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Summer Won't Last pg. 19

I had a hard time deciding whether or not dialogue was actually necessary for this page.

I wanted them to have a sort of breathless realization that transcends "thinking". A kind of animal and pure state of mind where overthinking things can ruin the moment... but it felt strange to have a page without dialogue and I am not sure in my art enough to convey the sort of mindset they have, haha.

For the time being, I will put both up here. Hopefully with the context of the next few pages, I can decide which is the "final" page by the time I upload to social media.

Text and effects-free versions, as well as HD versions, are on their respective tier as usual.

Thank you for your support!!

Summer Won't Last pg. 19 Summer Won't Last pg. 19

Comments

Best friends turned sexy lovers. Classic

JohnWolfen

Dachi in full ecstacy arch with his head pressing into Levi's head/muzzle. Me thinks he just realized the nerd has skills.

dipstik subaru

They are hot

绝 星

Cute boys having a happy moment following their instincts

Lucidius

I would not have drawn this position if they weren't mostly underwater, haha. Awkward positions become way easier to maintain.

Bonfire Demon

Before I do, I have to say i prefer the textless version Also as much as I like this panel, irl this position is rather impractical imo :p

Incerun

textless ftw

Jarrod

It actually works great even without dialogue. Even more natural

Onyx Rose

Right now, it seems like I can only tell what Levi is thinking. I really hope to see things from Dachi's perspective in the future (I’d like to see Dachi speak more in this comic).I think I LIKE the dialogue one.

九號球No.⑨

Yeah, I think he'd be a little bit nervous, heart in his throat sort of, while also acknowledging that they're both waaay to deep to back out now, haha

Bonfire Demon

Haha, I'm glad you can see yourself in Levi! And thank you! :)

Bonfire Demon

Thanks a lot! 😊

Bonfire Demon

Don't melt away before you can read the rest of it! 😭

Bonfire Demon

Thank you! That means a lot :)

Bonfire Demon

Thank you for such a thought-out reply! I still enjoy the dialogue-free version a lot, but I feel much less regret posing the dialogue version too. I think how the page flows, with the added context of later pages, will be what ultimately decides which one makes it in.

Bonfire Demon

Thank you :)

Bonfire Demon

I agree that Levi is a person with a delicate and sensitive inner world.His internal conflicts and struggles need to be portrayed through some psychological descriptions.If I were him,I would be torn at this moment as well—whether to seize the moment for an all-out sexual encounter to completely merge with Dachi,or to maintain restraint and proceed gradually.Of course,after watching the plot once,the version without text is more suitable for us to project ourselves into it and savor it carefully.

Timespacetiger

Fine piece of work!

Atlas

I think the dialogue reinforces the emotion rather than detracts from it. From the way you composed it and the fact that's it's internal monologue, it feels like the words could be more like some narrator in his mind helping us (on the outside) understand. A panel with his expression contemplating what to do in the middle there would have messed up the flow like you were afraid to do, but to me the page with the little bit of dialogue help for us readers feels great.

JustEki

I think the small amount of dialogue works perfectly

naz

I loved it, it was a great idea to put both versions ❤️

Baroncito

I'm melting

Incerun

The expressions in this are so perfect

Zorin

I love both versions, but I'm leaning towards the one with text. Levi, like me, is a chronic over-thinker and it's cute to see his inner monologue 🙂 Either way, aaaaaaaaAAAAAAAAAA THEY'RE SO CUTE TOGETHER 😍😍

ArcboundWolf

I love them so much.

mixerbape

I think the pacing and expressions are so good that you don’t need the dialogue, personally.

Ollie


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