0000 UTCHere it's is the first two complete color page!
If you found any error feel free to tell men in the comment.
Comments
Looking great!
Roxanne Giling
2020-07-01 16:00:52 +0000 UTCI try aqua blue and she look too much like rei ayanami.
ibenz009
2020-07-01 08:58:10 +0000 UTC1.1 - 1.2 {There should be a comma or probably a semicolon after their names, and their trades should be written as "Apprentice Blacksmith" or "Blacksmith's Apprentice"} 1.1.2 [Dumb as a Rock / Subtle as a Hammer Blow] 1.2.1 Ms Gorilla => Ms. Gorilla 1.3.3 years => year's 1.4.4 jackpot => mark 2.1.1 ... You stole my idea and are trying to sabotage me! 2.1.2 ... By working together, we can increase our chances of finding the nectar, yes? 2.4.1 this was => this is
Asani
2020-07-01 05:59:49 +0000 UTCGoing all in on the anime faces was definitely the right call for this comic. I drink that milkshake, and then keep on slurping to get the last little tasty bits at the bottom of the cup. Page 2 especially, Lucia hanging there like a dead fish is the tits! Here’s what I spotted:
Asani
2020-07-01 05:59:37 +0000 UTCPage 1, box 1, “dumb as rock” to either “dumb as a rock” or “dumb as rocks” take your pick
Nathaniel Merrill
2020-07-01 05:30:50 +0000 UTC:stoic Vorlon agreement:
Asani
2020-07-01 04:18:55 +0000 UTCGTFO in big letters both are pretty dumb
D Banks
2020-07-01 00:02:22 +0000 UTCI agree with the other comments the colors look very nice keep up the awesome work
seth neumann
2020-06-30 22:17:54 +0000 UTCThe colours look wonderful! I look forward to when more comes in due course :)
Arbiter
2020-06-30 22:07:52 +0000 UTCVery nice. I like the full design
ElSalsaRey
2020-06-30 22:05:00 +0000 UTCSo it begins!
StarGazer
2020-06-30 22:02:35 +0000 UTCOh I wasn't expecting Lucia to be a red hair at all, I thought she would be a brunette, since the plain look works well for a cold character
M1yago
2020-06-30 21:58:33 +0000 UTClooks nice and clean
Victor
2020-06-30 21:55:34 +0000 UTC
