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Chapter 45 re-write + Patron Roll

Hello there patrons. Two things. Firstly, I've done a pretty serious re-write of chapter 45. After some time and feedback, I felt like the victory of the Alliance was based on luck and Federation stupidity, rather than cunning and careful planning. I've decided to fix it, by altering a few things. I've changed Tanya's scene in chapter 43 slightly, to forshadow the Trade Federation fuel shortages and explain that draining the Fed reserves was a deliberate, long term plan done off screen in the intervening decade, and I've changed 45 pretty much entirely. A scene or two is the same, but almost the entire thing has been re-written. If you go back in this feed and re-read it, you'll see what I mean.

Also, some of you may have noticed I've gotten a bit slack with my patron credits at the end of each chapter. Putting together a list of new patrons has been quite the hassle, so if you want your name credited, you can add your own user name to the following list. That way, I can just copy paste the list to the bottom of each document. If your name is already on the list but you don't want it there, go ahead and delete it.

Thank you very much.

Chapter 46 coming soon.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VvzZNXJh985nDeziG0RxI7buCPa8kMet7b-KrRBLxew/edit?usp=sharing

Comments

There is still a missed mention of Dooku instead of Ky in the Ranroon invasion section. Personally I would recommend posting a new chapter and changing the title of the previous one to (Outdated), in future, so that we can better check differences. Otherwise, good work. Thanks for the chapter!

CMDR Dantae

Nice work, the rewrites great

sparkc


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