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5.23 G

Taking a break until next week. (16,100 Words)


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http://wanderinginn.com/2018/09/22/5-23-g

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Great writing. War is hell. I am no fan of this Emperor who was subjected to discrimination as a blind man, he wasn't blind to half-Troll love of his life but then he unequivocally accepts this medieval specism / racism of goblins. This chapter truly exemplifies the ends justify the means. Killing women and child, this emperor should be tried for War crimes. There is no border signs. To preempt do such an act, this POS is no better than the humans living in that world. Get some rest, I look forward to the next chapter. Hopefully on Erin.

It's Tuesday. So sad.

Lhans

when will his class change to [tyrant]

WANDERING LOST

I think he ‘sees’ using the totems. The one with the eye on the pyramid.

Parker Groseclose

Wouldn't that city have been outside of Laken's view if it wasn't in his empire?

John Koor

I like it when characters we like and think of as good do bad things, laken commits a war crime and in response rags attacks civilians. dark asf. Feels very world war 1-ish.

derp

You should really just make it a habit of taking a few weeks off every time you finish a major story arc. Then, while you are off, try to write a few advance chapters and then during periods of time where you aren't feeling up to writing you can still have something to post. I think that would help with the work flow and motivation. TWI is an amazing story and a ridiculous word count for each release. Maintaining that will probably get harder and harder.

John Koor

Amazing. Go, get rest. It always impresses me how much you write on a consistent basis. These last few chapters have been amazing (if sad) and I can see why it'd be so draining.

Tao Wong

rags is a puppet leader to whom? imo shes just lost and angry and trying to go home. and garen is too badass to be golum lol.

derp

I can’t summon an iota of interest for Rag’s group of goblins or Garen’s group of goblins. Rag’s basically doesn’t have her own motivations, she’s just a puppet leader, and Garen is just Gollum from LOTR. Every page about them is a waste of space. The amount of space I want to see from them is “there is a goblin tribe occupying space over there” and “A goblin died messily because of hubris” then we can move on.

Oliver

Wow that was tough, good but tough.

Will

This chapter is definitely the most conflicting one I've read so far. When you build multiple perspectives like you do in the story and they end up clashing together, but you understand that there's no clear cut good and evil, it just leaves a depressing taste in the mouth. Whoever wins in this conflict both sides are coming out damaged and worse for wear.

Thank you!

Andrew


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