Demon lord comic page 12
Added 2020-03-29 13:14:59 +0000 UTCPage 12 is here! Hope everyone stay safe and healthy. We live in intersting time people.
If you found any error or have a suggestion for dialouge feel free to tell me in the comment.
Comments
"I'll cut out your tongue" is really more of a stylistic thing. "I'll cut your tongue out" makes her sound like she's calm and lecturing as to what's going to happen, rather than threatening or angry.
2020-03-29 23:15:55 +0000 UTC“I’ll cut out your tongue.” is a more aggressive and correct phrasing. Could end the first panel with, “[...] How futile. Hehehe” or “Such futility. Hahaha”
Asani
2020-03-29 15:48:43 +0000 UTCTypos in the dialogue that I noticed (corrections in bold): Panel #1 (top-left): "It's a Demon Seed<b>. Looks</b> like your Holy Armor <b>is</b> trying to fight it. [...]" Panel #5 (Bottom-left): "[...] Next time you talk<b>,</b> I'll cut your <b>tongue</b> out."
Benjamin Lawton
2020-03-29 14:43:08 +0000 UTCi looove it
Stormfries
2020-03-29 14:37:11 +0000 UTCI take it the armor kind of solidifies and keeps him immobile in that state?
RickyPon
2020-03-29 14:18:28 +0000 UTCWell damn so much for Holy armor guess he should not have gone in without a helmet
D Banks
2020-03-29 14:08:00 +0000 UTCIt’s looking amazing. Love the combination of white and gold.
StarGazer
2020-03-29 13:17:12 +0000 UTC
