[Insider] Toxic Attraction Chapter 25 alpha

Imagine if you will Lester and Dan both getting cameras into Sarah and Dan's house, un-aware of the other's cameras. And Jessie comes sniffing around while Dan and Lester are both in Chicago. Both trying to ring Sarah to distract her and intercept the inevitable.

Waratah David

I can't wait for Lester to get Sarah pregnant. I also want Sarah to declare her love for Lester. Dan doesn't deserve Sarah anymore.

Timothy Whittaker

Any word on discord ?

KB

I suppose I meant that her actions make her feelings clear, but we can agree to disagree, it's allowed.

MV

I suppose it depends on what side you are in this story. The path i’m seeing this story go down, I doubt it’ll end up with Sarah thinking about her family and then stopping her relationship with Lester. It just doesn’t make sense based on the character development so far. I also don’t agree that Sarah’s thoughts on Lester have been made clear. We’ve had some inkling of her thoughts here and there but I haven’t seen a single paragraph I could call concrete

Jackfrost

With all due respect, it's not Sarah's thoughts on Lester we need to hear. They've been made clear. What we need to hear are her thoughts on the damage she might ultimately do to Dan, her daughters, and her parents, if she continues down this path of destruction. We haven't heard her once think about consequences in 25 chapters, as far as I recall.

MV

This chapter feels very light on the Sarah and Lester action. There’s only one scene here and they literally spent a night at a hotel together. I’d very much like to see sarah’s internal thoughts about lester. How does she feel about him now? Does she long for him?

Jackfrost

💯

MV

I would like to see Dan wrestle some control back away from Lester but involve Sarah in more corruption. Maybe have Sarah "help" with the new clients or "persuade" a new landlord for a different place

b g

Specifically: 1. if Sarah was not wearing Lester's engagement ring during the work week, then Lester could ask her to put it on when they start sexting each other on Friday night while Sarah is home with the girls. Then, Lester could ask Sarah to take some selfies that highlight her engagement ring as she poses for the selfies. 2. This could lead to Sarah having an inner monologue about what Lester actually said and what she was thinking when Lester proposed during the dinner in Chicago. As stated by many others, this could include Sarah reflecting on how manly Lester is and how pathetic Dan is for allowing this to happen. (Regardless of where it comes in the chapter, would love to read more about what Lester and Sarah actually said and what they were thinking during the public "proposal" scene). 3. Definitely agree that there should be more "imprinting" of Lester getting Sarah to say "I love you" and to get Sarah to say that she wants Lester to make her pregnant with a baby boy. This could be an additional scene playing out in the morning at the hotel or as an additional scene back in the apartment in lester's bedroom and/or in the final scene on the futon. ... just my own "wish list".

sp

Similar to Jas D's comments, it would be great to hear more of Sarah's inner monologue as well as more dialogue between Sarah and Lester, especially during the final sex scene. Specifically:

sp

I think Jesse is key to taking down Lester...Now how this p.ays out depends on Don...I still feel Lizzie could play a role here also...She warned both Dan and Sarah in Chapter 5 before leaving the Apt..Issac out of the he picture because of Lester...Revenge minded Lizzie helps..falls for Jesse..Jesse fal.s for Lizzie..After dark, times Dan rec.laims his wife....Lester falls...

Mike Kogel

I'd be very surprised if we don't see more Jesse/Sarah action.

MV

It would be nice to know what happened between Lester and Jesse at the end of the night. Was Jesse pushing for more contact with Sarah? Was he gone when she awoke? Perhaps Lester’s thoughts on Jesse and whether he might use him or not in future. Also, Jesse’s thought process. Weasel or not, he certainly wont give up in his pursuit of Sarah, especially after enjoying her fully.

