Demon lord chapter 2 p17-18
Added 2021-05-10 19:18:10 +0000 UTC2 week worth of update is here...
Another 2 page done my never ending 29 page nightmare continue.
As always mistake and grammar if you want to help me check it comment below.
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17.1.1 The Hero => Hero (?) 17.8.1 [Honey / Dear], I'm your wife. Don't you recognize me? 18.1.3 sixof our men => six men {"of our" is understood from context} 18.3.3 theycan => they can 18.4.1 but she a => but she is a 18.4.2-3 {"I don't even know your name" is somewhat redundant. Could drop it and just have him say, "My name is Otto, what's yours?"} 18.5.1 goin => going chruch => church Everyone at that chruch orphaned. => All the orphans at the church? is that's => is that
Asani
2021-05-11 00:35:40 +0000 UTCGood grief is "Daddy" ever a disturbing sight. Well rendered, my dude!
Asani
2021-05-11 00:35:22 +0000 UTCThe pages come across really well along with the emotion of what young Aria went through
Arbiter
2021-05-10 20:48:10 +0000 UTCYeah that’s a good question, this was the first stretch after the start of the story for part 2 where I was genuinely surprised about the direction the story was taking and asked questions.
MagicCobra911
2021-05-10 19:54:27 +0000 UTCOtto does look a good deal like Hero, I still wonder if he is related to him (maybe a father or Uncle) or if it’s just a coincidence?
MagicCobra911
2021-05-10 19:48:34 +0000 UTCIt's great times you add legit story and tragedy to stories. Puts extra substance than just hot tf art, which it still is.
M
2021-05-10 19:35:15 +0000 UTC@ibenz009 So what exactly was the plan for Aria's father? What would he accomplish by becoming an archdemon? More importantly, suppose he succeeded - How will he fight the Goddess and the Demon Lord?
Arthur Yeung
2021-05-10 19:34:01 +0000 UTCGod I feel so bad for Aria after all she's endured. It seems cruel she's being forced to become the same thing that ruined her life.
StarGazer
2021-05-10 19:21:35 +0000 UTC
