Chapter 1: Pages 15-21 (Pep Talk)
Added 2024-01-01 23:45:51 +0000 UTCI apologize for the delay, I wanted these pages done 2 weeks ago, but with several dialogue changes coupled with the holidays, it took me forever to get these pages done LOL. Hopefully these pages are easier to read than the first batch. Here's also hoping I have a more consistent production as 2024 starts.
Oh, Also Happy New Year! Here's an image for you all to celebrate for those who haven't seen it
Comments
Yeah by Chapter 2, Ray's character went from irresponsible to highly analytical. And as time went on, I realized in order to keep Ray's character consistent I'd have to change up the context a bit in the new Chapter 1. I'm pleased with it and I'm glad to see you like it too!
Scotty
2024-01-02 21:23:26 +0000 UTCI also like how maturely Ray is taking his failures this time rather than make excuses. You can see that Ray's incident with the Arsenal was more out of inexperience than irresponsibly.
FurFist
2024-01-02 12:49:40 +0000 UTCNice catch there, noticing the slight change in their relationship! you're correct, they're more like a team now. They still mentor him, but Im insinuating here that they're in this together. And yeah with the Yak, haha. I had to throw a bone there for those who've been around since the beginning!
Scotty
2024-01-02 04:26:16 +0000 UTCThat makes me happy. ^^
Daniel Frederick
2024-01-02 01:20:38 +0000 UTCFeeling happy to see these new pages. I like how Liz and Jak act more like a team with Ray rather than mentors. I also laughed when we saw the yak from the original chapters. It was great to see Ray's first adventures
FurFist
2024-01-02 01:09:17 +0000 UTCDon’t worry Liz is still gentle as a dove. She’s just also as sharp as a serpent when need be. (Mostly with her little brother) she’s always been very sarcastic with Ray and Jak. Admittedly, I made her more so this time around.
Scotty
2024-01-02 00:32:23 +0000 UTCWhoops! 😂
Scotty
2024-01-02 00:30:39 +0000 UTCPage 8, last panel is supposed to be "Your blood pressure's really high". OTHERWISE, I think this is all going very well so far... Probably not; poor "nugget".
Billblok
2024-01-02 00:12:40 +0000 UTCI notice Liz has a new job. I guess it's to better justify the fact she's hanging out in Jak's gym! I kinda miss her being a school teacher, and it seems you've hardened her personality a little bit too- I'll trust it's for the best, but I'll miss the softer interpretation.
Daniel Frederick
2024-01-02 00:06:08 +0000 UTCI haven't completely finalized this, but likely not anymore. I want things to be a lot more simpler so its probably better this way that she's only a wellness coach. But she does have a degree to teach. So it's a goal of hers!
Scotty
2024-01-02 00:00:54 +0000 UTCHappy New Year to you too.
Lionoftheknight
2024-01-01 23:54:28 +0000 UTCIs Liz still a teacher?
Gally
2024-01-01 23:52:41 +0000 UTC
