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Breaking The Halloween Curse - Chapter One

The first chapter of a new Commission, Harry/Hermione/Multi has been posted to the drive https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1bUtcS1-5YaMnWh48vhawsgY5PvcM-M6G?usp=sharing

A few years after graduation, Harry is a star quidditch player with the Durham Dogstars, and at the end of a busy season, he just wants to relax with his girlfriend. Of course, it's Halloween, so things don't go as planned, but for once he isn't complaining GRIN

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Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it

Red Jacobson

Thanks, glad you enjoyed it. The Chudley thing was a goof, I didn't mention, or I thought I had, mentioned that he had changed and put on an old souvenir jersey, (probably a present from Ron). And the repeated line is what happens when I edit on a second doc and paste the changes. Oops!

Red Jacobson

Whoa...now THAT is the way you hit the ground running with a story! Bravo, good sir, bravo! Couple of quick editing/continuity quibbles, though...Harry's written as wearing Chudley Cannons kit when he gets the summons to come to the MoM (instead of Durham Dogstars togs) and changes into plain robes, and the paragraph where Hermione strips off her dress and Harry takes in her bare chest is repeated.

Alun Lewis

An amazing piece of writing. Well done!

Teri Minx


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