Royston smith

That is great to hear. I was going to comment Sarah and Lester have yet to discuss the ring and Lester’s proposal especially when she is married

Charlie_Chuckles

As has been mentioned, the engagement ring needs further discussion. Would love to see in Dan’s haste to get her out of the apartment, he packs her things and forgets to pick up her rings from the dresser. When Sara is talking to HR person about her reassignment, she says “congratulations!” Pointing at her new diamond and Sara just blushes and says“thank you!” Also, the futon scene needs to expand and include more talk of Sara submitting, including the BC being put aside. Lester being more assertive and trying to convince Sarah that it would prove just how pathetic Dan has become and that he is now the Alpha in her life. Overall, great chapter, looking forward to final version…

Dodge1109

Crickets ref NE and TC. I will say that TA25 had a lot of grammar and spelling errors…more than typical even for a draft. I doubt we will see another chapter of either of those stories prior to January at the earliest.

J Lewis

Any word on NE 4 on discord?

KB

Thank you

Bob James

NLT Dec 31 for sure

J Lewis

Do you know when the final version will be released?

Bob James

I'm not one that wants to see a baby come into the story, but I agree on the BC issue. It would seem to me to be more consistent with his control of her to get her to agree to stop taking it. After all, it's her who says she can't say no to him, isn't it? Lester would surely test that?🤔

MV

I agree 💯. I know this is a fantasy, but it's a fantasy based in the real world. I certainly feel that Sarah's reaction to events didn't fit in with the normal clear-thinking Sarah. This is why I worry about the story being unconvincing at times. Some people are so wrapped-up in wanting to see Lester conquer Sarah and Dan that they don't seem to see inconsistencies in other aspects of the story. I hope Don doesn't lose sight of keeping things as believable as possible.

MV

According to Grandeman on Discord the ring will be a bigger part of the 25 Final.

J Lewis

I loved to read Sarah being so dominant with Jesse even suddenly commanding him to pull out while she is submissive with Lester in the same chapter, spreading her legs wide open on his command Hope this is further developed

ojapa O

Suggestion for the final version: Loved the chapter, just felt there could have been a little more in two areas: 1. More certainty for Dan in some of the information he learned about Lester. For all his drunken musings it seems he didn't really come up with much given how much was written about it his search. Some of us are pulling for Dan, so this was a let-down. Ned's store visit was ok, but not much came from it. It seems the Lizzy search could have revealed a bit more. There was a lot of great realizations at the end of 24 but I felt let down at the scarcity of how far Dan progressed when reading 25. 2. If one's spouse gets arrested and jailed, wouldn't that be pretty shocking? And when learning of some of the inconsistencies of what you thought versus what your spouse filled in, wouldn't that be alarming? I didn't get the sense that Sarah was surprised or shocked or even worried or alarmed at any of this. Maybe that's by design, but it didn't hit me right. I do want to say, at the end of the chapter, hearing "Dad?" really gutted me. Wow.

Sigma

We definitely need more info on the ring/engagement status. Did she wear it to work?

Robert Smith

Others have given feedback that covers many of my thoughts (Jas D in particular). The only additions I would add are: We still didn't get a scene that really offered a payoff regarding the engagement. Some nice dirty talk (even in the sexting or basement scene, would be great). Or, just what happened regarding the rings? Did she keep it? Did she hand it back to Lester? Regarding the BC, Lester seems to be uncertain if he wants to convince her to stop it, or actively sabotaging it. It seems, at the end he chooses the later. That's certainly not beyond Lester, but it might be good to state why he chose that? He's been actively pushing Sarah to this point and with some success. As her submission to him would certainly be a greater prize, why doesn't he pursue this? Is it a speed thing? Does he think it will make it easier to convince her? Or just hope that once it's a fait accompli, she will side with him? That just seems an unnecessary risk. So, understanding his thoughts might help?

YouTensil

Good point. Realistically if there is such a thing in this story, Dan should have reminded her to put his back on in the car before she drove away. Maybe after she gets home she puts Lester’s back on cause it makes her feel right.

