2.22
Added 2017-05-17 00:13:06 +0000 UTCHmm. This is why I don't like fight scenes. Is this chapter too confusing? Perhaps. We'll see in the comments. (10,300 Words)
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Comments
I like the continued joke of Olesm being involved in something probably really important but being brushed away due to more present and pressing events.
2017-05-19 05:30:44 +0000 UTCI have no idea what's happening. I've been tired and out of focus when writing--maybe that's the key? Or maybe I'm just getting better? Glad you like it!
pirateaba
2017-05-19 01:32:55 +0000 UTCNot confusing at all, but I heard it instead of reading it so I'm not sure If that makes a difference as hearing is quite slower than reading. On a second note: Your chapters feel somehow more complete lately. Its like when I'm through I don't "need" to know what happens next instead I can just enjoy it and start doing other things, knowing that the next chapter will be available soon enough. Ps.: Thanks for the word count
2017-05-18 22:54:28 +0000 UTCOnce again, mindset. She's not going out hunting for trouble and she fought with her fists -- not weapons. If anything, she might earn a type of protector/defender class or a brawler one...if she was thinking in those terms. Erin's an innkeeper though, and to her, this is just defending her inn.
pirateaba
2017-05-17 22:15:04 +0000 UTCWell written, and able to follow! It definitely "worked". My only question is: she has a warrior class, right? Why didn't that class level? I know they weren't "trying" to kill her, but still a pretty brutal brawl.
Dustin S.
2017-05-17 14:40:21 +0000 UTCUr a pro mvp.
EitherWay
2017-05-17 05:41:28 +0000 UTC
