Demon lord chapter 2 P4-5
Added 2021-02-03 16:10:14 +0000 UTCThis week update is here.
Page 4 and 5 and monor edited on p3
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Comments
It could probably be either one, as in this context it's as much statement as question.
Benjamin Lawton
2021-02-07 15:58:45 +0000 UTC"Who knows?" should have a question mark.
spectria.limina
2021-02-07 15:33:08 +0000 UTCIn the first panel of page 4, Gilda's dialogue is missing some punctuation. It should be "Certainly, my lady."
spectria.limina
2021-02-07 15:32:38 +0000 UTCFor some reason the rest of the images won't load... But this is excellent :3
spectria.limina
2021-02-07 15:31:48 +0000 UTCThe various glow effects look really really good, and as do Demon Lord and the spell book materializing out of thin air. Capes may be a little silly, but they sure do convey an air of regal authority when done right like Demon Lord's is. Possible Corrections Did you mean to have Aria say "<b>the</b> Hero" at the top of page 5? Also, here's another version of the 4th panel for the sake of variety: If you really must know, his body and soul were fused with the untold generations of past Demon Lords to create the "me" you see before you. Who can say what parts of him truly remain though. I remember the adventures you had together, yet all I feel are his darkest desires <b>heh heh</b> As for the rest of his personality...
Asani
2021-02-03 22:31:39 +0000 UTCwooow
Stormfries
2021-02-03 18:32:43 +0000 UTCAdmittedly I did sort of wonder where the cape came from, I suppose the Demon Lord uses it for special occasionsπ. On another note I still found a couple of grammar errors on page five. The word fused should be used in place of fuse and create instead of created.
MagicCobra911
2021-02-03 17:33:58 +0000 UTCSome typos in the dialogue on Page 5, second panel from the bottom: (suggested corrections bolded) "If you really must know, the <b>remains</b> of his body and <b>soul have</b> been <b>fused</b> to the untold generations of Demon Lords all to <b>create the</b> "me" you see before you. "Who can say what parts remain though<b>?</b> I remember his adventure with you<b>, but</b> even then I'm not sure how much of his personality still <b>remains</b>. <i>heh heh</i> Maybe I'm just his <b>darkest</b> desires made manifest<b>? Who knows.</b>"
Benjamin Lawton
2021-02-03 16:55:58 +0000 UTCFantastic! The contrasting colors work really well!
Arbiter
2021-02-03 16:20:51 +0000 UTCWow, love the Demon Lord's cape. And Gilda is just the silliest and best servant.
StarGazer
2021-02-03 16:16:44 +0000 UTCYour work, as usual, is on top! How do you feel about this project, maybe you are already bored with it?
Alexey Stratulat
2021-02-03 16:13:35 +0000 UTCyou demonlewd
ZeroForever
2021-02-03 16:12:20 +0000 UTC