J Lewis

I thought there would be some dialogue about the wedding ring from Lester. She would have still been wearing when she got back to the apartment the next morning.

Todd

To save their marriage Sarah demands that Dan has to agree to let Jessie to become her lover.

Timothy Whittaker

Agreed, Gee.

Royston smith

I want to see Sarah having Lester baby but I want Dan to win out in the end. Sarah and Dan staying together but Dan has to agree to accept Lester baby.

Timothy Whittaker

Completely agree with your ideas Robert

Gee

Lester will replace the BC pills in that bottle with fertility pills that look exactly the same Or Add a prescription formulae to Sarah’s wine bottle that neutralises her BC pills

Gee

Agreed Royston I love to read an expanded storyline of Jesse and Lester taking Sarah throughout the night. The dirty degrading sex talk that the men heap on Sarah as she orgasms, with Sarah revelling in her submission and pleasure that it brings

Gee

I think we need Sarah to agree, in the final sex scene, not only that Dan is pathetic and weak, but also that she will deny him sex because of that. That would really dial up her final orgasm.

Royston smith

Dan already has a vasectomy

Chris K

This is in point. Brilliant.

Bob James

Jas D

Still feel 1st time. Anal is as Lexter told Dan...saving for private moment...either he does it in the apartment with expanded shower scene...Sarah did tell Lester she couldn't walk for a week...or expanded basement scene...since Dan hasn't hit it and it's been implied she's never done it.. Lester completes the deed and tells Sarah her ass forever belongs to him...Dan reclaiming his family gets that much harder

Mike Kogel

Definitely hanging in there for a while but do hope that the chapters add that little extra we are used to seeing in previous chapters.

OdieK

Tim, you made me laugh! I am Don. That’s why I so heavily criticised DL as “writing by numbers” and NE as “not a patch on TA”. My point simply was, if you think this story is “a piece of shit”, why are you wasting your money by reading it? However, if you wish to continue to do so, that is fine too. I apologise if I upset you.

Royston smith

Wow Charlie! You have some imagination my friend.

Royston smith

Don’t give up on this chapter Odie. If we give the right feedback it could be improved..

Royston smith

I really didn’t want the kids involved, but I can kind of see why they might be. As Sarah becomes more and more desirous of kinky sexual situations, as the pleasure centres of her brain increasingly respond to Lester’s sexual manipulations, she is careering out of control. You don’t make good decisions, when you are addicted to anything, whether it is drugs or sex. Sarah is now blurring her fantasy world with her “safe” world. She thinks she can maintain a distance, a wall between them, but you can’t. Sooner or later worlds collide and shit happens.

Royston smith

So, in this passage at the beginning of the chapter lies the perfect opportunity for Don to expand on what happened during the night in terms of Sarah’s 2dick adventures:”…things were blurry. All she knew was that she had lost track of how many times she had been fucked over the last few hours. Just the stray recollection of the night’s events gave her goosebumps”. A great opportunity for Don to add a dp scene using the device of Sarah’s memory.

Royston smith

It's a thought

Mike Kogel

Agreed, KB. Although there was a hint in the last chapter that Sarah would be open to a Lesbian encounter when she enters the hotel room.

Royston smith

With regard to the bc pills, I disagree with those who want Lester to persuade S to stop using them. It fits with Lester’s devious manoeuvrings to have him trick her, just as he has done through out the story in various ways. The most obvious example in this chapter, was him “saving” her job, when we all know he put it in jeopardy in the first place, by hacking the hospital.

Royston smith

I don’t think she’ll ever come back into the story

KB

Have a option to bring back Lizzie for a dominating 3 way...end up Lester let's Sarah ride as Lizzie plows her ass with vibrating dido..Sarah at this point is completely Lester's and Dan's real fight for his family begins

Mike Kogel

I agree that him tricking her into it would be less fulfilling to read. It would still be hot to have him convince her to keep the baby after she is tricked and impregnated.

