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Demon lord comic page 12

Page 12 is here! Hope everyone stay safe and healthy. We live in intersting time people.

If you found any error or have a suggestion for dialouge feel free to tell me in the comment.

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Comments

"I'll cut out your tongue" is really more of a stylistic thing. "I'll cut your tongue out" makes her sound like she's calm and lecturing as to what's going to happen, rather than threatening or angry.

“I’ll cut out your tongue.” is a more aggressive and correct phrasing. Could end the first panel with, “[...] How futile. Hehehe” or “Such futility. Hahaha”

Asani

Typos in the dialogue that I noticed (corrections in bold): Panel #1 (top-left): "It's a Demon Seed<b>. Looks</b> like your Holy Armor <b>is</b> trying to fight it. [...]" Panel #5 (Bottom-left): "[...] Next time you talk<b>,</b> I'll cut your <b>tongue</b> out."

Benjamin Lawton

i looove it

Stormfries

I take it the armor kind of solidifies and keeps him immobile in that state?

RickyPon

Well damn so much for Holy armor guess he should not have gone in without a helmet

D Banks

It’s looking amazing. Love the combination of white and gold.

StarGazer


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