Ray Fox Chapter 2 WIP: Pages 6-14
Added 2025-02-21 02:28:55 +0000 UTC
Comments
I love this meeting with Liev. The rivalry feels more personal. And I like how Ray feels guilty about lying to Ally. You can see how the secret keeping is hurting him. Also nice throwback to the accidental shorts burning in the first chapter.
FurFist
2025-02-21 03:31:21 +0000 UTCThanks!
Scotty
2025-02-21 02:39:20 +0000 UTCI'm liking this setup way better than with your previous version! I can tell you put a lot of thought into this!
Daniel Frederick
2025-02-21 02:38:50 +0000 UTC