Robert Smith

It is interesting to read the varying reviews of 25. If I could add one element it is that readers are looking for at least one extra special moment when everything comes together in the storyline that adds a high level of excitement. I am certain that everyone can identify a few chapters of where that happened. We then look forward to a repeat of that excitement level letting Don lead us to certain often unexpected moments that have us standing back and saying "Wow!!!" Unfortunately for me (and for some others) that didn't happen with 25 but I suspect that Don will find a way to inject the next chapter or two with that level. It is for that reason why I have decided to stick around. I encourage those who have taken a hard stand to call it quits to give Don an opportunity to reignite our passion for this amazing story. I ammconfident he won't let us down. Marry Christmas every one!!!

OdieK

I am curious about that as well. I think the story loses punch if he tricks her into getting pregnant rather than her doing it willingly.

Bob James

Would've been nice to see the 'I love you', after she called Dan weak and pathetic.

Chris K

I loved him crossing the lines and just showing up like that and not giving a fuck. Hes going to keep showing up while the girls are home and fucking her silly in the basement. And lying to Dan or keeping it from him

KB

I wonder how many more chapters before Lester impregnates Sarah with his child? Dan could align himself f with a bad element in his haste to rid Lester in the next couple of chapters. Dan would implicate Lester based on “evidence” he collected. Unfortunately for Dan who is not well versed on the dark web, Lester has anticipated this move and left digital crumbs pointing to Dan as the culprit. The bad element like TLG or Sentinel might not like to be lied to and take revenge by killing Dan and his family. Sarah escapes being killed as she is on vacation with having a “honeymoon” During the investigation all evidence points to Dan as the hacker and exposes the antics of TLG. Lester needs to go dark to avoid being investigated and wants Sarah to go with him. Lester assures Sarah he was not involved in the original hacks and reminds Sarah he was always there for her by protecting and providing for her. Sarah accepts this lie from Lester as she is afraid of losing him. Now without a family Sarah starts another “family” with him and becomes his partner in crime to corrupt future couples

Charlie_Chuckles

No dp...Lester needs to do that first..alone with Sarah....maybe that shower. Then power fuck Sarah in Lester s bed which melts her Brain then pops her anal cherry..AS they finish Dan arrives to late to see and hallway plays out

Mike Kogel

I know Lester likes to drilling keywords and hints into Sarah like Dan is weak and pathetic until they become part of her mindset. Why has DS and Lester abandoned making Sarah say the words “I LOVE YOU” until it becomes natural to her. It’s been quite a while since those words were uttered.

Charlie_Chuckles

It’s irritating no mention was made if Sarah is still wearing Lester’s ring. I don’t know if possibly the HR lady noticed the ring change because she did smirk like she knew. And women notice those small things

Charlie_Chuckles

Lester shows up after girls to school but before Sarah ready for work....takes her. Upstairs for all day fuck and in the process...take Sarah anally....which causes more control to fall to Lester

Mike Kogel

After re-reading yet again, I would love to see the arrival home to the apartment scene expanded. Would love to see a shower scene added where Lester washes Sarah clean of the previous night and then finishes coercing her into one last go in his bed. Dan would arrive as Sarah and Lester are coming together and he hurries to the peep hole but misses the finish. the scene plays out as written afterwards.

Robert Smith

I think she thought internally about her 'longing' for Lester in 22, but again, that was physical longing, imo. As far I'm concerned, 24 was the first time she thought 'affectionately' about him. If others think I'm wrong, that's fine, I'll have to live with it. We all see the story from different angles, and probably want slightly different endings from it. As good a writer as DS is, it will be a Herculean task to please everyone. Maybe he won't even try.

MV

I now disagree with you mv. I think we have gradually heard her inner voice in these last few chapters and we ca see by her reactions that she is intoxicated with Lester sexually , is fond of him emotionally and is impressed by his strength and ruthlessness. She also thinks he has a caring side due to him “saving”her job. I also think her “craving” of Lester is more than just sexual. Even when she was being fucked by Jesse, note she wanted to know where Lester was and craved his attention. As for fucking Otis and Richard, I don’t think Richard will happen. Lester wouldn’t want it due to the power differential in Richard’s favour. He would only allow it with someone he can control like Otis. As for the Dan/Sarah dynamic I am surprised Dan wasn’t angrier with Sarah over Jesse. However, Sarah did expertly guide the conversation by playing into the “you weren’t there to protect me”and bad girl tropes.Dan also seemed to be preoccupied with Proving to Sarah that Lester was up to something.

Royston smith

Or maybe Royston,you and Don have a special relationship.

Tim

I'm intrigued Royston Smith as to why you're getting so worked-up for. I think you're Don under the guise of Royston. Y

Tim

He will get a mock bottle made up with the same branding as her bc pills but with dud pills inside.

Royston smith

Well, it looks like the point of no return has been reached. Dan, as he “investigates”, will get more and more in control, while Sarah, under pressure from Lester, will slip more and more into the abyss of corruption. At this point I see the climax where Dan gives her a completely serious ultimatum, forcing her to choose between Lester and him during some kind of hot scene, and Sarah by the current logic of events should at this point send Dan the fuck away. I don't see a happy ending here (though for Lester's fan club it is a happy ending probably)

Daniel

Some good points. Obviously, as someone who wants Dan to get a grip and end up in a good place on the other side, I'm hoping that in the long run, he shocks both of them and shows them he's not pathetic at all (even though I've admitted several times that he's been a fool many times in this story because he'd underestimated Lester).

MV

I think, Bob, that your 1 was covered in the current text. She blocks out what Jesse is saying to her by thinking about Lester. You’re 2 I agree with. 3, again agree. 4,ok. 5, sorry really don’t like it. Lester wouldn’t want it either. He wants to exclude not include Dan.

Royston smith

Good point, well made Chris.

Royston smith

Or you could put an end to it by leaving. Unless you are a masochist , of course.

Royston smith

Although I liked this chapter overall, I just have a sneaking feeling something is missing to make it a great chapter, as befits a 25th chapter,(surely a milestone) that ends the year. Should we not have more of the night of Sarah being drilled by 2cocks? It feels like we were short changed somewhat. Surely a DP scene could have been added? Sarah mentions that she would have liked it herself, so why not add it in? I liked that Sarah got turned on by Jesse’s admission of sleeping next to her in the Minnesota hotel room whilst Dan was absent. Surely this could be developed more. Similarly, Sarah getting turned on by Lester’s portrayal of Dan as weak and pathetic was good. The rewiring of her brain is nearly complete now. Again, I think this could be developed more.

Royston smith

What is Lester’s plan with the pictures of her birth control medication? Make duplicate fake packs for her?

Robert Smith

Please,please put an end to this miserable piece of shit story.Put it to bed forever,please.

Tim

Couple of minor ideas. 1. When we learn that Lester video'd the Jessie/Sarah morning session there could be hinted that Lester will add that to the collection of videos of the night before's adventures. (The blind fold removal, Jessie reveal, the discussion on whether Jessie would cum inside her etc). And 2. The text exchange before the futon adventure could have Sarah showing a lot more via text (full nude, pussy, but of reluctant teasing ("Oh Lester you're terrible, if I show you this can I go to sleep? Promise? Okay, what do you want to see? Of course we know Lester is close by and his promises mean nothing.

Waratah David

Now that Sarah works with Lester, we need that crossover event where a meeting is scheduled with Clara and both ladies have their first FFM threesome with daddy.

Dingdonger

I know the story is fiction and fantasy, but I don't see a real world market for fake birth control pills. IRL a guy like Lester would have gotten himself fixed, so he doesn't have to worry about child support.

Dingdonger

A detail missing from this chapter was the ring. Is she still wearing it a week later?

Chris K

This was pretty epic. I was worried at the start that Jesse was going to be a player but this was an awesome xmas present to me. I so think bob james had some good ideas. I'm glad the story went here and I hope even if it doesn't end it stay here that we at least get a few chapters of Sarah enjoying in the guilty pleasures of life. Cheating tends to be the most intense at the start so this fire should burn pretty hot for a little while.

Deprivedone

I like it. But I think it needs to be in this chapter to keep the theme going.

Bob James

I think maybe an extra scene of her seeing dan texting or calling and her mind goes back to pathetic, or weak would also be a small addition, but could also work in a later chapter i suppose.

Super Mecha Godzilla Herpes

After reading this again, I think there could be some minor tweaking that could make this pop. 1. During the initial Jesse scene, when he confesses his love for her, she could have some internal monologue thinking of Lester and then perhaps she indicates she doesn't want him to cum in her again as it's a betrayal to Lester. 2. When she is flirting with Lester via text, I think the talk could be prolonged slightly. Maybe some light ridiculing of Dan. 3. I'd like to see the ring that Lester gave her return in some way...maybe Sarah could wear it to work and Mary notices it. 4. I enjoyed the final sex scene and it does provide a significant shift in Sarah's perspectives. This scene could perhaps be enhanced by love and pregnancy talk. I think perhaps if she could get Lester to cum on her hand whilst wearing the ring Dan gave her and preserving the bigger better ring, the symbolism would be intense. 5. Finally maybe a signpost to what we could expect next. This is purely my suggestion in terms of where the story arc is going, but maybe Lester plants the idea of a Dan, Sarah and Lester threesome. Only for Dan to fall terribly short...clearly as this is being set up Sarah is off birth control and both of them start with protection...but there is only one winner per se.

Bob James

I’m curious what Lester can even do with her birth control information to be honest. It’s getting hot that she allowed him into the home and fucked in their basement.

KB

I liked the scene at the start with Jesse. It's clear that she can have hot sex with him. She now has options, not just Lester, which is a better situation, imo. I'm still not happy with the transformation in her. Because Don has insisted on not letting us hear her inner monologue, I feel its made the transformation feel unrealistic. Even as late as CH. 23, we had no definitive proof that she'd developed feelings of affection for Lester. Suddenly, in CH. 24, she had. Not realistic. Don should really have started showing her feelings changing earlier. Several people have said Don doesn't want the girls dragged into the story, but the last scene came very close to that. The final scene with Lester didn't do a lot for me, personally. The sex between L&S isn't as hot as it used to be (just my opinion). I'm hoping scenarios come up where she gets to fuck Jesse, Richard, Otis. More than anything, imo, the story needs to move on to the stage where D&S are having *actual* confrontations, if a split is where we're headed. I hope Don isn't going to put these confrontations off forever. I still hope D&S make it through to the other side as a couple, however rough the route is to get there.

MV

I’m actually leaning to Elfy’s view this time but will hang in there a bit longer to see how things develop. Any news on tainted conception?

OdieK

Good job. Looking forward to more of Sarah getting tucked. The last scene was really hot. Merry Christmas.

John Lewis

Predictable with the usual pushing of the envelope sex scene. I so don't care anymore. This story used to be arousing. It's now obvious and boring. Bye.

Elfy

I like the new development that Lester is now Sarah's new boss and she even believes he stood up for her out of good nature...here's a point that I would have liked to have seen more developed. Sarah really believes Lester stood up for her selflessly, she could have developed more warm feelings for Lester here...I was glad that the topic of contraception was finally pushed forward - I'm excited to see how it continues here - although it would have been hotter if Lester had persuaded Sarah to stop using contraception...but that's just a small note...I'm looking forward to the next chapter and Merry Christmas

JPaxx

Amazing. I think Sarah saying the L bomb or asking to be impregnated in the final scene would give this that additional spice.

Bob James